Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar; give a clear topic sentence, then one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Correct unclear phrases (e.g. "in in", "put in a pot") and explain cultural expression briefly.

예시: I learned to be polite from my parents who taught me basic manners and respect for elders. For example, they always reminded me to use polite phrases when speaking to older people, such as a traditional Filipino greeting, and explained why showing respect is important.

제안: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give one or two precise reasons using linking words (because, for example). Avoid hesitations and repetition; use accurate vocabulary like "well-mannered" and "reflects upbringing."

예시: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it reflects respect for others and shows that you are well-mannered. For example, polite behavior can help build good relationships at home and in school, and it often reflects the values taught by your parents.

× I learned to be polite when I was a child when my parents taught me how things should be as a kid and how to respect elders in in.

✓ I learned to be polite as a child when my parents taught me how things should be and how to respect elders.

The sentence contains a redundant phrase 'when I was a child' after 'as a child' and the repeated preposition 'in in' is incorrect. Also 'as a kid' is repetitive. Combine the time phrase once and remove the extra 'in in' to use correct preposition structure and eliminate redundancy. Suggestion: keep a single time expression ('as a child') and place the taught content after 'taught me'.

× For example, in Filipino we used to say put in a pot when we speak to others.

✓ For example, in Filipino we used to say 'put in a pot' when we spoke to others.

Tense consistency: 'used to' implies past habitual action, so the clause should use past tense 'spoke' rather than present 'speak'. Also the phrase being cited should be set off as an expression. Suggestion: match the verb tense after 'used to' and use past form for the action described.

× I think being polite is very important because it shows how you respect elders and how you well, how ma, how good, how well mannered you are as a child and it shows how your parents thought you how to be a respectful person.

✓ I think being polite is very important because it shows how you respect elders, how well mannered you are, and how your parents taught you to be a respectful person.

The original sentence is disfluent and contains filler words ('well, how ma') and incorrect verb use ('thought you' instead of 'taught you' and missing 'to' before 'be'). Also the list of characteristics is awkwardly ordered. Correct by removing fillers, using the correct verb 'taught', adding the infinitive marker 'to', and organizing items with parallel structure. Suggestion: use clear, concise clauses in parallel form and correct verb choice.