Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 需要提高句子結構與語法正確性，使用更自然、簡潔的表達，並在回答開頭直接回應問題。回答不應超過五句，要包含一個主題句和一兩個支持細節，用連接詞使語意連貫。例如說明從誰學到、具體規則、以及在學校的經驗。

예시: I learned to be polite mainly from my mother and my teachers. My mother taught me simple rules like not shouting and not making fun of others, and she reinforced these rules at home. At school, teachers reminded us to have good manners and to respect classmates, which helped me practice politeness in everyday situations.

제안: 需要清楚表達觀點並使用具體例子來支持觀點，避免詞彙使用不當（如“applied person”不明確）。保持句子簡短、邏輯清楚，使用連接詞（for example, therefore）來組織理由。如舉例說明禮貌如何在社交和職場帶來好處。

예시: Yes, I think politeness is very important in both personal and professional life. For example, being polite at work helps build good relationships with colleagues and customers, which can lead to better cooperation and more opportunities. Therefore, polite behaviour can contribute to long-term success.

× When I was the child and then to be polite to find my mother and the books my mother told me don't shout at others, don't laugh at others.

✓ When I was a child, my mother and her books taught me to be polite: 'Don't shout at others, don't laugh at others.'

问题类型：句子结构错误（26）。原句词序和结构混乱，包含多余词语（例如 the child, to find）且未正确使用标点和引导词。建议将信息按逻辑重组：先交代时间状语（When I was a child），然后说明施事（my mother and her books taught me），最后用引号列出母亲的教导。中文建议：把句子分成主句和引语，删除多余词，使用正确的时态和标点。

× You need to be applied person and in school.

✓ You need to be a well-mannered person at school.

问题类型：形容词/副词使用不当（13）。原句使用 applied person 不符合英语习惯，且介词短语位置和冠词缺失。建议用合适的形容词短语（well-mannered person）并补上冠词 a，同时把地点短语放在 person 后（at school）。中文建议：用合适形容词表达“有礼貌”，补上冠词并把地点放在名词后。

× The teachers also often told us be a behavior manners good.

✓ The teachers also often told us to have good manners and behave well.

问题类型：定冠词/冠词使用不当（17/22，可归为17）。原句中行为表达混乱，使用了不正确的名词短语（a behavior manners good），缺少不定式 to。建议使用短语 have good manners 或 behave well，并加上不定式 to 引导宾语从句。中文建议：把“行为举止好”翻成常用短语，并使用 to + 动词不定式或正确名词短语。

× I think being polite is very important not only in your daily life but also in your workplace.

✓ I think being polite is very important not only in daily life but also in the workplace.

问题类型：现在时/时态使用（6）。原句时态本身没错，但用词冗余（your daily life, your workplace），在一般陈述中更常用泛指表达。建议使用不带所有格的日常表述。中文建议：把“你的日常生活/工作场所”改为泛指的“日常生活/工作场所”，更自然。

× And if you are applied person, maybe you will eat there.

✓ And if you are a polite person, you may do well there.

问题类型：句子结构错误（26）。原句 applied person 意义不明且 maybe you will eat there 完全不合上下文（吃饭与礼貌无关）。建议根据上下文改为表达“你在那儿可能表现良好/成功”，使用 may 或 might 表示可能性，并使用 do well 或 succeed。中文建议：把不明确的词（applied）改为 polite，调整动词短语以匹配语境。

× To be success and with the greater achievement that is being applied person is not very easy but is very important.

✓ Becoming successful and achieving greater things by being a polite person is not easy, but it is very important.

问题类型：句子结构错误（26）。原句语序混乱（To be success, with the greater achievement that is being applied person），名词和短语搭配不当（to be success 应为 to be successful），并且缺少连贯的主语结构。建议用动名词或不定式短语（Becoming successful / to become successful）并明确原因状语（by being a polite person），最后用转折连接句子。中文建议：把“要成功并取得更大成就，通过做一个有礼貌的人”整理成主语从句，改为正确形容词（successful）和介词短语（by being）。