Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly in the present perfect, then give one or two specific examples. Improve grammar and word choice: say “make paper crafts,” “with coloured paper,” “made boats and flowers,” and “folding or making crafts” instead of “grading crafts.” Avoid the unfinished final sentence and use linking words such as “when” or “because” correctly.

예시: Yes, I have made several paper crafts, especially boats and flowers. When I was a child, I often made them with coloured paper and played with my school friends. It was fun because we could compare our designs and create something beautiful together.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence answering what you liked doing. Since you are talking about childhood, consistently use the past tense: “I often folded,” “I cut,” and “I made.” Explain the process more naturally and avoid fragments such as “About a flowers”; use linking words like “then” to show the sequence.

예시: As a child, I liked making paper flowers and boats. I usually folded a sheet of paper several times, cut it into different shapes, and then opened it to reveal a pretty design. I also enjoyed making paper boats and floating them in water.

제안: Use the present simple because the question asks about your current habits: “I still write” and “I write.” Avoid repeating “physical letter” and “write a letter,” and use the natural expressions “request leave” and “a permission letter.” Organize the answer with a direct statement followed by the specific example of writing to your principal.

예시: Yes, I still write physical letters occasionally. As an engineering student, I sometimes need to write formal requests, such as a leave application to my principal. However, I usually use email for informal communication because it is faster.

제안: Give a general answer about people first, then provide your personal example. Correct the grammar by saying “a handwritten letter,” “my boyfriend gave me,” and “I was in eighth grade.” Replace “memorable by looking” with “It brings back special memories whenever I read it,” and reduce fillers such as “uh” and “umm.”

예시: Yes, I think many people still keep handwritten letters, especially if they are emotionally important. For example, I still have a love letter that my boyfriend gave me when I was in eighth grade. It is very personal, and reading it brings back many special memories.

제안: Answer using the present simple and say “carry paper or a pen with me,” not “with my hand.” Clearly contrast your usual habit with the situations in which you need them. Give a specific use, such as taking notes or writing down ideas, and avoid unnecessary fillers and the sentence fragment after “Umm.”

예시: I do not usually carry paper and a pen when I go out, but I take them with me to university. They are useful for taking quick notes, writing down ideas, or recording important information during classes. Otherwise, I normally use my phone for this purpose.

× Yes, I love to make a craft in some colour papers.

✓ Yes, I love making crafts with coloured paper.

Crafts is plural because the student is speaking about crafts in general. Paper is usually uncountable when referring to the material, so colour papers is incorrect in this context.

× Yes, I love to make a craft in some colour papers.

✓ Yes, I love making crafts with coloured paper.

Use with to describe the material used to make something. Use making crafts rather than make a craft when discussing an activity in general.

× In my childhood, I have made a boat a flowers in a colour papers.

✓ When I was a child, I made a boat and some flowers out of coloured paper.

A finished time in the past, such as when I was a child, requires the simple past made, not the present perfect have made.

× In my childhood, I have made a boat a flowers in a colour papers.

✓ When I was a child, I made a boat and some flowers out of coloured paper.

Flowers must be plural because the sentence refers to more than one flower. Paper is uncountable when it means the material.

× In my childhood, I have made a boat a flowers in a colour papers.

✓ When I was a child, I made a boat and some flowers out of coloured paper.

The two objects need to be connected with the conjunction and. The original sentence is missing this conjunction.

× Uh, I have often played with my school friends by grading some crafts.

✓ I have often played with my school friends by making crafts.

After the preposition by, use a gerund ending in -ing. Making is the appropriate verb for producing crafts; grading means evaluating or marking work.

× It is more interesting and excitement when.

✓ It is more interesting and exciting.

Interesting and exciting are adjectives and should describe the activity. Excitement is a noun, so it cannot be used in the same adjective position.

× It is more interesting and excitement when.

✓ It is more interesting and exciting.

The original sentence is incomplete because when introduces a dependent clause that has no continuation. Finish the sentence or remove when.

× About a flowers and I often folding a paper in four sides and I will cut in a different way and I will open that paper.

✓ I often folded paper into four sections, cut it in different ways, and opened it to see the designs.

Do not use a before the plural noun flowers. Paper is uncountable when referring to the material, so a paper is not needed here.

× About a flowers and I often folding a paper in four sides and I will cut in a different way and I will open that paper.

✓ I often folded paper into four sections, cut it in different ways, and opened it to see the designs.

The verb after often should be in the simple past because the student is describing a childhood activity. Folding is not correct in this sentence structure.

× About a flowers and I often folding a paper in four sides and I will cut in a different way and I will open that paper.

✓ I often folded paper into four sections, cut it in different ways, and opened it to see the designs.

The answer describes repeated actions in childhood, so use the simple past: folded, cut, and opened. Avoid will when describing a past routine.

× About a flowers and I often folding a paper in four sides and I will cut in a different way and I will open that paper.

✓ I often folded paper into four sections, cut it in different ways, and opened it to see the designs.

Use into to describe dividing or folding paper into sections. The preposition in is not suitable in this expression.

