Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly and use the correct vocabulary and grammar. “Plains” should be “planes,” and “we use paper this craft” should be “we used paper to make crafts.” Use the past simple consistently because you are describing childhood experiences. Add one specific example to make your answer more effective.

예시: Yes, I used to make paper planes when I was a child. I also made simple paper crafts at school, such as flowers and animals. It was enjoyable because I could create something with just a sheet of paper.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence and organize the activities with a linking word such as “also.” Use natural expressions such as “fold paper to make flowers” rather than “fold papers making it the paper flowers.” Since the question refers to the past, change “I like” to “I liked.” Add a reason or brief detail.

예시: When I was a child, I liked folding paper to make flowers. I also enjoyed drawing pictures on it, especially pictures of animals and my family. These activities were simple, but they helped me develop my creativity.

제안: Make the answer directly match the question by saying “Yes, I do” or “Yes, I still do.” Use the present tense because you are describing a current habit. “Letters for my future self” is understandable, but explain that you write journal-style letters and keep them to read later. Use “them” instead of “it” if referring to letters.

예시: Yes, I still write physical letters, although I mainly write them to my future self. I use them as a kind of journal to record my thoughts and experiences. I plan to read them again in a few years to see how I have changed.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then explain it with a contrast. The answer contains several unclear phrases, including “were given hundreds in letters,” “we earned them more modern world,” and “Hamu use phones.” A natural version would be “People may keep handwritten letters if they are meaningful, but most people now use phones because digital communication is faster.” Use “them” for plural letters and add a specific example.

예시: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters, especially if they are from someone important or contain a special memory. However, many people prefer using phones because texting is faster and more convenient. For example, people usually send birthday wishes by message rather than by post.

제안: This is a relevant and natural response, but answer the question more explicitly by saying whether you carry paper and pens. Replace “when I go outside” with a more specific situation, such as “when I go to a café or travel.” Add a reason or example to make the answer more developed.

예시: Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and a pen when I go out. I like writing down my thoughts and ideas, especially when I am sitting in a café or travelling. It helps me remember interesting experiences and organize my ideas.

× Also we use paper this craft when we were at school.

✓ Also, we used paper for this craft when we were at school.

The activity happened in the past, so use must be changed to used. The preposition for is needed to show the purpose of using the paper. Add a comma after Also when it introduces the sentence.

× When I was a child we used to fold papers making it the paper flowers also I like to use it for drawing

✓ When I was a child, I used to fold paper to make paper flowers, and I also liked to use it for drawing.

The infinitive to make is used to express purpose after fold. Since the speaker is describing childhood, like should be changed to the past tense liked. The original sentence contains several ideas joined without suitable punctuation or a conjunction, so and is added to improve the sentence structure.

× Of course I wrote letters for my future self. I use it as a journal.

✓ Of course, I write letters to my future self. I use them as a journal.

The question asks about a current habit, so wrote should be changed to the present-tense form write. Letters is plural, so it must be replaced with the plural pronoun them. The preposition to is more appropriate for indicating the recipient of the letters.

× Maybe if people were given hundreds in letters they might still keep it but knowing that we earned them more modern world where Hamu use phones instead of writing letters

✓ Maybe, if people received hundreds of letters, they might still keep them. However, nowadays we live in a more modern world where people use phones instead of writing letters.

The quantifier should be hundreds of letters, not hundreds in letters. Because letters is plural, it should be referred to with them rather than it. The phrase a more modern world requires the indefinite article a. The original sentence is missing important words and punctuation, so it is divided into two sentences and rewritten with a clear subject and verb. People is used as the subject instead of the unclear word Hamu.