Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (who taught you, what actions they used). Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition and filler sounds (uh). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. They taught me by example and by correcting my behavior when I was rude. For instance, my mother showed me how to say “please” and “thank you,” and my father explained why respect is important in family and school.

제안: Make your opinion clear and support it with a specific reason and a concrete example. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “polite,” “basic,” “social” not “applied” or “minus”) and linking words like “because” and “for example.” Avoid vague statements.

예시: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps people get along in public and at work. For example, polite behavior can prevent conflicts between colleagues and create a more pleasant workplace.

제안: Begin with a general statement about occasions for politeness, then give 2–3 specific situations using linking words (for example, when, such as). Avoid implying that politeness means passively accepting abuse; instead mention listening respectfully and responding calmly.

예시: We should be polite in many situations, such as at work, in public places, and with family. For example, when a supervisor criticizes your work, it is polite to listen calmly, ask questions to understand, and respond respectfully rather than becoming defensive.

제안: Answer with a clear topic sentence about specific actions you took, then support with 1–2 examples. Use correct words (e.g., “rude,” “avoid fights”) and avoid confusing phrasing. Keep sentences concise and relevant.

예시: As a child, I showed politeness by following adults' instructions and avoiding rude or aggressive behavior. For instance, I learned to wait my turn, speak softly in public, and apologize if I accidentally upset someone.

× 1st I follow the parents advice and the intentions, then I learn how to how to act, be polite. Uh, it is important in mind and I, I I'm very appreciated for my parents but I am now.

✓ First, I followed my parents' advice and intentions, then I learned how to act politely. It stayed in my mind, and I am very grateful to my parents even now.

Errors: incorrect adjective/adverb choice and awkward phrasing ('be polite' should be 'act politely'; 'appreciated for my parents' is wrong adjective use). Also tense consistency needed (childhood -> past). Suggestions: use adverb 'politely' to modify 'act'; use 'followed' and 'learned' for past actions; use 'grateful to' rather than 'appreciated for'. Use possessive 'parents'' for advice and clear clause ordering.

× Yes, I think so because being applied is a basical minus in a public space. For example Maybe other employees will hate them without planning.

✓ Yes, I think so because politeness is a basic necessity in public spaces. For example, other people may dislike someone who is impolite without realizing it.

Errors: 'being applied' and 'basical minus' are incorrect adjective/adverb and noun choices. 'Applied' is wrong form; use noun 'politeness'. 'Basical minus' is not English; use 'basic necessity' or 'important'. 'Employees will hate them without planning' is unclear and uses wrong pronoun and verb; replace with 'other people may dislike someone...'. Suggestions: choose correct noun forms and simpler, clear expressions; ensure pronouns refer clearly.

× I think it's when we are scolded by supervisors. First we have to see my behavior and act, then I have to improve it. So we have to accept all what they said.

✓ I think we should be polite when we are being corrected by supervisors. First, we should observe our behavior and act accordingly, then we should improve it. We should accept what they say.

Errors: mixed tense and person and modal misuse. 'Are scolded' passive is acceptable but 'are being corrected' is more natural; 'we have to see my behavior' mixes 'we' and 'my'. Use consistent subject 'we' and modal 'should' for advice. 'All what they said' is ungrammatical; use 'what they say' or 'everything they say'. Suggestions: maintain consistent subject and tense, use 'should' for recommendations, and use 'what they say' for reported content.

× The most important thing was just to follow others and do not do very lude behavior. It is important to show others that I don't want to fight you and I want to get arguably, get arguments.

✓ The most important thing was to follow others and not behave rudely. It is important to show others that I do not want to fight and that I want to avoid arguments.

Errors: 'do not do very lude behavior' is awkward and uses incorrect adjective 'lude' (should be 'rude') and wrong structure; use 'not behave rudely'. 'I don't want to fight you' is too direct for general statement; use 'fight' without 'you'. 'I want to get arguably, get arguments' is nonsensical; intended meaning is likely 'avoid arguments'. Suggestions: use correct adjective 'rude', form adverb 'rudely' with 'behave', avoid addressing 'you' when speaking generally, and use clear verbs like 'avoid arguments'.