Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答了问题，也提供了童年经历和具体活动，但表达不够自然，存在较多停顿、重复和语法错误。比如“the smartphone didn't spread as nowadays”应改为“smartphones were not as widespread as they are today”；“to fold the paper to sound like rabbit”意思不清，可以直接说“fold paper into animals”。建议先直接回答，再用一个具体例子补充，控制在2—3句内。

예시: Yes, I made simple paper crafts when I was a child. Smartphones were not as widespread as they are today, so I entertained myself by making paper cards and folding paper into animals, such as rabbits and frogs.

제안: 内容基本切题，提到了画画和剪纸，也有家庭成员、花和竹子等细节。但句子结构混乱，时态和词语搭配错误较多，例如“drawing and do some paper cutting”应改为“drawing and doing paper cutting”，“let lettuce become”可能是想表达“让纸变成”，应说“turn paper into”。建议使用“First..., and I also...”来清晰组织两个活动，并避免重复“always like drawing”。

예시: I mainly enjoyed drawing and making paper cuttings. I often drew my family and friends, and I also cut paper into shapes such as flowers and bamboo. These activities were simple, but they allowed me to be creative.

제안: 回答直接，理由也很清楚，符合Part 1的简洁要求。不过“a bad I have a very terrible handwriting”存在明显的自我修正和重复；“type in the social media”不自然，应改为“type messages on social media”。可以加入“it is faster and more convenient”作为第二个具体理由，使答案更完整。

예시: Not really, to be honest. My handwriting is quite messy, so I usually type messages on social media instead. It is faster, more convenient, and easier for people to read.

제안: 观点明确，也尝试举出亲戚寄明信片的例子，但人物代词、时态和句子结构错误较多，导致意思不清。例如“my sister or my cousin”应确定一个人物；“travel to the Japanese”应改为“travelled to Japan”；“what he feel when he meets the”应具体表达为“how she felt during the trip”。建议使用一个清晰、完整的例子，并用“for example”连接。

예시: Yes, I think some people still keep handwritten letters because they feel more personal and memorable. For example, my cousin sent me a postcard when she travelled to Japan, and I kept it because it described how she felt during the trip.

제안: 回答有过去与现在的对比，也说明了不带纸笔的原因，但存在较多重复、停顿和词语误用。“was used to bring”应改为“used to bring”，“not so used to use”应改为“was not used to using”，“the pair is too big”应改为“paper and pens take up space”；最后一句意思不清，可以说“my smartphone can do everything I need”。建议用“以前……，但现在……”的结构，并控制在3句左右。

예시: Not really. When I was a freshman, I used to carry paper and pens because I was not used to taking notes on my smartphone. However, I do not carry them now because they take up space, and my smartphone can do everything I need.

× when I was a child, you know that the smartphone didn't spread as nowadays

✓ when I was a child, smartphones weren't as widespread as they are nowadays

泛指智能手机时应使用复数 smartphones，而不是单数 the smartphone。描述过去的情况时，smartphones 后面使用 were 的过去式。

× the smartphone didn't spread as nowadays

✓ smartphones weren't as widespread as they are nowadays

as...as 结构需要比较两个完整对象，不能直接说 as nowadays。这里应使用“not as + 形容词 + as”结构，表示“没有现在这么普及”。

× Then I can only amuse myself by doing some paper cards

✓ Then I could only amuse myself by making some paper cards

这里描述的是童年时期的能力或可能性，应使用过去式情态动词 could，而不是现在时 can。

× by doing some paper cards and to make, to fold the paper

✓ by making some paper cards and folding the paper

介词 by 后面通常接动名词（动词-ing形式）。并列动词也应保持形式一致，因此使用 making and folding。

× to sound like rabbit or the frog rabbit

✓ to make the paper sound like a rabbit or a frog

可数名词 rabbit 和 frog 以单数形式出现时，前面需要使用不定冠词 a。这里不应使用 the frog，因为说的是任意一只青蛙。

× drawing and do some paper cutting always like, you know, a child, always like drawing

✓ As a child, I always liked drawing and doing some paper cutting.

