Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and grammar (e.g., "I tried" not "I try") and avoid repetition. For example say who you copied, what specific polite behaviors you copied, and why that influenced you.

예시: I learned to be polite by copying older family members. For example, I used to watch my brother and copy how he greeted guests and said "please" and "thank you," which helped me form good habits as a child.

제안: Give a direct opinion then support it with clear, specific reasons and correct grammar. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example", "therefore") and avoid repetition. Explain one or two consequences of politeness or rudeness with a concise example.

예시: Definitely — I think politeness is very important because it helps people get along and build trust. For example, if someone is rude at work, colleagues may avoid collaborating with them, so being polite improves teamwork and relationships.

× He was a most polite people I.

✓ He was the most polite person I knew.

The original uses the definite article incorrectly with 'most' and uses 'people' (plural) for a single person. Use 'the' with superlative 'most' and 'person' for a single individual. Also add 'knew' to complete the clause: 'the most polite person I knew.'

× Among my I knew.

✓ Among those I knew.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and missing a noun after 'my' and a clear subject. Replace with 'Among those I knew' to indicate people among the speaker's acquaintances. Ensure the fragment connects to previous sentence or combine: 'He was the most polite person among those I knew.'

× I try to mimic the older people.

✓ I tried to mimic older people.

The question asks about childhood (past), so past tense 'tried' matches context. Also 'the older people' is misleading; 'older people' or 'older siblings' is more natural. Use plural 'people' without 'the' here.

× For example, I used to mimic my brother.

✓ For example, I used to mimic my brother.

This sentence is correct for past habitual action. No grammatical change needed; keep as is. However, ensure it follows the previous sentence: 'I tried to mimic older people. For example, I used to mimic my brother.'

× Definitely I think so because being polite is helps people to get along with other people.

✓ Definitely, I think so because being polite helps people get along with others.

Remove the unnecessary auxiliary 'is' before 'helps' (it's not a continuous form). Use 'helps' (third person singular present) and the idiomatic phrase 'get along with others.' Also add a comma after 'Definitely.'

× For example if people not being polite, other people think, think, hate them.

✓ For example, if people are not polite, others may dislike them.

The original lacks the auxiliary 'are' for the negative present ('are not polite'). Collapse repeated 'think, think' and replace 'hate' with 'dislike' for a more measured expression; include 'may' to indicate possibility. Use 'others' instead of 'other people' for conciseness and correct grammar.