Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve coherence and grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, use linking words, correct singular/plural and article errors, and avoid fragmented sentences. Add one specific example to make the answer more concrete. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I learned politeness mainly at kindergarten from my teachers. For example, they taught us to say “thank you” when someone gave us something and to apologize if we were late. As a result, I practiced these habits every day and still use them now.

제안: Focus on clarity and accurate word choice: give a direct topic sentence, avoid awkward phrases (e.g., “very surely”, “good recycle”), and use linking words (therefore, because, for example). Provide a concrete reason or short example rather than vague statements about popularity.

예시: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it helps build respectful relationships. For example, when you politely thank or apologize to someone, they are more likely to respond kindly, which improves cooperation at work or school.

제안: Make the answer more specific and concise: start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “We should be polite in public and personal situations”), then give 1–2 specific occasions (work, public transport, family). Use linking words (for example, such as) and correct verb forms.

예시: We should be polite in many situations, such as at work, in public transport, and when visiting friends’ homes. For example, saying “please” on public transport and thanking a colleague after a meeting helps maintain good relationships.

제안: Correct grammar and reduce repetition: open with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb tense and articles, and give one brief, specific example of a situation where you used these words. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like “for example” or “also”.

예시: As a child I showed politeness mainly by using “please,” “sorry,” and “thank you.” For example, I always thanked my teachers when they gave me stickers and apologized to classmates if I accidentally bumped them during playtime.

× When we receive something from others, we have to say thank you to them.

✓ When we received something from others, we had to say thank you to them.

The context is about childhood (past). Use past tense 'received' and 'had to' to match timeframe. Suggestion: shift verbs to past when describing past habits.

× if we are late from something, we need to apologize for it first to let others know that we really feel sorry about being late.

✓ if we were late for something, we needed to apologize first to let others know that we really felt sorry for being late.

Use preposition 'late for' not 'late from'. Also adjust verb tenses to past to match narrative. Use 'apologize for' or 'feel sorry for'. Suggestion: use 'late for' and keep consistent past tense.

× However, some. Child failed to learn being polite since they were young, so as they grew up they behave not politely to others.

✓ However, some children failed to learn to be polite when they were young, so as they grew up they did not behave politely towards others.

Original has punctuation errors, incorrect singular/plural and awkward verb forms. 'Child' should be plural 'children'; use 'learn to be polite' rather than 'learn being polite'; change tense to past 'did not behave' and 'towards' for direction. Suggestion: fix punctuation, pluralize nouns, and use infinitive 'to be' after 'learn'.

× This is very surely to this question because being polite is such a social matter in the relationship.

✓ This is certainly true because being polite is an important social matter in relationships.

Awkward adverb placement and wrong word choices. 'Very surely to this question' is ungrammatical. Use 'certainly true' or 'very important'. Also 'relationship' should be plural or specified. Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'certainly true' and 'important social matter'.

× So if you are polite to others, others will be polite to you as a feedback and this might cultivate into a good.

✓ So if you are polite to others, others will be polite to you in return and this might cultivate a good relationship.

'as a feedback' is incorrect; use 'in return'. 'cultivate into a good' is incomplete — add 'relationship'. Suggestion: use 'in return' for reciprocity and complete noun phrases.

× and being polite is also being kind for yourself because when you say thank you and sorry to others often you might be become more popular.

✓ and being polite is also being kind to yourself because when you say thank you and sorry to others often you might become more popular.

Use 'kind to yourself' not 'for yourself'. Remove extra 'be' in 'might be become'. Suggestion: check prepositions after 'kind' and avoid redundant auxiliary verbs.

× I think we should behave very politely different locations.

✓ I think we should behave very politely in different locations.

Missing preposition 'in' before 'different locations'. Suggestion: remember to include location prepositions such as 'in', 'at', or 'on'.

× Since we are a community of human, we might interact with others every day, and when we interacting with others, we might be polite to them because it is very essential for us to build.

✓ Since we are a community of humans, we might interact with others every day, and when we interact with others, we should be polite to them because it is essential for us to build relationships.

Use plural 'humans' or 'human beings'. 'when we interacting' is missing auxiliary — should be 'when we interact'. 'build.' incomplete; add 'relationships'. Also modal consistency: 'should' fits better than 'might'. Suggestion: use base verb after 'when we' and complete the object.

× and if you say sorry or thank you to others often it will help you to get a better relationship.

✓ and if you say sorry or thank you to others often, it will help you build better relationships.

Slight wording; use 'build' rather than 'get', plural 'relationships' fits general statement. Add comma after introductory clause. Suggestion: prefer 'build relationships' for clarity.

× So these 3 words are the most used vocabulary when I was a child to show my polite to the others and I often say thank you to teachers or my parents when receiving something good from them and.

✓ So these three words were the most used vocabulary when I was a child to show politeness to others, and I often said thank you to teachers or my parents when I received something nice from them.

Switch to past tense 'were', 'said', 'received' to match childhood narrative. Use 'politeness' (noun) rather than 'my polite'. 'three' spelled out. Remove trailing 'and.' Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use correct noun forms for abstract concepts.

× Also, when interacting with my classmate at kindergarten, we often say please and say sorry if we hurt others.

✓ Also, when interacting with my classmates at kindergarten, we often said please and said sorry if we hurt others.

Narrative about childhood should be in past tense: 'classmates' plural, and 'said' past form. Suggestion: match tense and pluralize nouns where referring to multiple people.