Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., "be polite," "to others," and tense/word order). Avoid filler words like "uh" and repeated words.

예시: I learned to be polite mainly from my family and teachers. For example, my mother always reminded me to say "please" and "thank you," and my primary school teachers praised good manners, which encouraged me to behave respectfully.

제안: Give a direct opinion then support it with clear, specific reasons using linking phrases. Fix grammar and word choice (e.g., "to have better interactions," "people are judging you"). Remove repetitions like "whatever whatever" and use one or two concrete examples or consequences.

예시: Yes, I believe being polite is very important because it makes communication smoother and builds trust. For instance, polite behaviour at work can improve teamwork, and when you show respect to others, they are more likely to treat you respectfully in return.

× Obviously from my mom and my family and also my teachers, uh, because when I was a kid, uh, my mom always told me you need to behave well and you need to polite to the others and teachers taught me really good.

✓ Obviously from my mom, my family and also my teachers, because when I was a kid my mom always told me you need to behave well and you need to be polite to others, and my teachers taught me very well.

Errors detected: missing commas for clarity and parallel listing; incorrect use of 'to' before 'polite' (adjective requires 'be polite'); unnecessary article 'the' before 'others'; 'teachers taught me really good' uses adjective 'good' instead of adverb 'well' and lacks subject 'my' before 'teachers'. Suggestions: 1) Use 'be polite' after 'need to'. 2) Omit 'the' with 'others'. 3) Use 'my teachers' for clarity. 4) Use 'well' (adverb) to modify 'taught'. 5) Add commas to separate items in a list and remove filler 'uh'. Keep tense consistent (past) as the sentence describes childhood actions.

× I mean being polite so they are keep respecting you.

✓ I mean if you are polite, they will keep respecting you.

Errors detected: incorrect clause structure and pronoun/auxiliary sequence: 'they are keep respecting you' is ungrammatical. Also missing conditional connector 'if' to show cause-effect. Suggestions: 1) Use a conditional structure: 'if you are polite' or 'being polite' followed by comma. 2) Use correct future or progressive verb form: 'they will keep respecting you' or 'they will continue to respect you.' This keeps meaning and tense consistent.

× Yeah, I do think good manners help us to to be better interaction with each other and living respectful life because other peoples are judging you whatever whatever you are doing.

✓ Yeah, I do think good manners help us have better interactions with each other and live a respectful life because other people judge you for whatever you do.

Errors detected: double 'to' ('to to be'), incorrect noun/verb forms and count: 'interaction' should be plural 'interactions' or use 'interact'; 'living respectful life' should be 'live a respectful life'; 'other peoples' incorrect plural of 'people'; unnecessary continuous 'are judging' better as simple present 'judge' for general truth; 'whatever whatever you are doing' redundant. Suggestions: 1) Remove duplicate 'to'. 2) Use 'help us have' or 'help us to have' and plural 'interactions' or 'interact better'. 3) Use 'live a respectful life'. 4) Use 'other people' not 'peoples'. 5) Use simple present for general statements: 'other people judge you for whatever you do.'