Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, avoid repetition, and use clearer sentence structures with appropriate linking words. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (for example, particular behaviors your parents or teachers emphasized) and finish with a brief concluding remark. Pay attention to grammar (subject-verb agreement and verb forms) and natural phrasing.

예시: I learned politeness mainly from my parents, who always emphasized saying “please” and “thank you” and showing respect to elders. In school, my teachers reinforced this by encouraging polite behaviour during class and group work. These repeated lessons and daily practice helped politeness become a natural part of my behaviour.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Correct grammar errors (subject-verb agreement, singular/plural, and word choice). Use linking words (for example, moreover, for instance) to connect points and avoid vague phrasing like “love child.”

예시: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it makes daily interactions smoother and demonstrates respect for others. For example, in my culture, people greet elders first and use polite language during family gatherings, which helps maintain harmony. Therefore, practising politeness improves relationships and reduces misunderstandings.

× Basically everything I have learned it's usually from my parents.

✓ Basically, everything I have learned has usually been from my parents.

The original mixes present perfect with an incorrect contraction 'it's' referring to 'everything I have learned.' Use present perfect passive 'has been' to link past learning to the present. Also add a comma after 'Basically' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'has usually been' or simply 'usually comes' depending on style.

× Also as the life grows as I passed my school, my experience have also helped me a lot to gain more politeness in my nature.

✓ Also, as I grew up and finished school, my experiences have also helped me a lot to become more polite by nature.

Multiple issues: 'as the life grows' is incorrect idiom and tense; use 'as I grew up' (past). 'as I passed my school' is ungrammatical; use 'finished school' or 'passed school' depending on dialect. Subject 'experience' should be plural 'experiences' to match 'have.' 'Politeness in my nature' is awkward; use 'become more polite by nature.' Suggestions: simplify to 'As I grew up and finished school, my experiences helped me become more polite.'

× What strikes me is that being polite often smooths interactions and show respect for other people feeling.

✓ What strikes me is that being polite often smooths interactions and shows respect for other people's feelings.

Compound verbs joined by 'and' must agree with the singular subject 'being polite.' Use 'shows' not 'show.' Also 'other people feeling' needs possessive and plural noun: 'other people's feelings.' Suggestion: always match verb number to subject and use possessive for people.

× If I talk about my tradition and cultural beliefs, my parents have already taught me to respect each other, respect the elders and love child.

✓ If I talk about my traditions and cultural beliefs, my parents taught me to respect others, to respect elders, and to love children.

Errors: 'my tradition' should be plural 'my traditions' or 'my tradition' with determiners; 'my parents have already taught me' is acceptable but simple past 'taught' fits narrative. 'Respect each other' implies peers; better 'respect others.' 'Respect the elders' is wordy; 'respect elders' is natural. 'Love child' is ungrammatical; use plural 'children.' Use parallel infinitive structure 'to respect, to respect, and to love' for clarity. Suggestion: use plural nouns and consistent verb forms.

× So basically being polite is very important.

✓ So basically, being polite is very important.

This sentence is mostly correct grammatically. Added a comma after 'So basically' for natural speech pause. No singular/plural change needed. Included because 'basically' placement and punctuation improve clarity.

× I learned to be polite as a child from my parents.

✓ I learned to be polite as a child from my parents.

This sentence is grammatically correct in past tense and fits the context. No change needed. Included to indicate reviewed and correct.