Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 質問には直接答えられていますが、“I often use origami” はやや不自然です。“I often do origami” または “I often make origami” と言いましょう。また、“bolt and bad” は作ったものが伝わりにくいため、“a boat and a bird” など、具体的な作品名を明瞭に発音してください。理由を述べる前に “For example” を使うと、答えがより自然につながります。

예시: Yes, I often do origami. For example, I make paper boats and birds because it’s fun and relaxing.

제안: 過去のことを聞かれているので、“I like” ではなく “I liked” を使いましょう。“I liked make” も “I liked making” に直します。“a airplane” は “an airplane” です。また、紙の手裏剣で遊んだことを説明するなら、“paper shuriken” と言い、友達と遊んだ経験を簡潔につなげると明確です。

예시: As a child, I liked making paper airplanes and shuriken. I often made them with my friends, and we had fun throwing them outside.

제안: “Do you still…?” への否定は “No, I don’t” です。“No, I did” は質問と時制が合っていません。また、“Because” で文を始めるより、否定の答えに理由を続けると自然です。SNSの例は、実際に使っているサービス名を正確に伝え、“I rarely write letters” と簡潔にまとめましょう。

예시: No, I don’t. I usually message people on social media, such as LINE, X, and Discord, so I rarely write physical letters.

제안: 意見を最初に “Yes, I think they do” と明確に述べましょう。“retail” や “rhetors retail” は意図が伝わりにくいため、手書きの手紙を指す “handwritten letters” を使ってください。“because” の重複を避け、手紙が気持ちを表し、思い出として大切にされるという理由を具体的に説明するとよいです。

예시: Yes, I think many people still keep handwritten letters. They can express feelings in a personal way, and people may treasure them as special memories.

제안: “I usually have smartphone” は “I usually have my smartphone” または “I usually carry a smartphone” とします。“perfectiony item” や最後の表現は意味が伝わりにくいため、“convenient” や “messaging apps” などの語を使いましょう。紙やペンを持ち歩かない理由を、スマートフォンでメモや連絡ができることに絞って説明すると、明快で効果的です。

예시: No, I don’t. I usually rely on my smartphone because it’s convenient for taking notes and messaging people, so I don’t often need paper or a pen.

× I like make a airplane, also I like uh shrikan. It is Japanese traditional weapon. So it is fun for me. I I I played with it with friends.

✓ I liked making an airplane, and I also liked making a shuriken. It is a traditional Japanese weapon, so it was fun for me. I played with it with friends.

The question asks what you liked doing as a child, so use the past tense liked rather than like. The later reference to the activity should also use was to keep the answer in the past tense.

× I like make a airplane, also I like uh shrikan. It is Japanese traditional weapon. So it is fun for me. I I I played with it with friends.

✓ I liked making an airplane, and I also liked making a shuriken. It is a traditional Japanese weapon, so it was fun for me. I played with it with friends.

After like, use a gerund ending in -ing or an infinitive with to. Making is a natural choice here: liked making.

× I like make a airplane, also I like uh shrikan. It is Japanese traditional weapon. So it is fun for me. I I I played with it with friends.

✓ I liked making an airplane, and I also liked making a shuriken. It is a traditional Japanese weapon, so it was fun for me. I played with it with friends.

Use an before airplane because the word begins with a vowel sound. Use a before the singular countable noun phrase traditional Japanese weapon. The usual adjective order is traditional Japanese, not Japanese traditional.

× No, I did. Because I usually use uh SNS, for example, Ryan 3X, Ryan X, Discord. So I rarely write a write letters.

✓ No, I don't, because I usually use social media, for example, Ryan 3X, Ryan X, and Discord. So I rarely write letters.

The question asks whether you still write letters, so the answer needs the present-tense auxiliary don't, not the past-tense did.

× No, I did. Because I usually use uh SNS, for example, Ryan 3X, Ryan X, Discord. So I rarely write a write letters.

✓ No, I don't, because I usually use social media, for example, Ryan 3X, Ryan X, and Discord. So I rarely write letters.

Letters is plural, so it cannot be preceded by the singular article a. Say write letters. The repeated words appear to be a false start and are omitted for clarity.

× No, I don't, because I usually have smartphone.

✓ No, I don't, because I usually have a smartphone.

Smartphone is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a before smartphone.