Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 발음과 단어 선택에서 많은 오류가 있으며, 문장이 불명확하고 논리적 연결이 약합니다. 우선 어휘 오류(예: politically → politely, mentally→ ? 불필요), 그리고 의미가 불분명한 표현들(예: shut or rip any lubbish behind) 을 바로잡아야 합니다. 개선을 위해: 1) 핵심 주제(부모에게서 예의를 배움)를 먼저 명확한 주제문으로 말하세요. 2) 구체적인 상황(예: 가족과 산을 등반하면서 쓰레기를 버리지 말라고 배움)을 한두 개의 간결한 문장으로 덧붙이세요. 3) 연결어(when, because, so)를 사용해 문장들 사이의 흐름을 매끄럽게 하세요. 4) 최대 3~4문장으로 간결하게 말하고, 어려운 단어 대신 상황에 맞는 쉬운 단어를 사용하세요.

예시: I learned to be polite from my parents. For example, when we visited a mountain in Canada, they told me not to leave any rubbish behind. Because of that, I grew up respecting nature and other people’s property.

제안: 의견은 제시했으나 단어 선택과 문장 구조에 문제가 있어 의미가 흐려집니다(예: political→polite, lude→rude). 개선을 위해: 1) 직접적인 주제문으로 시작하세요(예: Yes, being polite is very important.). 2) 이유를 1~2개 구체적으로 제시하세요(관계 유지, 갈등 완화 등). 3) 이유들 사이에 연결어(because, moreover, therefore)를 사용하세요. 4) 단어 선택에 주의하고 문장을 2~3개로 간결히 유지하세요.

예시: Yes, being polite is very important. It helps people build and maintain better relationships because others feel respected. Also, politeness can prevent or calm arguments, making communication more constructive.

× I learned to be politically mentally from my parents.

✓ I learned to be polite and well-mannered from my parents.

The student used the adverbs 'politically' and 'mentally' incorrectly; the intended meaning is the adjective 'polite' and the compound adjective 'well-mannered'. Use adjectives to describe a person's behavior. Suggestion: replace incorrect adverbs with the correct adjectives or adjective phrases ('polite', 'well-mannered').

× When I was young, we visited the Nemo Mountain in Canada and my parents told me not to shut or rip any lubbish behind, I climbed the mountain and saw flowers trees and lacoons, so polytechnists means respecting nature too.

✓ When I was young, we visited Nemo Mountain in Canada, and my parents told me not to throw away or rip any rubbish behind; I climbed the mountain and saw flowers, trees, and raccoons, so politeness also means respecting nature.

Multiple errors: incorrect use of the definite article 'the' before proper mountain name (use no article for specific names like Nemo Mountain); incorrect verbs 'shut' and 'rip' used instead of 'throw away' and 'rip' combined with 'rubbish' (spelling and word choice); run-on sentence needs punctuation; missing commas between items in a list; 'lacoons' is misspelling of 'raccoons'; 'polytechnists' and 'politeness' confusion and wrong word form. Suggestions: remove unnecessary 'the' for named places, use correct verbs and nouns ('throw away rubbish'), fix spelling, and split into clearer clauses.

× Do you think being polite is very important?

✓ Do you think being polite is very important?

This sentence is correct; no grammatical change needed. It uses the adjective 'polite' appropriately. Leave as is.

× Yes, very political people build a better relationship because nobody wants to be around someone lude.

✓ Yes, very polite people build better relationships because nobody wants to be around someone rude.

The student used 'political' instead of 'polite' and 'lude' instead of 'rude'. 'Political' is unrelated; 'polite' is the correct adjective to describe courteous people. Also use plural 'relationships' after 'build' for general meaning. Suggestion: replace incorrect words with 'polite' and 'rude' and use plural noun for general statements.

× It also keeps arguments clean.

✓ It also helps keep arguments calm and civil.

'Keeps arguments clean' is awkward and not idiomatic. Use a verb phrase 'helps keep' and adjectives 'calm and civil' to convey the intended meaning clearly. Suggestion: use idiomatic collocations like 'keep arguments calm' or 'prevent arguments from getting heated'.