Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity, coherence and relevance. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question (e.g., who taught you or where you learned politeness). Use specific supporting details (examples of actions, people or situations) and linking words (e.g., because, for example, when) to make the response logical. Avoid filler sounds (uh, um) and repetition, and keep the answer within 2–4 concise sentences.

예시: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and teachers when I was a child. For example, my mother taught me to say “please” and “thank you,” and my teacher rewarded polite behavior in class, which encouraged me to keep being respectful. Because of these habits, politeness feels natural to me now.

제안: Give a direct opinion and support it with clear reasons and an example. Start with a concise topic sentence stating your view, then add 1–2 reasons linked with words like because or therefore, and finish with a brief example or result. Remove hesitations and repetition to sound fluent and confident.

예시: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps build good relationships and shows respect for others. For instance, saying hello and listening politely at work has helped me get along with colleagues and solve problems more easily.

× Of course, uh, when I was younger, uh, I, I rented about politics in my elementary school.

✓ Of course, when I was younger, I learned about politeness in elementary school.

The original sentence has incorrect verb choice 'rented' and 'politics' which do not fit the meaning; it is also disfluent with repeated fillers. This is a sentence structure error because the wrong lexical items and word order make the idea unintelligible. Replace 'rented about politics' with 'learned about politeness' to convey how the speaker acquired polite behavior; remove extra fillers and duplicate 'I' for clarity.

× Uh, when I landed the polite, polite, uh, it was very impossible.

✓ At first, being polite was very difficult for me.

The phrase 'landed the polite' is incorrect and unintelligible; this is a sentence structure error. Use a clear subject and verb phrase: 'being polite was very difficult for me' accurately expresses the intended meaning. 'At first' signals initial difficulty and improves coherence.

× So I think that flight is very important resource in my life currently.

✓ So I think that politeness is a very important resource in my life right now.

The word 'flight' is incorrect; the speaker likely meant 'politeness'. This is an incorrect use of adjectives/nouns causing meaning problems. Also missing an article before 'very important resource' and awkward adverb placement. Add 'a' before 'very important resource' and change 'currently' to 'right now' for natural placement.

× Of course, uh, two being 2 begin polite is very important in my life and umm, and then most people think also also also semis Mr. Lee.

✓ Of course, being polite is very important in my life, and many people think so too.

This sentence has multiple issues: numbers and repetitions ('two being 2 begin', 'also also also semis Mr. Lee') make it unintelligible — a sentence structure error. Simplify to 'being polite is very important in my life, and many people think so too' to convey the intended idea. Remove fillers and garbled fragments.

× Uh, it is a great way to get a polite being polite me for me.

✓ Being polite is a great way to make a good impression on others and for me personally.

The original contains word order problems and redundant phrases ('get a polite being polite me for me'), which are sentence structure errors. Rephrase to a coherent statement: 'Being polite is a great way to make a good impression on others and for me personally' clarifies the meaning and corrects word order.