Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct minor grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "parents and school teachers" is fine once).

예시: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and teachers. For example, my mother always reminded me to say “thank you” whenever I received a gift, so saying polite phrases became a habit.

제안: Correct grammatical errors and make the idea clearer with a topic sentence and one specific reason. Use linking words like "because" and avoid vague phrases such as "getting some."

예시: Yes, being polite is very important because it helps build relationships and creates a positive impression. For example, saying “thank you” after someone helps show appreciation and strengthens friendships and working relationships.

제안: This answer is generally good—clear topic sentence and relevant examples—but you can improve fluency by adding a linking word and one brief specific example. Keep sentences natural and error-free.

예시: We should be polite in formal situations, such as job interviews and business meetings, because it shows respect and creates a good impression. For instance, in an interview, polite language and good manners can make an employer view you more positively.

제안: Fix grammar and clarity: use past tense and clear phrasing. Provide a concise topic sentence and one specific action with a linking word. Explain briefly why it showed politeness.

예시: As a child, I tried to be polite by offering my seat to others on public transport. For example, when I saw an elderly person near a priority seat on the MTR, my mother taught me to give up my seat so they could sit comfortably.

× For example, my mother made me say thank you after a gift.

✓ For example, my mother made me say thank you after receiving a gift.

The original sentence uses 'after a gift' which is ungrammatical because 'after' needs a verb or noun phrase showing the action; 'after receiving a gift' correctly expresses the event in the past. Change clarifies the timing and maintains past-tense narrative.

× Yes, I think being polite is very important for any communications, especially for friend making friends or even at the work.

✓ Yes, I think being polite is very important in any communication, especially for making friends or even at work.

Use 'in' with 'communication' and singular 'communication' fits general sense. 'Friend making friends' is incorrect word order; use 'making friends'. 'At the work' should be 'at work' (no article). These preposition and word-order corrections improve idiomatic English.

× For example, we need to say thank you after getting some.

✓ For example, we need to say thank you after receiving something.

'Getting some' is vague and informal; the sentence lacks a clear object. Use 'receiving something' to make the action and object explicit and formal, matching the context.

× I remember that once when I get the MTR and there is applied priority seat and my mother told me that to share the priorities to all the people's.

✓ I remember once when I got on the MTR there was a priority seat, and my mother told me to give up my seat to others.

Multiple issues: 'get the MTR' should be past 'got on the MTR'; 'there is applied priority seat' is unnatural — use 'there was a priority seat'; 'my mother told me that to share the priorities to all the people's' is ungrammatical and uses incorrect plural/possessive. Use 'told me to give up my seat to others' to convey the intended meaning. Corrections align verb tenses and fix pronoun/plural errors.

× we need to say thank you after getting some.

✓ we need to say thank you after receiving something.

The informal 'some' lacks a clear referent; replacing with 'something' is a neutral pronoun that correctly refers to an unspecified item. This fixes pronoun vagueness and improves sentence clarity.