Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples using linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing (e.g., "has been taught in the school") and reduce redundancy. Aim for 2–4 sentences, vary vocabulary (e.g., "manners" → "good manners," "parents taught me" → "my parents emphasised").

예시: My parents taught me good manners from an early age, so politeness became a habit. For example, they encouraged me to say "please" and "thank you," and my teachers reinforced this at school, where we practiced polite behaviour during assemblies.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and then support it with a specific reason or short example using linking words. Improve naturalness by replacing awkward phrases (e.g., "may it be") with natural alternatives like "whether they are" and avoid repeating the word "respect" too closely.

예시: Yes — being polite is essential because it shows respect and helps build positive relationships. For instance, when children greet teachers and classmates politely, it creates a friendly classroom atmosphere and reduces conflicts.

× They have taught me at a very young age about basic manners whenever we're in the house or ever going outside.

✓ They taught me at a very young age about basic manners whenever we were in the house or went outside.

The student uses present perfect 'have taught' and contractions mixing tenses with 'we're' in a past narrative. The question asks about childhood learning (past), so simple past 'taught' and past forms 'were' and 'went' are appropriate. Use consistent past tense for clarity. Suggestion: Use simple past for completed past experiences and make verb tense consistent across the sentence.

× Also, it has been taught in the school.

✓ Also, it was taught at school.

The phrase 'in the school' and passive present perfect 'has been taught' are awkward here. For general schooling in the past, use simple past passive 'was taught' and the preposition 'at school' (no definite article) or omit 'the'. Suggestion: Use 'at school' for general reference and simple past passive when referring to past instruction.

× Being polite means you respect those people around you, may it be the same age as you or even older like your parents and teachers.

✓ Being polite means you respect the people around you, whether they are the same age as you or older, such as your parents and teachers.

The original uses 'those people around you' (awkward) and 'may it be' which is incorrect formal structure; pronoun/reference and clause form are wrong. Replace with 'the people around you' and a concessive clause 'whether they are...' to introduce comparison. Also improve 'like' to 'such as' for examples. Suggestion: Use 'whether they are' for contrasting possibilities and 'such as' when giving examples.