Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy and coherence, use a clear topic sentence, and give specific, relevant examples. Keep answers natural and concise (max 5 sentences). Use linking words (e.g., “for example,” “also,” “in particular”) and correct vocabulary (e.g., “manners,” “appropriate clothing,” avoid unclear word like “pakodas” unless it’s explained). Fix articles and prepositions (e.g., “learned how to be polite,” “suitable clothes,” “people’s manners,” “at the park” if intended).

예시: When I was a child, my parents taught me how to be polite. For example, they showed me appropriate manners, such as saying “please” and “thank you,” and dressing appropriately for different occasions. Also, they explained why we should respect others and apologize when we make mistakes. These lessons helped me behave politely at school and family events.

제안: This answer is clear and relevant but can be improved by adding a stronger topic sentence, using more varied vocabulary, and one specific example or result. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., “because,” “for instance,” “as a result”). Keep concise and avoid repetition of “polite/politeness.”

예시: Yes, I believe being polite is essential because it fosters good relationships and shows respect. For instance, at work I always thank colleagues for their help and apologize if I make a mistake; as a result, people are more cooperative and willing to assist me in future tasks.

× When I was a child, I learned a lot about how to be a polite from my parents.

✓ When I was a child, I learned a lot about how to be polite from my parents.

The article 'a' before the uncountable adjective phrase 'polite' is incorrect. 'Polite' is an adjective describing behavior and does not need an indefinite article here. Remove 'a' to make the phrase grammatically correct. Suggestion: Use 'be polite' (no article) when referring to behaving politely.

× It involves many things from your suitable clothes, your speeches and some people manners.

✓ It involves many things, such as suitable clothes, the way you speak, and people's manners.

The original has several adjective and noun usage errors: 'your suitable clothes' is better as 'suitable clothes' (no possessive 'your'); 'your speeches' is unnatural for general speaking style — 'the way you speak' is clearer; 'some people manners' is ungrammatical — use the possessive 'people's manners'. Also add 'such as' to introduce examples and commas to separate items. Suggestion: Use parallel structures in lists and correct possessive forms (people's).

× For example, when you go to the pakodas, you shouldn't wear short skirts or shorts to.

✓ For example, when you go to eat pakodas, you shouldn't wear short skirts or shorts.

'Go to the pakodas' is incorrect preposition and article usage; say 'go to eat pakodas' or 'go for pakodas' depending on dialect. The trailing 'to' after 'shorts' is unnecessary and should be removed. Also omit the article 'the' before pakodas unless referring to a specific place. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions with activities (go to eat, go for) and avoid redundant particles like final 'to'.

× I think that being polite is really essential because it helps people get along and shows respect.

✓ I think that being polite is really essential because it helps people get along and shows respect.

No correction needed. The gerund 'being' and present tense verbs 'helps' and 'shows' are used correctly to express general truths. This sentence matches the present tense context of the question. Suggestion: Maintain gerund and simple present for general statements.

× For example, at work I try to say thank you and apologize when needed, and people are usually more helpful in return.

✓ For example, at work I try to say thank you and apologize when needed, and people are usually more helpful in return.

No correction needed. The present simple 'try' and 'are' correctly describe habitual behavior. Keep present tense for routines. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions.