Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise, and more specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two brief supporting details with linking words. Avoid filler words like "umm" and correct verb forms and prepositions (e.g., "I learned" and "from my parents").

예시: I learned to be polite in two main ways. First, I observed how people around me treated each other, so I picked up polite phrases and gestures. Second, my parents taught me directly by correcting my manners and explaining why politeness matters.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and then support it with two specific reasons linked logically. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "shows respect" not "shows the way they respect them") and avoid vague phrases like "they will favour us more."

예시: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it shows respect for other people and helps create a pleasant atmosphere. For example, polite behaviour can make strangers feel at ease and can improve relationships at work or school.

× I learn in a two ways.

✓ I learned in two ways.

The student used present tense 'learn' but is describing past childhood learning; use past tense 'learned'. Also 'a two ways' is incorrect article/quantifier usage; remove 'a'. Use 'two ways' rather than 'a two ways'.

× UMM I learn as I observe people treating with each other and I learned by through my parents.

✓ Um, I learned by observing how people treated each other, and I also learned from my parents.

Mixed tenses and incorrect verb forms: 'learn' should be past 'learned'. 'Observe' should be gerund 'observing' after 'learned by'. 'treating with each other' is incorrect; correct is 'treated each other' or 'how people treated each other'. 'by through my parents' is redundant; use 'from my parents'. Maintain past tense consistently.

× They teach me about the politeness and UMM told me to do anything that they seems to be polite.

✓ They taught me about politeness and told me to do anything that seemed polite.

Tense and agreement errors: 'teach' should be past 'taught' to match past context. 'the politeness' is incorrect article use; use 'politeness' without 'the'. 'they told me to do anything that they seems to be polite' has subject-verb agreement ('they seems' should be 'seemed') and incorrect referent 'they' (use 'seemed' referring to actions). Rephrase to 'anything that seemed polite.'

× Yes I do, because being polite shows other people the way they respect them and it also makes them feel more comfortable and they will favour us more.

✓ Yes, I do, because being polite shows respect for other people, makes them feel more comfortable, and they will favor us more.

Awkward and incorrect phrasing: 'shows other people the way they respect them' is unclear and uses incorrect pronouns. Better: 'shows respect for other people.' Remove redundant 'it also' and combine verbs for parallel structure: 'shows..., makes..., and...' American spelling 'favor' used here; 'favour' acceptable in British English. Maintain present tense as a general truth.