Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly and organize the examples clearly. Avoid unclear phrases such as “birthday cards bought” and “clay pepper,” which seem to be incorrect word choices. Use linking words such as “for example” and “also,” and explain one craft in a little more detail. Keep the answer to two or three accurate sentences.

예시: Yes, I have made several paper crafts, such as birthday cards, small boxes, and paper flowers. For example, I once made a bouquet of paper flowers for a friend’s birthday, and I really enjoyed choosing different colors for it.

제안: Use the past tense consistently because you are describing a childhood activity. The answer is one very long sentence, so divide it into shorter sentences and use linking words to show the sequence of events. Replace unclear expressions such as “paper boards” and “whose bod will move fast” with “paper boats” and “whose boat would move faster.” Add a brief reason explaining why you enjoyed the activity.

예시: When I was a child, I liked making paper boats from old newspapers with my sisters, especially on rainy days. Then, we put them in puddles or small streams and raced them to see whose boat would float the fastest. It was simple, but we always had a lot of fun.

제안: Give a direct answer first and then provide a concise reason. Improve the grammar in “makes it comfortable for chatting and calling” and “since I have been using mobile phone.” Use “makes communication more convenient” and “since I started using a mobile phone.” You could also add a specific comparison with letters to make the answer more developed.

예시: No, I rarely write physical letters anymore. Since I started using a mobile phone, I have found messaging and calling much more convenient and immediate. I usually contact my friends and family through messaging apps instead.

제안: State your opinion more confidently and use a clearer contrast. “Yes, maybe there will be people” is hesitant and unnatural; say “Yes, some people still keep them, but it is quite rare.” Replace “within this span of time” with “much more quickly” or “almost instantly.” Add a specific example, such as people keeping letters from family members or special occasions.

예시: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters, but I think this is quite rare nowadays. Many people prefer texting because messages are more convenient and arrive almost instantly. However, people may still save old letters from loved ones because they have sentimental value.

제안: Answer with accurate vocabulary and correct the unclear words. Use “wallet” only if it can actually hold the item; “a small notebook in my bag” is more natural. Replace “bottom things” with “important things,” “fork it” with “forget them,” and “remember the dates” with “write down dates or reminders.” Explain how you use the notebook, using one or two clear sentences.

예시: Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and a pen in my bag. I use them to write down my to-do list, appointments, and important reminders because I tend to forget things easily. They are especially useful when I need to take a quick note and my phone is not convenient.

× I have made birthday cards bought, then boxes, then many other flowers using the paper.

✓ I have made birthday cards, boxes, and many other flowers using paper.

The phrase 'birthday cards bought' has an incorrect word order and does not form a clear grammatical phrase. Use a parallel list of nouns: 'birthday cards, boxes, and flowers.' The article 'the' is unnecessary when speaking about paper in general.

× Basically the clay pepper which is used for making flowers and all.

✓ Basically, I used paper clay, which is used to make flowers.

The original is not a complete, clearly structured sentence. It needs a subject and a main verb. Also, 'paper clay' is the correct word order for the material. A comma is used before the nonessential relative clause.

× I used to make paper boards using newspapers when it's raining.

✓ I used to make paper boats using newspapers when it rained.

The answer describes a childhood activity, so the past tense is required. Use 'rained,' not the present-tense form 'is raining.'

× With my sisters I make this board and go out and put it in the water.

✓ With my sisters, I made these boats, went outside, and put them in the water.

The actions happened in the past, so use the past-tense verbs 'made,' 'went,' and 'put.' The plural pronoun 'them' agrees with the plural noun 'boats.'

× We will see we will be happy that it floats when it floats.

✓ We would watch it float, and we would be happy when it floated.

The speaker is describing what they expected or experienced in the past. Therefore, 'would' is more appropriate than 'will,' and 'floated' keeps the verb tense consistent with the past context.

× We will race together like whose bod will move fast.

✓ We would race to see whose boat would move faster.

When comparing two boats, use the comparative form 'faster,' not the base adjective 'fast.' The structure 'to see whose boat...' clearly expresses the purpose of the race.

× I have not written any physical letters to my friends or family since I have been using mobile phone.

✓ I have not written any physical letters to my friends or family since I started using a mobile phone.

The singular countable noun 'mobile phone' needs the indefinite article 'a.' The phrase 'since I started using' is also a more natural way to describe the beginning of this period.

× Yes maybe there will be people who still write letters today.

✓ Yes, there may be people who still write letters today.

The question asks about people who write letters today, so the present-time structure is more appropriate. 'There may be people' expresses possibility without incorrectly using the future form 'will.'

× Because most of the people have mobile phones with them.

✓ Because most people have mobile phones with them.

When 'most' refers to people in general, do not use 'the' before the plural noun. Use 'most people,' not 'most of the people.'

× Most people have mobile phones with them which is more convenient than writing a letter.

✓ Most people have mobile phones with them, which are more convenient than writing letters.

The relative pronoun 'which' refers to the plural noun 'mobile phones,' so the verb must be 'are,' not 'is.' The plural phrase 'writing letters' also matches the general meaning.

× Yes, actually there is a small pen and book in my valet.

✓ Yes, actually there are a small pen and a book in my wallet.

The sentence refers to two items, so use the plural structure 'there are.' Each singular countable noun also needs an article: 'a pen' and 'a book.'

× There are a small pen and a book in my wallet.

✓ There are a small pen and a book in my wallet.

Both singular countable nouns require the indefinite article 'a.' This correction also preserves the plural 'there are' structure because two items are being listed.

× There is a small pen and book in my valet which is kept for writing bottom things to do list etc.

✓ There are a small pen and a book in my wallet, which are kept for writing things on my to-do list.

The relative pronoun 'which' refers to two items, so use 'are kept,' not 'is kept.' The phrase 'things on my to-do list' is the grammatically correct structure.

× Which is kept for writing bottom things to do list etc.

✓ They are kept for writing things down on my to-do list.

After the preposition 'for,' use a gerund with '-ing': 'writing.' The phrasal verb is 'write down,' so the correct expression is 'writing things down on my to-do list.'

× So I used to carry them to remember the dates as I fork it everything really fast.

✓ So I carry them to remember dates because I forget everything very quickly.

The speaker is describing a current habit, so use the present tense 'carry,' not 'used to carry,' which describes a past habit that no longer continues. The present-tense verb 'forget' is needed for the general reason.