Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答切题，也有具体经历，但“transfer a piece of paper into a silver paper cray”表达不自然，应该说“turn a piece of paper into a silver paper crane”。此外，“silver paper crane”与前文的折纸动作衔接不够清楚。建议使用“showed me how to fold...”，并用一个简单的结果句收尾。避免重复使用“When I was young”，注意答案不要超过4句。

예시: Yes, definitely. When I was young, a friend taught me how to fold origami at school. She showed me how to turn a piece of paper into a silver crane step by step. I cannot remember all the details now, but it was a meaningful childhood memory.

제안: 答案结构清楚，包含了活动、步骤和朋友的反应，内容比较具体。主要问题是时态不一致：既然谈过去，应将“open”改为“opened”，“is”改为“was”。另外，“fold them into squares”容易让人误解为把画折成正方形，可以改成“fold the drawings into little cards”。

예시: As a child, I particularly enjoyed drawing on paper. I used watercolor pens to color my pictures and then folded them into little cards for my friends. When they opened the cards, they were always surprised and happy, which made me enjoy the activity even more.

제안: 回答了问题，并且进行了现在与过去的对比，但“chate messages”和“when I miss lame”明显影响理解，应该改为“chat messages”以及“when I miss them”。“letters of longing”不太自然，可以说“letters expressing how much I missed them”。最后一句“meaningful things”过于笼统，建议说明这些信为什么有意义。

예시: No, not really. Nowadays, I usually send chat messages on my phone when I miss my friends because it is much quicker. However, I still keep the letters I wrote as a child, such as thank-you letters and letters expressing how much I missed people. They are meaningful because they remind me of my childhood.

제안: 答案有具体例子，但后半部分出现严重的语音识别或表达问题，导致意思不完整，例如“saw limb and wrapped limb up”和“the later container”。需要先直接回答，再清楚描述发现信件、祖父母的反应以及保存方式。可以使用“Although...”，“so...”等连接词，使逻辑更连贯。

예시: Yes, I think some people still do. Last month, I helped my grandparents organize a cabinet and found about a dozen old letters. The paper had turned yellow, but my grandparents were delighted because the letters brought back many memories. They carefully wrapped them up and put them in a drawer for safekeeping.

제안: 答案的主要观点明确：你通常只带手机；但“he”指代错误，应使用“it”，而且最后一句没有完成，影响答案完整性。“He asked me...”也改变了主语，建议改为“my friend asked me to write down...”。可以补充手机能够记录电话号码和地址，因此不需要纸笔。

예시: No, I usually do not. I only take my phone with me because it can record information and do many other things. For example, last week, a friend asked me to note down some phone numbers and addresses, so I used my phone instead of carrying a pen and paper.

× When they open them, everyone is amazed and happy to see the paintings.

✓ When they opened them, everyone was amazed and happy to see the paintings.

这段话描述的是学生小时候的经历，因此应使用一般过去时。将 open 改为 opened，将 is amazed 改为 was amazed，使整句话的时态保持一致。

× I used watercolor pens to color the drawings, then fold them into squares and give them to my friends.

✓ I used watercolor pens to color the drawings, then folded them into squares and gave them to my friends.

句子描述过去的习惯或经历，多个动作应使用过去时。fold 和 give 应分别改为 folded 和 gave，并与 used 保持平行。

× I use my mobile phone to send the chate messages to my friends now when I miss lame.

✓ I use my mobile phone to send chat messages to my friends now when I miss them.

这里 miss 的宾语指代 friends，所以应使用宾格代词 them，而不是 lame。chat 是正确的拼写形式；“chate”不是正确拼写。

× Yes, definitely last month I was helping my grandparents organize their cabinet.

✓ Yes, definitely. Last month, I was helping my grandparents organize their cabinet.

原句把两个完整意思直接连接在一起，句子结构不清晰。应在 definitely 后断句，并在 Last month 后加逗号，使表达更自然、清楚。

× When they saw limb and wrapped limb up and put them in a drawer because the later container

✓ When they saw them, they wrapped them up and put them in a drawer.

这里指代前文的 letters，应使用 them。人称代词和宾格代词必须与所指对象保持一致。原句后半部分“because the later container”结构不完整且意思不清，因此删除了无法确定含义的部分。

× He can help me with anything last week when I went out with my friends.

✓ It helped me with everything when I went out with my friends last week.

mobile phone 是物品，不能用表示人的 He，应使用 It。由于句子描述的是 last week 发生的事情，can 也应改为过去时 helped。

× He can help me with anything last week when I went out with my friends.

✓ It could help me with everything when I went out with my friends last week.

last week 表示过去时间，因此表示能力的 can 应改为过去式 could。不过，指代手机时仍应使用 It，而不是 He。

× The mobile phone was perfectly capable of doing

✓ The mobile phone was perfectly capable of doing this.

原句以 doing 结尾，但没有说明手机能够做什么，句子结构不完整。需要补充宾语 this，指代前面提到的记录电话号码和地址。