Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 先直接回答做过什么，并用准确词汇表达：paper crafts 是“纸艺”，paper planes 是“纸飞机”，而不是 paper crops。注意可数名词的单复数和冠词，例如 a paper plant / paper birds。补充一个具体细节即可，并避免结尾重复表达感受。

예시: Yes, I have made a few paper crafts. When I was a child, I often folded paper planes and tried to see how far they could fly. I also made paper birds from old sheets of paper, which was a lot of fun.

제안: 开头应使用“When I was a child”，并保持过去时，如 liked、drew 和 folded。尽量减少停顿和重复；用 draw pictures 替代 draw paintings，并说明具体会折什么纸艺。回答可按“主要活动＋具体例子”的顺序组织。

예시: When I was a child, I liked drawing pictures on paper and making up short stories. I also folded paper into animals, such as birds and dogs. Sometimes, my friends and I used paper to play simple games.

제안: 回答的理由清楚，但开头的“as the development”不自然，可改为“because of the development of…”或直接说“Not often”。注意表达完整条件句，例如“When I want to contact…”；“send them an email”或“send them a message”会更自然。避免把 should 用作习惯表达。

예시: Not often, because digital communication is much more convenient. When I want to contact my friends or relatives, I usually send them a message on WeChat or an email. It is also quicker and uses less paper.

제안: 可以先回答“有些人仍会保留”，再对比不同年龄群体。描述普遍习惯时用一般现在时，如 keep，而不是 kept；“handwritten letters”才是“手写信”。“using my headphones”与题意不符，建议改成 using a phone 或 messaging。注意删去重复的“I think”。

예시: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters, especially older people who may value them as keepsakes. Younger people, on the other hand, usually use their phones to stay in touch. I think letters can feel more personal, even though they take longer to write.

제안: 回答有明确的条件对比，也提供了例子。开头可直接说“It depends on where I’m going”，避免“I think it be it depends”的重复。条件句中使用“If I’m going…”或“If I go…”，并注意说“a wedding”和“go out for dinner”。

예시: It depends on where I’m going. If I’m going to a meeting or a class, I usually take a notebook and a pen so I can write down important information. However, I don’t bring them when I’m just going out for dinner with friends or attending a wedding.

× When I was young, I usually made a paper plants that can fly very far.

✓ When I was young, I usually made paper plants that could fly very far.

“plants”是复数名词，不能与单数冠词“a”连用。应删除“a”。此外，主句描述过去，后面的“can”也应改为过去式“could”。

× When I was young, I usually made a paper plants that can fly very far.

✓ When I was young, I usually made paper plants that could fly very far.

句子描述过去的经历，因此定语从句中的“can”应使用过去式“could”，与过去的时间背景保持一致。

× When I was young, I usually made a paper plants that can fly very far.

✓ When I was young, I usually made paper plants that could fly very far.

冠词“a”只能修饰单数可数名词，不能放在复数名词“plants”前。此处应删除“a”。

× Besides, I can make a paper birds with my papers that I have used.

✓ Besides, I can make paper birds with my papers that I have used.

“birds”是复数名词，前面不能使用单数形式的冠词“a”，因此应删除“a”。

× Besides, I can make a paper birds with my papers that I have used.

✓ Besides, I can make paper birds with my papers that I have used.

冠词“a”只能修饰单数可数名词，不能修饰复数名词“birds”，因此应删除。

× Why was a child, umm, I like to use paper to draw some paintings, write some novels, or just play tiny games with my friends, uh, like some chess.

✓ When I was a child, umm, I liked to use paper to draw some paintings, write some novels, or just play tiny games with my friends, uh, like some chess.

“was a child”前缺少主语代词“I”。应说“When I was a child”。

× Why was a child, umm, I like to use paper to draw some paintings, write some novels, or just play tiny games with my friends, uh, like some chess.

✓ When I was a child, umm, I liked to use paper to draw some paintings, write some novels, or just play tiny games with my friends, uh, like some chess.

问题询问小时候的习惯，时间背景是过去，因此“like”应改为过去式“liked”。

× Besides, why was uh, myself? I I like to use it to fold some uh, animals and plants.

✓ Besides, when I was a child, I liked to use it to fold some animals and plants.

原句中的“myself”不能代替句子主语“I”，而且“why was”后缺少合适的主语和句子结构。回答童年活动时，可直接说“When I was a child, I liked to…”。

× Besides, why was uh, myself? I I like to use it to fold some uh, animals and plants.

✓ Besides, when I was a child, I liked to use it to fold some animals and plants.

句子谈论小时候的活动，应该使用过去时“liked”，而不是现在时“like”。

× Not really as the development of the Internet and modern technology.

✓ Not really, because of the development of the Internet and modern technology.

这里要表达“由于互联网和现代科技的发展”，应使用“because of”表示原因；“as”在此处不能自然地连接这个名词短语。

× While want to contact my friends or relatives, I should send them e-mail or use WeChat to send the message because it's more convenient and environmentally friendly.

✓ When I want to contact my friends or relatives, I should send them e-mail or use WeChat to send the message because it's more convenient and environmentally friendly.

此处表达的是“当我想联系朋友或亲戚时”，用“When”比“While”合适。“While”通常表示两个动作同时持续发生，不适合这里的意思。

× While want to contact my friends or relatives, I should send them e-mail or use WeChat to send the message because it's more convenient and environmentally friendly.

✓ When I want to contact my friends or relatives, I should send them e-mail or use WeChat to send the message because it's more convenient and environmentally friendly.

“want”前缺少主语代词“I”。英语中的完整从句通常需要明确的主语，因此应说“When I want…”。

× I think for some people, especially the old, they just kept the handwriting letters.

✓ I think for some people, especially older people, they just keep the handwritten letters.

这里是在描述人们现在保留信件的普遍情况，应使用一般现在时“keep”，而不是过去式“kept”。

× I think for some people, especially the old, they just kept the handwriting letters.

✓ I think for some people, especially older people, they just keep the handwritten letters.

修饰“letters”时需要使用表示“手写的”的过去分词形容词“handwritten”，而“handwriting”是名词或动名词，不能在这里直接作该形容词使用。

× But for younger generations like me, we just gave up writing letters because it's I think it's a waste of time and using my headphones will be more convenient.

✓ But for younger generations like me, we just give up writing letters because I think it's a waste of time and using my headphones will be more convenient.

句子描述年轻一代目前普遍的情况，应使用一般现在时“give up”，而不是过去式“gave up”。

× But for younger generations like me, we just gave up writing letters because it's I think it's a waste of time and using my headphones will be more convenient.

✓ But for younger generations like me, we just give up writing letters because I think it's a waste of time and using my headphones will be more convenient.

“because it's I think it's”把两个句式不完整地叠在一起，造成结构混乱。保留“I think it's…”即可，使原因从句结构完整、清楚。

× I think it be it depends on what I go out for.

✓ I think it depends on what I go out for.

主语“it”是第三人称单数，一般现在时应使用“depends”。“it be”在这里不能构成正确的谓语，应删除。

× For example, if I'm go out for a meeting or a class I will carry paper and pens to take down important notes.

✓ For example, if I'm going out for a meeting or a class, I will carry paper and pens to take down important notes.

“I'm”后应接动词的-ing形式构成现在进行时，因此“go”应改为“going”。