Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 总体回答内容相关且直接，但存在重复、用词不当和表达不够精炼的问题。改进建议： 1) 开头用一句清晰的主题句直接回答问题，例如“I learned it mainly from my parents.” 这样更简洁自然。 2) 避免重复（如“polite politeness”），用更恰当的词汇和短语描述具体行为，例如“greet people, make small talk, and say thank you”。 3) 增加一两个具体例子并用连接词（for example, for instance, because）使回答更连贯，例如描述父母何时如何礼貌待人以及你如何模仿他们。 4) 控制长度在3–4句内，保持流畅自然。 练习时可反复朗读并替换同义词提高词汇多样性。

예시: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. They often greeted neighbors, made small talk, and always said thank you to others. For example, whenever guests visited, my parents would stand up to welcome them and introduce everyone, so I copied their behavior.

제안: 回答主题明确但存在严重词汇和表达错误，影响意思传达。改进建议： 1) 避免严重词汇错误（如“pregnant”误用），应使用“polite”。 2) 开头用一句简洁的观点句，例如“Yes, I think politeness is very important.” 3) 提供1–2个具体原因并用连接词（because, so, therefore）衔接，使逻辑清晰，例如“because it helps build relationships and create opportunities.” 4) 用更自然的结尾句总结观点，避免口语化或含糊的短语（如“impress off or some offers”）。 5) 注意语法和搭配练习，使用常见表达如“make a good impression”或“open up opportunities”。

예시: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it helps build good relationships and makes communication smoother. For example, polite behavior can make a good impression on teachers or employers, which may lead to better opportunities.

× When they met someone else, they would say hello or have a small chat with others to show their respect and polite politeness.

✓ When they met someone, they would say hello or have a small chat with others to show their respect and politeness.

原句中“polite politeness”是冗余且不自然的表达，重复使用形容词和名词。应使用名词“politeness”或形容词“polite”配合名词，但不能同时重复。另外“someone else”在此语境中多余，简化为“someone”更自然。建议使用单一、恰当的修饰词，避免重复。

× Yes, I think being pregnant is very crucial because social interaction is very important in our daily life.

✓ Yes, I think being polite is very crucial because social interaction is very important in our daily life.

原句把“polite”(有礼貌)误写为“pregnant”(怀孕)，这属于用词错误（形容词使用不当），改变了句意。应还原为“being polite”。建议写作时注意拼写和词义，确认形容词是否与上下文匹配。

× If we can show respect to others, we'll get a lot more chances to impress off or some offers, right?

✓ If we can show respect to others, we'll get a lot more chances to make a good impression or receive some offers, right?

原句中“impress off”是不正确的搭配，且“some offers”用法虽可理解但不够自然。应使用固定短语“make a good impression”表示“留下好印象”，以及“receive some offers”或“get some offers”表示“获得一些机会/报价”。此外注意动词和介词搭配的正确性。