Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答切题，结构清晰，也使用了“so”连接原因和结果。但有几处不自然或错误的表达：应说“paper flowers”，而不是“paper, flowers”；“a relaxing”应改为“relaxing”；“And also”重复且不够自然。可以增加一个具体例子或结果，同时控制在3—4句内。

예시: Yes, I have. When I was a child, making paper crafts was one of my favorite pastimes because electronic devices were not very common. I used to cut and fold paper to make flowers, animals, and simple decorations. I enjoyed it because it was both creative and relaxing.

제안: 回答内容相关，但时态、语法和词语搭配问题较多。“on the paper”通常改为“on paper”或“on a piece of paper”；“I'm I was”应改为“I wasn't”；作品不能用“fascinated”，应使用“interesting”或“impressive”；“refresh me”应改为“refreshed me”。建议先直接回答，再用although说明自己画得不好，最后补充绘画带来的感受。

예시: As a child, I was really fond of drawing on paper. I wasn’t very good at it, and my pictures were quite simple, but I still enjoyed the process. Drawing helped me relax and made me feel refreshed.

제안: 回答观点明确，使用了“Although”和“because”，理由也比较充分。但举例部分存在明显语法错误：“if when my friends birthday”应改为“when it is my friend’s birthday”或“for my friends’ birthdays”；“I will write”应根据习惯改为“I write”。“more genuinely”与“convey my true feelings”语义略重复，可以简化。

예시: Definitely. Although most people communicate through smartphones nowadays, I still enjoy writing physical letters because they feel more personal and sincere. For example, when it is a friend’s birthday, I usually write a short letter to express my feelings and make the occasion more memorable.

제안: 回答逻辑清楚，能够进行对比，并且使用了“but”和“because”。主要问题是“had written letters”应改为“handwritten letters”；“keep memories”不够自然，建议说“preserve memories”或“hold sentimental value”。“But for me, I personally”重复，保留其中一个即可。

예시: It depends on the person. People who mainly communicate online may prefer digital messages and might throw away handwritten letters. However, I personally treasure them because they preserve memories and feel much more personal and meaningful than text messages.

제안: 回答直接，细节具体，使用了“either...or”“so”“as a result”和“unless”，整体衔接很好。主要错误是“note apps”应为“note-taking apps”或“the Notes app”；“unless I'm accepting to fill in the form”不正确，应改为“unless I expect to fill in a form”或“unless I need to fill out a form”；“papers and pens”更自然地说“paper and a pen”。最后一句与前文略有重复，可以适当删减。

예시: Actually, not really. I usually rely on my smartphone to record things by taking photos or using a note-taking app, so I rarely carry paper and a pen. I only bring them when I expect to fill out a form or need to sketch something by hand. Otherwise, digital tools are much more convenient.

× And also I enjoyed doing it because it was creative and a relaxing.

✓ And I also enjoyed doing it because it was creative and relaxing.

“Relaxing”在这里和“creative”并列作表语，前面不需要冠词“a”。“A relaxing”后面必须接名词，例如“a relaxing activity”。另外，“also”放在主语“I”后面更自然。

× Well, as a kid I was really fond of drawing on the paper, although I'm I was not good at it and the work was not so fascinated.

✓ Well, as a kid, I was really fond of drawing on paper, although I was not good at it and my work was not so fascinating.

“Paper”在这里表示一种材料，是不可数名词，泛指时通常不使用定冠词“the”，所以应说“drawing on paper”。

× Well, as a kid I was really fond of drawing on the paper, although I'm I was not good at it and the work was not so fascinated.

✓ Well, as a kid, I was really fond of drawing on paper, although I was not good at it and my work was not so fascinating.

“I'm I was”把现在时和过去时两个结构重复放在一起，造成句子结构错误。因为句子讲的是童年经历，应保留“I was”。

× Well, as a kid I was really fond of drawing on the paper, although I'm I was not good at it and the work was not so fascinated.

✓ Well, as a kid, I was really fond of drawing on paper, although I was not good at it and my work was not so fascinating.

“Fascinated”通常描述人的感受，表示“感到着迷的”；“Work”是引起感受的事物，所以应使用现在分词形容词“fascinating”，表示“令人着迷的”。

× But I really enjoy the UMM process and this experience really refresh me.

✓ But I really enjoyed the process, and this experience really refreshed me.

这段内容描述的是童年经历，应该使用一般过去时。因此，“enjoy”改为“enjoyed”，“refresh”改为“refreshed”。“UMM”是口语填充词，正式回答中可以省略。

× For example if when my friends birthday I will write them a letter and express my sincere feelings.

✓ For example, when it is my friend's birthday, I will write them a letter and express my sincere feelings.

“If”和“when”不能在这里连续使用。这个句子表达的是固定时间情况，应使用“when”。同时需要完整的从句结构“when it is my friend's birthday”。

× For example if when my friends birthday I will write them a letter and express my sincere feelings.

✓ For example, when it is my friend's birthday, I will write them a letter and express my sincere feelings.

在由“when”引导的时间状语从句中，即使主句表示将来，也通常使用一般现在时。因此应说“when it is”，而不是省略动词。还要使用所有格“my friend's”。

× But for me, I personally cherish had written letters because they keep memories and feel more personal and meaningful.

✓ But for me, I personally cherish handwritten letters because they keep memories and feel more personal and meaningful.

“Had written”是过去完成时的谓语结构，不能直接作“letters”的前置定语。表示“手写的”应使用合成形容词“handwritten”。

× As a result, I rarely carry them nowadays, unless I'm accepting to fill in the form or need to sketch something by hand.

✓ As a result, I rarely carry them nowadays, unless I'm expecting to fill in a form or need to sketch something by hand.

“Accepting”表示“接受”，不符合句意。这里想表达“预计需要填写表格”，应使用“expecting”。“Be expecting to do”表示“预计会做某事”。

× As a result, I rarely carry them nowadays, unless I'm accepting to fill in the form or need to sketch something by hand.

✓ As a result, I rarely carry them nowadays, unless I'm expecting to fill in a form or need to sketch something by hand.

这里的“form”是第一次提到且表示泛指的一个表格，所以应使用不定冠词“a”，而不是定冠词“the”。