Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Speak with correct grammar and a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and pronouns are needed (e.g., “was” → “were”, “our” → “we” or “my”). Avoid repetition and be concise. For example, start with “I learned to be polite mainly at school,” then explain who taught you and give a brief example.

예시: I learned to be polite mainly at school and at home. For example, my teachers taught us to say “please” and “thank you,” and my parents modeled respectful behavior by listening carefully when others spoke. Because of this guidance, I try to treat teachers and family members with kindness and respect.

제안: Give a direct opinion first, then add a specific reason and an example using linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example,” “so”). Use more natural phrases (e.g., “workplace” instead of “working fields”) and avoid repeating “so” multiple times. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I think being polite is very important, especially in the workplace, because we interact with many different people. For example, showing respect to colleagues and supervisors helps build trust and makes teamwork more effective. Therefore, polite behavior can improve both relationships and job performance.

× We normally learned our attitude when we was primary school students and secondary students.

✓ We normally learned our manners when we were primary and secondary school students.

Subject-verb agreement: 'we' is plural so use 'were' not 'was'. Also 'attitude' is awkward; 'manners' fits context. Simplify 'primary school students and secondary students' to 'primary and secondary school students' for natural word order. Suggestion: Use 'we were' with plural subjects and choose the noun that matches meaning (manners).

× I learned from our teacher how to be treat our teachers and our parents nicely.

✓ I learned from my teachers how to treat my teachers and my parents politely.

Pronoun consistency: the speaker shifts from 'I' to 'our' which is inconsistent. Use 'my' with 'I'. Verb form: 'to be treat' is incorrect; use the infinitive 'to treat'. Word choice: 'politely' is a more appropriate adverb than 'nicely'. Suggestion: Keep pronouns consistent (I/my) and use correct infinitive form 'to treat'.

× So attitude would be very important for us.

✓ So attitude would be very important for us.

This sentence is grammatical but 'attitude' is countable/uncountable issue and sounds awkward. Prefer 'So having a good attitude would be very important for us.' or 'So attitude is very important for us.' Suggestion: Use 'a good attitude' or rephrase to 'having a good attitude' for clarity.

× Definitely, I would say in working fields we always encounter different kinds of people in our daily life.

✓ Definitely. I would say that in the workplace we always encounter different kinds of people in our daily lives.

Word choice and noun form: 'working fields' is unnatural; use 'the workplace'. 'daily life' should be plural 'daily lives' when referring to people generally. Also add 'that' after 'say' for clarity. Suggestion: Use natural collocations ('the workplace') and pluralize 'daily lives' when referring to multiple people.

× So how to behave, how to respect other people, just like your colleague, our boss is very important for our daily life.

✓ So knowing how to behave and how to show respect to other people, such as your colleagues and your boss, is very important in our daily lives.

Pronoun and agreement issues: sentence mixes forms ('your colleague, our boss') which is inconsistent. Also the sentence lacks a clear subject for the verb 'is' until rephrased. Use gerunds ('knowing') to create a subject, fix plurality ('colleagues'), and keep pronouns consistent ('your'). Use 'in our daily lives' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: Keep pronouns consistent, use gerunds to form clear subjects, and match singular/plural nouns (colleagues).