Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 발음과 유창성: 불필요한 반복(예: "I think, uh, I think")과 주저(uh)가 눈에 띕니다. 문장 끝의 단어 선택 오류("fairies" 대신 "phrases" 또는 "polite habits")를 고쳐야 합니다. 구조와 내용: 주제문(부모가 가르침)과 구체적 지원(정정, 모범, 식사 예절)을 잘 제시했으나 연결어 사용이 미흡합니다. 자연스럽고 간결하게 2~3문장으로 정리하세요. 어휘: "corrected my words" 대신 더 자연스러운 표현("corrected my manners/phrasing")을 사용하면 좋습니다. 개선 팁: 말하기 전 빠르게 문장을 머릿속으로 정리해 불필요한 반복을 줄이고, 끝 단어를 확인하여 의미에 맞는 어휘를 쓰세요.

예시: My parents taught me to be polite from a young age. They corrected my manners and set a good example, for instance by making me say “please” and “thank you” at the table, so those polite habits have stayed with me.

제안: 유창성 및 명료성: 많은 반복("at at the at the", "is is")과 단어 오용("peoples lives with friends", "test him")으로 의사 전달이 불명확합니다. 구조: 주제문을 제시했으나 구체적 이유나 예시가 모호하게 표현되었습니다. 연결어 사용이 거의 없고 문장이 의미적으로 흐트러져 이해하기 어렵습니다. 어휘: "important" 이유를 설명할 때 적절한 동사와 명사를 사용하세요(예: "maintain good relationships", "create a respectful environment"). 개선 팁: 문장 하나에 하나의 아이디어를 담고, 이유를 1~2개로 제한해 명확하게 말하세요. 천천히 말해 발음과 단어 선택을 점검하세요.

예시: Yes, I believe politeness is very important because it helps maintain good relationships and creates a respectful environment. For example, being courteous at school or work can prevent conflicts and make communication smoother.

× So I still use those fairies now.

✓ So I still use those phrases now.

The student used 'fairies' (a plural noun meaning mythical beings) instead of the intended word 'phrases'. This is a vocabulary choice error rather than strict grammar, but it functions like an article/word error in context. Suggestion: replace 'fairies' with 'phrases' to correctly refer to polite expressions. Also ensure 'those' correctly marks plural noun: 'those phrases' is correct.

× I think being polite is very important, yeah, at at the at the school and when peoples lives with friends and in the company in the communi community, the polite is is the way that we can test him.

✓ I think being polite is very important, for example at school, when people live with friends, and in the community. Politeness is the way we can treat others.

This sentence has multiple issues. 'at at the at the school' is repetitive/dysfluency; remove extras and use 'at school'. 'peoples lives with friends' contains incorrect plural noun 'peoples' and wrong verb form; use 'people live with friends'. 'in the company in the communi community' is confusing and repetitive; use 'in the community' or 'at work' depending on meaning. 'the polite is is the way that we can test him' has article misuse and pronoun/reference errors: 'the polite' is incorrect noun form; use 'politeness'. 'is is' is duplicated; remove extra 'is'. 'test him' wrongly refers to a person and 'test' likely intended 'treat' or 'judge'; based on context, 'treat others' fits. Suggestions: simplify into two clearer sentences and ensure subject-verb agreement (people live), correct noun forms (politeness), and correct pronoun/reference (others).