Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify and correct grammar, eliminate unclear words, and give a concise structure: start with a direct topic sentence (where you learned politeness), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep to under five sentences.

예시: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and at school. For example, my parents taught me to say “please” and “thank you,” and my teachers reinforced polite behaviour through classroom rules. As a result, politeness became a daily habit at home and at school.

제안: Make the answer more specific and varied: begin with a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then add one or two concrete reasons or an example using linking words (for example, because/for instance). Vary vocabulary (e.g., respectful, considerate) and avoid repeating the same idea.

예시: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows respect and helps build good relationships. For instance, polite behaviour makes communication smoother at work and prevents misunderstandings, so people are more willing to cooperate.

× When I was all I was taught by murder and from school how to be a good person and polite person.

✓ When I was a child, I was taught by my parents and at school how to be a good and polite person.

Original sentence has missing and incorrect words and wrong word order (sentence structure error). 'When I was all' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'When I was a child'. 'taught by murder' is an incorrect/unrelated word; context requires 'my parents'. The phrase 'and from school' should be repositioned as 'and at school'. Also combine 'good person and polite person' into 'good and polite person' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: identify correct nouns (child, parents), use proper preposition 'at school', and simplify parallel adjectives.

× So I learn these things from my parents and.

✓ So I learned these things from my parents.

The sentence is incomplete and uses the wrong tense. The context asks about childhood (past), so use past tense 'learned' (Past tense issue, but primarily sentence structure because it's incomplete). Remove the dangling conjunction 'and' at the end to complete the sentence. Suggestion: choose correct past tense verb and finish the sentence without trailing conjunctions.

× Yes, I do think being polite is very important because we should be good with people and have good behaviour.

✓ Yes, I think being polite is very important because we should be kind to people and have good behavior.

'I do think' is grammatically acceptable but 'I think' is more natural; that's a style choice. More importantly, 'be good with people' is awkward; use 'be kind to people' or 'treat people well'. 'Have good behaviour' is non-idiomatic in American English; use 'have good behavior' or 'behave well'. Verb tense 'think' is present which matches the question, so keep present tense. Suggestion: use natural collocations ('be kind to', 'behavior') and prefer 'I think' for concise speech.

× So it is very important for all people and it shows respect.

✓ So it is very important for everyone, and it shows respect.

'All people' is grammatically acceptable but 'everyone' is more natural. Add a comma before 'and' when joining two independent clauses. The phrase 'it shows respect' is fine but clarifying what 'it' refers to (being polite) could improve clarity. Suggestion: use 'everyone' and proper punctuation to join clauses clearly.