Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, reduce filler words (umm, uh), and provide one or two specific supporting details with linking words (for example, because, so). Keep your answer under five sentences. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., “I just did the same as my family” not “do the same thing”).

예시: I learned politeness naturally from my family and teachers. For example, when my mother bowed to my homeroom teacher, I copied her behavior because it felt respectful. Over time, these repeated actions taught me how to behave politely in different situations.

제안: Answer directly and clearly: begin with a concise opinion sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), avoid unclear phrases (e.g., “blindness is compulsory”), remove fillers, and use linking words to connect ideas (for instance, because, therefore). Provide one clear example and correct collocations (e.g., “politeness is important,” “not compulsory”).

예시: Yes, I think politeness is important because it shows respect and helps relationships. For example, instead of only saying “thank you,” people in my culture often bow to show appreciation physically. Therefore, politeness can convey feelings that words alone sometimes cannot.

× How I think, umm, I learned it really naturally because I think I just umm, do the same thing, uh, as my, umm, my family or teachers in my school, for example, umm, when my mother bows.

✓ I think I learned it really naturally because I just did the same things as my family and my teachers at school; for example, when my mother bowed to my homeroom teacher, I did the same.

Error type: incorrect use of verb forms and tense consistency (Verb + -ing form and Past tense). The student uses present tense verbs (do, bows) while describing past learning. Use past tense (did, bowed) for past events. Also 'do the same thing as my family or teachers in my school' is awkward; use plural 'things' and 'family and my teachers at school' for clarity. Suggestion: keep tense consistent when recounting past events and match verb forms to the time described.

× To my homeroom teacher, I just do so as well.

✓ When my mother bowed to my homeroom teacher, I did the same.

The original sentence has awkward word order and tense mismatch. 'To my homeroom teacher' as a sentence-initial phrase is unclear; combine with the previous clause to show the action and use past tense 'did' for a past habit. Suggestion: place time and object phrases next to the verb and keep tense consistent.

× And yeah, it's not kind of learning.

✓ And yeah, it wasn't really like learning.

The phrase 'not kind of learning' is ungrammatical and vague. Use 'wasn't really like learning' to express that the process did not feel like formal learning. This corrects adjective/adverb usage and makes the meaning clear.

× Yes, I think politeness is important for us, but I don't say blindness is compulsory thing or kind of a obligation.

✓ Yes, I think politeness is important, but I wouldn't say being polite is a compulsory thing or an obligation.

Errors: 'blindness' is likely a mispronunciation or wrong word; replaced with 'being polite'. Article and quantifier errors: 'a compulsory thing' and 'kind of a obligation' are incorrect; use 'a' before 'compulsory thing' and 'an obligation' because 'obligation' begins with a vowel sound. Also 'I don't say' is unnatural about opinions — 'I wouldn't say' fits better. Suggestion: choose the correct noun and use appropriate articles ('a'/'an') and idiomatic expressions.

× But instead, I'm sure being polite is uh, effect an effective way to show the appreciation.

✓ Instead, I'm sure being polite is an effective way to show appreciation.

Problems: unnecessary pronoun 'the' before 'appreciation' and word order 'effect an effective' is incorrect. Use the article 'an' before 'effective' and drop 'the' unless referring to a specific appreciation. Suggestion: simplify to 'an effective way to show appreciation.'

× So if we want to say thank you not only with words.

✓ So if we want to say thank you, not only with words,

This is a sentence fragment: it lacks a main clause to complete the thought. It should be connected to the next idea (e.g., 'we can bow or use some other polite gesture'). Suggestion: combine with the following sentence or finish the clause to make a complete sentence.

× Or I mean, orally, we can bow or something polite.

✓ Or I mean, verbally we can say it, or we can bow or do something polite.

Use 'verbally' instead of 'orally' for speaking in everyday contexts; also the sentence needs parallel structure: 'say it' (verb) vs 'bow' (verb) or 'do something polite' to match forms. Suggestion: maintain parallel verbs and choose the correct adverb.

× Yeah, to show it physically.

✓ Yes, to show it physically.

Minor issue: 'Yeah' is informal; 'Yes' is more appropriate in a formal answer. The preposition 'to' is fine but ensure the phrase attaches to the previous clause: 'we can bow to show it physically.' Suggestion: attach this phrase to the prior sentence for completeness and use appropriate register.