Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答直接，也提供了具体经历，但“transfer from a piece of paper into a short paper crane”表达不自然，应改为“turn a piece of paper into a small paper crane”。“told me how”后面可以直接说“taught me how to fold paper”。另外，前面说学会了折纸，后面又说完全忘记，逻辑上略显突兀，可以说明“我现在只记得大概步骤”。建议使用更自然的连接词，如“Back then”和“Although”。

예시: Yes, definitely. When I was young, a friend taught me how to fold a piece of paper into a small paper crane at school. She showed me each step carefully, and I really enjoyed making it. Although I can’t remember all the steps now, it is still a meaningful childhood memory.

제안: 答案有具体活动和结果，但存在明显语法问题：“particularly enjoying”应改为“particularly enjoyed”，“the drawing”应改为“drawing”，“when they open them”时态和指代不清，建议改为“when they opened the paper”。“fold them into squirrels”不太自然，因为画通常不能直接折成松鼠，可以说“draw pictures of squirrels”或“fold the paper into simple animals”。最后一句“Everyone is amazing”意思不对，应改为“Everyone was amazed”。

예시: As a child, I particularly enjoyed drawing on paper. I used watercolor pens to color pictures of animals, especially squirrels, and then gave the drawings to my friends. They were always happy and surprised to receive these small handmade gifts.

제안: 回答观点明确，也进行了过去和现在的对比，结构较好。不过“I’m actually no”应改为“No, not really”或“No, I don’t”。“send the WeChat messages”应改为“send WeChat messages”，“letters of longing”不够自然，可以说“letters expressing how much I missed someone”。结尾“They are very meaningful things”较笼统，可以具体说明这些信让你想起童年或重要的人。

예시: No, not really. I usually send WeChat messages to my friends because it is much faster and more convenient. However, I still keep some letters from my childhood, including thank-you notes and letters to people I missed. They are special to me because they remind me of my childhood.

제안: 答案有很好的具体例子，但“Yes, definitely today”不自然，可以说“Yes, I think some people still do”。“my grandparents was”应改为“my grandparents were”，“saw letters”前需要加“the”，“wiped them up”用词错误，擦拭纸张应说“carefully dusted them off”，最后应明确说明“put them back in the cabinet”。此外，可以解释祖父母为什么珍惜这些信，使答案更完整。

예시: Yes, I think some people still keep handwritten letters, especially older people. Last month, I helped my grandparents organize a cabinet and found a dozen old letters inside. The paper had turned yellow, but my grandparents were delighted to see them. They carefully dusted them off and put them back because the letters reminded them of important moments in their lives.

제안: 回答直接，并通过具体例子说明手机可以代替纸笔，内容有效。不过“Actually now when I go out”可以简化为“Nowadays, when I go out”，“It can help me with anything”过于绝对且不够具体。例子中“my friends, he”应改为“a friend of mine, and he”，“record some information”可以改为“save some information”。最后一句“was perfectly capable of doing this”略显生硬，可以用更自然的“so I didn’t need a pen and paper”。

예시: No, I usually don’t. Nowadays, I only take my phone with me because it can be used for many things. For example, last week a friend asked me to save some phone numbers and addresses, so I recorded them on my phone. It was convenient, and I didn’t need to carry a pen and paper.

× She showed me how to transfer from a piece of paper into a short paper crane, step by step.

✓ She showed me how to turn a piece of paper into a small paper crane, step by step.

“transfer from...into...”的结构不适合表达“把纸变成纸鹤”。表达“把……变成……”时，应使用“turn A into B”。另外，“a piece of paper”已经表示一张纸，因此可以直接说“turn a piece of paper into a small paper crane”。

× When I was young, I particularly enjoying the drawing on paper.

✓ When I was young, I particularly enjoyed drawing on paper.

“particularly”后面不能直接接“enjoying”来作谓语。因为句子主语是“I”，且描述过去的经历，所以应使用过去式“enjoyed”。“enjoy”后面接动词时，要使用动名词形式，如“enjoyed drawing”。

× I used the watercolor pens to color the drawings, then fold them into squirrels and give them to my friends when they open them.

✓ I used watercolor pens to color the drawings, then folded them into squirrels and gave them to my friends when they opened them.

整段是在描述童年时发生的事情，因此并列动作应保持过去时一致：使用“folded”“gave”和“opened”，而不是现在时“fold”“give”和“open”。

× Everyone is amazing and happy to see the paintings.

✓ Everyone was amazed and happy to see the drawings.

“amazing”表示“令人惊叹的”，通常描述事物；“amazed”表示“感到惊讶的”，用于描述人的感受。这里主语是“Everyone”，所以应使用“amazed”。同时，前文描述过去的事情，因此使用“was”。

× I'm actually no.

✓ Actually, no, I don't.

“I'm actually no”不是正确的英语句子结构。“no”不能直接放在系动词“am”后面表示“不写信”。回答一般现在时的问题“Do you still write...?”时，可以说“Actually, no, I don't.”

× I use my mobile phone to send the WeChat messages to my friends now when I miss them.

✓ I use my mobile phone to send WeChat messages to my friends when I miss them.

“WeChat messages”在这里是泛指微信消息，不需要定冠词“the”。只有在双方都知道的特定消息前，才使用“the”。

× My grandparents was very happy when they saw letters and wiped them up and put them.

✓ My grandparents were very happy when they saw the letters, wiped them clean, and put them away.

“grandparents”是复数主语，所以过去式系动词应使用“were”，不能使用“was”。此外，“put them”结构不完整；表示“把它们收起来”应使用短语“put them away”。

× My grandparents was very happy when they saw letters and wiped them up and put them.

✓ My grandparents were very happy when they saw the letters, wiped them clean, and put them away.

这里的“letters”指前面刚刚提到的那一打信，是特定的信件，因此应使用定冠词“the”，即“the letters”。

× Last week when I went out with my friends, he asked me to record some information for him, such as phone numbers and addresses.

✓ Last week, when I went out with my friends, one of them asked me to record some information for him, such as phone numbers and addresses.

前面提到的是复数“my friends”，不能直接用单数代词“he”指代整个复数群体。应使用“one of them”表示“他们中的一个人”。如果明确知道对方是男性，也可以说“one of my friends asked me...”。