Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb tense and plural/singular agreement, avoid filler words, and add one specific example. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “because” or “for instance”).

예시: I learned to be polite from my parents when I was a child. They taught me to respect older people and to use polite phrases like “please” and “thank you,” so I grew up practicing polite greetings at home. For instance, I was always encouraged to offer my seat to elderly relatives when we traveled together.

제안: Give a direct opinion sentence, then support it with clear reasons and a specific example. Avoid hesitation and incorrect phrasing; use connectors such as “because” and “for example.” Correct grammar: “a polite attitude” or “being polite.”

예시: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps build good relationships and shows respect for others. For example, when someone says “thank you” or listens politely, people feel valued and are more willing to cooperate.

× I learned to be polite as a child when my, when my parents, uh, teach us or teach me to be, umm, respectful to the older.

✓ I learned to be polite as a child when my parents taught me to be respectful to my elders.

The sentence has pronoun and verb tense issues. 'my parents teach' conflicts with past time 'learned' so change to past tense 'taught' (Past tense issue - ID 5). 'teach us or teach me' is unclear; choose 'taught me' to match the singular subject 'I'. 'the older' is incorrect use of pronouns/adjectives; use 'my elders' or 'older people'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense and a clear pronoun: 'my parents taught me to be respectful to my elders.'

× And that's only the older, uh, also my, uh, friends and relatives.

✓ That included not only older people but also my friends and relatives.

The original has incorrect pronoun/phrase 'the older' and awkward structure. Use 'older people' and rework the sentence for clarity. Also 'that's only the older' is misleading; 'included not only older people but also my friends and relatives' corrects meaning and structure (Sentence structure errors - ID 26 and Incorrect use of pronouns - ID 12). Suggestion: combine ideas into a clear clause: 'That included not only older people but also my friends and relatives.'

× Yes, this. That is very, very important because if you have a attitude as polite in your umm, in yourself be, you may be a good person with heart.

✓ Yes, it is very important because if you have a polite attitude, you can be a good person at heart.

Multiple errors: 'Yes, this. That is' is broken structure; replace with 'Yes, it is'. 'have a attitude' uses wrong article and noun form; use 'a polite attitude' (Article errors - ID 22 and Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs - ID 13). 'as polite in your ... be' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'have a polite attitude' and 'you can be a good person at heart' to express ability/possibility (Modal verb usage - ID 4 for 'can' instead of ambiguous 'may be' though 'may be' could work). Suggestion: keep sentences concise: 'Yes, it is very important because if you have a polite attitude, you can be a good person at heart.'