Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答直接切题，但有明显的语法和搭配错误。“airplanes”是复数，应该用“them”而不是“it”；“can flew”应改为“could fly”；“the forest”不符合语境，应该表达“飞得最远”；“This made me have a lot of fun”不自然，可改为“It was a lot of fun”。建议使用“also”和“because”连接细节，并给出更具体的结果。

예시: Yes, I made paper airplanes with my friends when I was a child. We designed them in different ways and compared whose airplane could fly the farthest. It was a lot of fun, especially when one of them flew across the playground.

제안: 回答基本切题，但核心词汇和句意不清。“always make”和“This makes”应使用过去时“always made”和“This was”；“paper pens”“air pens”和“flow the floods”很可能是词汇或发音错误，导致考官难以理解。建议明确说明你制作的物品，例如纸飞机或纸船，并用一个具体活动解释为什么喜欢它。

예시: As a child, I liked making paper airplanes with my friends. We decorated them with colorful patterns and then tested them outside. I enjoyed it because we could be creative and have fun together.

제안: 回答有直接答案，也提供了时间和对象，但时态、介词和词汇错误较多。“the last time I write”应改为“the last time I wrote”；“Mother’s Day”需要所有格；“I thank for my mom”应改为“I thanked my mom”；最后的“the KR for several years”意思不清。建议明确表达感谢母亲多年来的照顾，并避免重复冠词。

예시: Yes, I still write physical letters occasionally. The last time I did so was on Mother’s Day, when I wrote a letter to my mom. I thanked her for taking care of me and supporting me over the years.

제안: 观点基本清楚，但句子结构混乱且存在重复。“handwriting letters”应改为“handwritten letters”；“with the development of the more”表达不完整；“people more and more people”重复。建议使用“because”或“as a result”清晰说明原因，并指出手写信仍可能因情感价值而被保存。

예시: Generally speaking, fewer people keep handwritten letters nowadays because email and messaging apps are much more convenient. However, some people still save them because they have sentimental value. For example, a letter from a family member can become a meaningful keepsake.

제안: 回答的主要意思可以理解，但有重复、词汇和语法问题。“often I carry”应改为“I often carry”；“paper pants”应为“paper and pens”；“when I draw out”应为“when I go out”；“heavy lessons”应为“lectures”或“classes”。建议先直接回答，再说明携带纸笔的具体用途，并使用“so”连接结果。

예시: Yes, I usually carry paper and pens when I go out, especially when I have classes. I use them to take notes during lectures because writing things down helps me remember them. I also use them for making quick sketches or writing reminders.

× We made it in different designs and compared whose airplanes can flew the forest.

✓ We made them in different designs and compared whose airplanes could fly the farthest.

“Airplanes”是复数，所以代词不能用单数“it”，应使用复数“them”。此外，“made them”中的“them”指代前面的纸飞机。

× We made it in different designs and compared whose airplanes can flew the forest.

✓ We made them in different designs and compared whose airplanes could fly the farthest.

情态动词后面必须接动词原形，不能说“can flew”。由于整段是在讲过去的经历，使用过去式情态动词“could”，后面接原形“fly”。

× Well, when I was a child, I always make paper pens with my friends.

✓ Well, when I was a child, I always made paper pens with my friends.

“when I was a child”表示过去的时间，因此主句中的动词也应使用一般过去时。“make”应改为“made”。

× We often made it in different designs and compared both air pens and flow the floods.

✓ We often made them in different designs and compared both air pens and flew over the floods.

“air pens”是复数，因此不能用单数代词“it”，应改为“them”。代词必须与所指代的名词在数上保持一致。

× This makes me a lot of fun.

✓ This made me have a lot of fun.

前文讲的是童年时的经历，因此这里应使用过去式“made”，不能使用现在式“makes”。表达“玩得很开心”时，可以说“have a lot of fun”。

× The last time I write letters was the mother day.

✓ The last time I wrote letters was on Mother's Day.

“The last time”说明是在过去发生的事情，所以“write”应改为过去式“wrote”。表示具体某一天时，通常使用介词“on”；节日名称应写作“Mother's Day”。

× I write it for my mom.

✓ I wrote them for my mom.

这句话描述过去写信的行为，因此“write”应改为“wrote”。前文的“letters”是复数，所以代词应使用“them”，而不是“it”。

× I write it for my mom.

✓ I wrote them for my mom.

“letters”是复数名词，指代它时应使用复数代词“them”。“it”只能指代单数名词。

× I thank for my mom for the the KR for several years.

✓ I thanked my mom for the KR for several years.

“thank”后面应直接接被感谢的人，结构是“thank someone for something”，不能说“thank for my mom”。同时，整段是在描述过去的事情，所以“thank”应改为“thanked”。

× I thank for my mom for the the KR for several years.

✓ I thanked my mom for the KR for several years.

“the the”是重复使用冠词，英语中同一个名词前通常不能连续使用两个相同的定冠词，因此应删除一个“the”。

× Generally speaking, people don't keep handwriting letters with the development of the more and people more and more people prefer to use the email or gmail to send letters on the internet.

✓ Generally speaking, people don't keep handwritten letters. With the development of technology, more and more people prefer to use email or Gmail to send letters on the internet.

这里的“letters”是“被手写的信”，需要使用过去分词“handwritten”作形容词，而不是现在分词“handwriting”。“handwritten letters”表示“手写的信”。

× Generally speaking, people don't keep handwriting letters with the development of the more and people more and more people prefer to use the email or gmail to send letters on the internet.

✓ Generally speaking, people don't keep handwritten letters. With the development of technology, more and more people prefer to use email or Gmail to send letters on the internet.

原句中“the more and people more and more people”结构混乱，两个观点也没有清楚分开。可以拆成两个句子，并使用“more and more people”表示“越来越多的人”。

× Generally speaking, people don't keep handwriting letters with the development of the more and people more and more people prefer to use the email or gmail to send letters on the internet.

✓ Generally speaking, people don't keep handwritten letters. With the development of technology, more and more people prefer to use email or Gmail to send letters on the internet.

“email”在这里表示电子邮件这一通信方式，通常作不可数名词使用，不需要加定冠词“the”。因此应说“use email”，而不是“use the email”。

× Well, as a college student, I often I carry my paper pants with me when I draw out.

✓ Well, as a college student, I often carry my paper pants with me when I draw out.

主语“I”后面重复出现了两个“I”，造成句子结构错误。删除其中一个“I”即可。

× Usually I go out for heavy lessons I can write down the notes, the teacher said on the paper with pens immediately.

✓ Usually, when I go out for heavy lessons, I can immediately write down the things that the teacher says on paper with pens.

原句缺少连接词和清晰的从句结构。“when”可以引导时间状语从句，“that the teacher says”可以修饰前面的“things”。同时，副词“immediately”放在情态动词后、主要动词前，位置更自然。

× Usually I go out for heavy lessons I can write down the notes, the teacher said on the paper with pens immediately.

✓ Usually, when I go out for heavy lessons, I can immediately write down the things that the teacher says on paper with pens.

“paper”在这里表示一般意义上的纸张，通常不需要定冠词“the”，所以应说“on paper”。