Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 명확하고 자연스러운 문장을 사용하세요. 현재 답변은 문법 오류(예: 'mentally', 'many parents', 'shut', 'lubish', 'politinus')와 어휘 선택의 문제가 있어 이해하기 어렵습니다. 먼저 주제문으로 시작한 뒤 한두 개의 구체적 경험을 시간 순서대로 설명하고, 연결어로 이유를 덧붙이세요. 예: 'When I was a child, my parents taught me to be polite by…' 형태로 시작하고, 'for example', 'because' 같은 연결어를 사용해 설명을 확장하세요. 또한 불필요한 중복을 피하고 문장 수를 3~4문장으로 유지하세요.

예시: When I was a child, my parents taught me to be polite by showing respect for nature and other people. For example, when we climbed Nemo Mountain in Canada, they always reminded me not to leave any rubbish behind. Because of those lessons, I learned that being polite also means taking care of the environment and behaving considerately around animals and plants.

제안: 의견을 명확히 표현하고 그 이유들을 논리적으로 연결하세요. 현재 문장은 의미 전달이 불분명하고 어휘 사용 오류('loving it', 'keeps arguments playing')가 있습니다. 먼저 직접적인 주제문(예: 'Yes, I think being polite is very important.')으로 시작한 뒤, 이유를 1~2개 제시하고 각각을 연결어('because', 'for example', 'as a result')로 이어 구체적인 예를 덧붙이세요. 문장은 간결하게 2~3문장으로 구성하세요.

예시: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps people build trust and maintain good relationships. For example, polite behavior can prevent misunderstandings and reduce conflicts, so people are more willing to cooperate and communicate.

× I learned to be polite mentally from many parents.

✓ I learned to be polite from my parents when I was young.

The preposition 'from' is correct but the placement and word 'mentally' are awkward. Use 'from my parents' to indicate source and remove 'mentally' because politeness is taught, not a mental location. Also combine time phrase for clarity.

× When I was young, we visited Nemo Mountain in Canada and my parents told me not to shut or leave any lubish behind.

✓ When I was young, we visited Nemo Mountain in Canada and my parents told me not to leave any rubbish behind.

The pronoun use is fine but 'shut' is incorrect; 'leave' is the correct verb. 'lubish' is a misspelling of 'rubbish'. Keep pronouns consistent ('we' and 'my parents') and use the correct verb and noun.

× I climbed the mountain and so flowers tree and raccoons.

✓ I climbed the mountain and saw flowers, trees, and raccoons.

This sentence has structural and word choice errors. 'so' should be 'saw' (past tense of 'see'), 'tree' should be plural 'trees' to match list, and items need commas. Ensure correct past tense and plural forms.

× So politinus means respecting nature too.

✓ So 'politeness' means respecting nature too.

'Politinus' is not an English word. Use the noun 'politeness'. Quotation marks here indicate the concept. Ensure correct noun form to convey meaning.

× Yes, very polite people build better relationships because nobody wants to be around someone loving it also keeps arguments playing.

✓ Yes, very polite people build better relationships because nobody wants to be around someone who is rude; being polite also helps prevent arguments.

The original sentence has multiple structure and word choice errors. 'someone loving it' is incorrect; use 'someone who is rude' or similar. 'it also keeps arguments playing' is unclear; replace with 'being polite also helps prevent arguments'. Use a semicolon or conjunction to join related ideas and correct verb forms.