原句缺少清晰的主语和谓语，且语序混乱。可以用“As a child”引出时间背景，再用“I always liked...”构成完整句子。

× a child, always like drawing

✓ As a child, I always liked drawing

“when I was a child”表示过去的时间，因此描述当时的喜好应使用过去式 liked，而不是现在式 like。

× I always liked drawing and do some paper cutting

✓ I always liked drawing and doing some paper cutting

liked 后面并列两个活动时，两个动词应保持平行结构。drawing 和 doing 都使用动名词形式。

× I will draw my family, my friend and any other things

✓ I would draw my family, my friends, and other things

通常不止一个朋友时应使用复数 friends。other things 已经表示“其他事物”，前面不需要再使用 any。由于是在回忆童年习惯，would 比 will 更合适。

× the people cutting also, I like to cut the paper and to let lettuce become a beautiful drawing

✓ As for paper cutting, I also liked cutting paper and turning it into beautiful drawings

原句的“the people cutting”不能构成正确的英语短语，句子成分连接也不清楚。使用“As for paper cutting”引出话题，并用 turning it into... 表示“把它变成……”。

× to let lettuce become a beautiful drawing

✓ to turn it into a beautiful drawing

lettuce 是错误的名词，且前文的 paper 应用代词 it 指代。turn it into... 是正确的“把它变成……”结构。

× like the flowers or bamboo or any other things

✓ like flowers, bamboo, or other things

这里是在泛指花和竹子，不需要使用定冠词 the。复数可数名词 flowers 可以直接表示泛指；bamboo 是不可数名词，也不需要冠词。

× Like I am a bad I have a very terrible handwriting

✓ To be honest, I have terrible handwriting

原句中“I am a bad”后面缺少名词，导致句子结构不完整。handwriting 通常是不可数名词，不能说 a handwriting，因此应直接说 terrible handwriting。

× I prefer to type in the social media

✓ I prefer to type on social media

表示在社交媒体上发布或打字时，通常使用介词 on，而不是 in。social media 一般不需要 the。

× I prefer to type on social media rather than writing the physical letter

✓ I prefer to type on social media rather than write physical letters

prefer to do... rather than do... 结构中，rather than 后面通常使用动词原形 write，与前面的 to type 保持平行。

× rather than writing the physical letter

✓ rather than write physical letters

这里是泛指平时写的纸质信件，应使用复数 letters。physical letters 前面也不需要使用 the。

× my sister or my cousin like she prefer handwriting

✓ my sister or my cousin prefers handwriting

这里的主语表示一个人：my sister or my cousin，因此谓语应使用第三人称单数形式 prefers。原句中的 like 和 she 使主语结构重复且不清楚。

× when when her TRA travel to the Japanese. He sent me a postcard

✓ When she travels to Japan, she sends me a postcard

前文指的是 sister 或 cousin，应该使用女性代词 she，而不是 he。her 不能直接作为句子主语；主语位置应使用 she。

× when her TRA travel to the Japanese

✓ when she travels to Japan

主语 she 是第三人称单数，所以动词 travel 要加 -s，变成 travels。Japan 是国家名称，前面通常不使用 the。

× He sent me a postcard and returned what he feel when he meets the

✓ She sends me a postcard and tells me how she feels when she meets people there

该回答是在描述现在仍然存在的习惯，因此 sends、tells、feels 和 meets 使用一般现在时。第三人称单数主语 she 后面的动词需要加 -s。

× returned what he feel when he meets the

✓ tells me how she feels when she meets people there

原句中的 returned what... 结构不完整，the 后面也缺少名词。使用 tells me how she feels 构成完整的间接表达，并用 people there 补充 meets 的宾语。

× I was used to bring papers and pen with me

✓ I used to bring paper and pens with me

表示过去经常做某事时，应使用 used to bring，而不是 was used to bring。pens 是可数名词，泛指多支笔时使用复数；paper 在这里可作不可数名词。

× because I'm not so used to use my smartphone

✓ because I wasn't used to using my smartphone

be used to 表示“习惯于”时，to 是介词，后面必须接名词或动名词。因此 use 应改为 using。由于谈论过去的大学新生时期，am 也应改为过去式 was。

× But nowadays I kindly don't bring it

✓ But nowadays I generally don't bring them

kindly 通常表示“友善地”或用于礼貌请求，不适合表达“通常”。这里应使用 generally。paper and pens 是复数，所以代词 it 应改为 them。

× I don't bring it because the paper is too big to bring

✓ I don't bring them because the paper is too bulky to carry

it 不能指代前面复数的 paper and pens，应使用 them。bring them 重复使用不自然，因此用 carry 表示“携带”更清楚。

× the smartphone can make the Aries thing I want to do

✓ my smartphone can do the things I want to do

原句中的 can make the Aries thing 结构不完整，make 也不能自然表达手机完成任务的意思。使用 can do the things I want to do 可以构成完整、清晰的句子。