Politeness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문법과 표현을 더 자연스럽고 정확하게 고치세요. 현재 시제, 복수/단수, 관사 사용이 어색합니다. 또한 응답 구조를 개선하기 위해 주제 문장(How I learned)을 먼저 말한 뒤, 연결어(먼저, 또한 등)로 학교와 집에서의 구체적 방법을 차례로 설명하세요. 예를 들어 "I learned manners both at school and at home"로 시작하고, 학교에서 어떤 활동(예: role-play, lessons)이 있었는지와 부모님이 가르쳐 준 구체적 행동(예: saying hello, holding doors)을 추가하면 더 설득력 있습니다. 문장 수는 3~4문장으로 유지하세요.

예시: I learned good manners both at school and at home. At school we had lessons and role‑playing activities that taught us how to greet people and behave politely. At home, my parents set an example and reminded me to say hello to adults and to hold the elevator door for others.

제안: 문장을 더 자연스럽고 정확하게 다듬으세요. 'make the good relationship' 같은 표현은 어색하므로 'build good relationships'로 바꾸고, 이유를 구체적으로 연결어로 명확히 하세요(예: therefore, because, as a result). 또한 반복되는 'others'를 피하고 대명사를 적절히 사용해 문장을 간결하게 유지하세요. 문장 수는 2~3문장으로 제한하세요.

예시: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it helps build good relationships with others. As a result, people are more likely to trust and respect you, which can make social and professional interactions smoother.

× I got a lot of educations in school and also in my home.

✓ I got a lot of education at school and also at home.

'Education' is an uncountable noun so it should not be pluralized as 'educations'. Use 'education' without 'a lot of' or with 'a lot of' — both are acceptable; here 'a lot of education' is fine. Also use preposition 'at' for institutions and locations: 'at school' and 'at home'. Suggestions: use 'education' (uncountable) and 'at school/at home' for location context.

× My parents teach me to say hi when I meet adults and also like keeping elevator open when someone's come.

✓ My parents taught me to say hi when I meet adults and also to keep the elevator open when someone comes.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement and tense consistency. 'My parents teach me' should be past 'taught me' if referring to childhood learning; however present is acceptable—choose past to match 'as a child'. 'Teach' with object requires infinitive 'to say' (correct) but 'also like keeping' is incorrect structure: parents 'taught me also to keep' uses infinitive. 'Keeping elevator open' needs articles: 'the elevator' and verb agreement 'when someone comes' (not 'come'). Suggestions: keep tense consistent (past), use infinitive after 'taught', include definite article before 'elevator', and use third person singular 'comes'.

× I think it is really important because by being polite we can make the good relationship with others and others will think of me in a better way.

✓ I think it is really important because by being polite we can build good relationships with others and they will think of me more positively.

'Make the good relationship' is unnatural: use 'build good relationships' or 'form good relationships'. 'The' before 'good relationship' is incorrect here. 'Others will think of me in a better way' is wordy; use adverb 'more positively'. Suggestions: use plural 'relationships' for general meaning, remove unnecessary definite article, and use 'more positively' for clarity.