× It will looks, uh, beautiful designs.

✓ It would look like a beautiful design.

After the modal verb would or will, use the base form of the verb: look, not looks. Would is appropriate because the student is describing what happened after a past action.

× It will looks, uh, beautiful designs.

✓ It would look like a beautiful design.

The verb after will must be in the base form, so looks is incorrect. The form look must follow the modal verb.

× It will looks, uh, beautiful designs.

✓ It would look like a beautiful design.

The sentence refers to the result as one design, so design should be singular. Use a before the singular countable noun design.

× And when I was child, uh, I was often make a boat.

✓ When I was a child, I often made boats.

The phrase when I was a child refers to a past routine, so use the simple past made. Do not use was before the base verb make in this structure.

× And when I was child, uh, I was often make a boat.

✓ When I was a child, I often made boats.

Child is a singular countable noun, so it requires the article a: a child.

× Yes, I will write a physical letter because I am a student in an engineering college, I often wrote a letter of some permission letters.

✓ Yes, I write physical letters because I am an engineering student, and I often write permission letters.

The question asks about a current habit, so use the simple present write, not the future form will write or the past form wrote.

× Yes, I will write a physical letter because I am a student in an engineering college, I often wrote a letter of some permission letters.

✓ Yes, I write physical letters because I am an engineering student, and I often write permission letters.

Two independent clauses cannot be joined only with a comma. Use and or separate the clauses into two sentences.

× Yes, I will write a physical letter because I am a student in an engineering college, I often wrote a letter of some permission letters.

✓ Yes, I write physical letters because I am an engineering student, and I often write permission letters.

The answer describes letters in general, so use the plural forms letters and permission letters rather than singular forms.

× And if I if I want to put a leave, I want to write a leave letter to my principal, I often write a physical letter.

✓ If I want to take leave, I write a leave letter to my principal. I often write a physical letter.

The correct expression is take leave, not put a leave. Also, remove the repeated if to make the conditional clause grammatical.

× And if I if I want to put a leave, I want to write a leave letter to my principal, I often write a physical letter.

✓ If I want to take leave, I write a leave letter to my principal. I often write a physical letter.

The original sentence contains a repeated if and several clauses joined incorrectly. Divide it into clear sentences and use the correct conditional structure.

× I often write a physical letter.

✓ I often write physical letters.

The student is describing a regular activity in general, so the plural form letters is more appropriate than the singular form a letter.

× Uh, yes, of course I do have a handwritten letters, umm, my boyfriend gave when I was studying in 8th standard, he was gave me a, a love letter and I still keep that letter.

✓ Yes, I have a handwritten letter that my boyfriend gave me when I was in eighth grade. He gave me a love letter, and I still keep it.

A handwritten letter is singular, so it requires a, not a handwritten letters. The sentence should consistently use singular forms when referring to one letter.

× Uh, yes, of course I do have a handwritten letters, umm, my boyfriend gave when I was studying in 8th standard, he was gave me a, a love letter and I still keep that letter.

✓ Yes, I have a handwritten letter that my boyfriend gave me when I was in eighth grade. He gave me a love letter, and I still keep it.

The original contains several clauses joined without correct connectors. Use that to introduce the relative clause and separate the complete ideas into two sentences.

× he was gave me a, a love letter and I still keep that letter.

✓ He gave me a love letter, and I still keep it.

The simple past form gave is sufficient. Do not use was before gave because was gave is not a correct past-tense construction.

× he was gave me a, a love letter and I still keep that letter.

✓ He gave me a love letter, and I still keep it.

Was must be followed by a present participle in the continuous form or a past participle in the passive voice. Gave is a simple past form, so it should be used without was.

× Uh, and it is very, uh, personal and very, uh, memorable by looking.

✓ It is very personal and memorable to me when I look at it.

Use to me to express personal significance. The phrase memorable by looking is not a correct prepositional construction.

× Often I don't carry any paper or pen with my hand when I was going out.

✓ I do not often carry paper or a pen with me when I go out.

The answer describes a current habit, so use the simple present go, not the past form was going. The negative adverb often is more naturally placed after do not.

× Often I don't carry any paper or pen with my hand when I was going out.

✓ I do not often carry paper or a pen with me when I go out.

Use with me to mean that you have something in your possession. With my hand incorrectly suggests that the objects are held physically in your hand.

× I will take a paper or pen when I go to university or some educational work.

✓ I take paper or a pen when I go to university or do educational work.

This sentence describes a general habit, so use the simple present take rather than the future form will take.

× I will take a paper or pen when I go to university or some educational work.

✓ I take paper or a pen when I go to university or do educational work.

Use do with work in this context: do educational work. The original phrase or some educational work incorrectly places a noun after go to.

× But uh, if we carry a paper or pen, it is very useful to note some, uh, ideas.

✓ But if we carry paper or a pen, it is very useful for noting ideas.

Paper is uncountable when referring to the material, so do not use the quantifier a before it. Use a pen because pen is a singular countable noun.