Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity, correctness and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, avoid unclear words (e.g., 'resistant'), correct grammar (plural/singular, articles), and reduce redundancy. Add one or two specific brief examples of parental guidance and use a linking word to show progression (e.g., 'over time' or 'as a result'). Keep answers to no more than five sentences.

예시: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. At first we often acted impulsively, but my parents were strict and enforced rules, sometimes with physical punishment. As a result, over time I picked up habits like saying 'please' and 'thank you' and waiting my turn to speak. For example, my mother insisted we always greet guests politely, which helped me form respectful manners.

제안: Make the response more fluent and precise. Begin with a succinct topic sentence, then give two concrete reasons with linking words (for example, 'because' and 'for instance'). Fix small grammar issues (e.g., 'the other person', 'in situations such as job interviews or meetings'). Avoid repeating 'politeness' unnecessarily and use a wider range of vocabulary (e.g., 'create rapport', 'favorable impression'). Keep to under five sentences.

예시: Yes — I believe politeness is very important. Because it creates rapport and makes the other person feel at ease, simple phrases like 'thank you' or 'I really appreciate that' are effective. For instance, in job interviews or meetings, polite behavior often leaves a favorable impression and can influence others' perceptions of your professionalism.

× Honestly, as children we often acted without much resistant.

✓ Honestly, as children we often acted without much resistance.

The noun 'resistant' is an adjective; the correct noun form to express the idea is 'resistance'. Replace the adjective with the noun 'resistance' to fit the sentence structure and meaning.

× We didn't always behave politely.

✓ We didn't always behave politely.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change is necessary. Subject 'we' and verb 'didn't behave' agree in number and tense.

× My parents were strict and sometimes used physical punishment to enforce rules on us.

✓ My parents were strict and sometimes used physical punishment to enforce rules on us.

This sentence is acceptable as written. The article use is correct: 'physical punishment' and 'rules' are used appropriately.

× So gradually I learned to respect the others and use polite expressions like please and thank you.

✓ So gradually I learned to respect others and to use polite expressions like please and thank you.

Use 'respect others' without the definite article 'the' because 'others' is a general plural noun here. Also add the infinitive marker 'to' before the second verb for parallel structure: 'learned to respect... and to use...' This makes the sentence smoother and grammatically parallel.

× Yes, definitely. I think being polite is very important especially when you meet someone for the first time.

✓ Yes, definitely. I think being polite is very important, especially when you meet someone for the first time.

A comma is needed before 'especially' to separate the adverbial phrase for clarity. The rest of the sentence is correct.

× Using phrases like thank you or I really appreciate it helps other person feel comfortable around you and politeness.

✓ Using phrases like 'thank you' or 'I really appreciate it' helps other people feel comfortable around you and feel appreciated.

'Other person' is incorrect; use 'other people' for a general plural reference. Also the phrase 'and politeness' is awkward; replace with 'and feel appreciated' to convey the intended meaning. Quotation marks shown here are for clarity in the correction but follow the required single-quote formatting in JSON strings.

× Politeness can also make a good impression in the situation such as job interviews or work meeting.

✓ Politeness can also make a good impression in situations such as job interviews or work meetings.

Use plural 'situations' for general contexts and pluralize 'work meeting' to 'work meetings' for consistency. Remove the definite article 'the' before 'situation' because the sentence refers generally to multiple contexts.