Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly and use accurate craft-related vocabulary. The phrases “money class,” “rose royal cars,” and “money more” are unclear, which makes the answer difficult to understand. Use the past simple for completed childhood activities or the present perfect for activities continuing until now. Also, organize the examples in one clear sentence and use “such as” to introduce them.

예시: Yes, I have made many crafts with paper since I was a child. I have folded paper into roses, toy cars, and small animals. I especially enjoyed making origami because it was creative and relaxing.

제안: State your main preference clearly and avoid the incomplete sentence “More than I like to turn them into origami.” Use “rather than” or “more than” in a complete comparison. In addition, say “write in Mandarin and English” instead of “put my Mandarin ... on paper,” and connect the supporting details logically.

예시: When I was a child, I mainly enjoyed practicing my handwriting on paper rather than making origami. I used to write in both Mandarin and English, and I sometimes practiced different calligraphy styles. It helped me improve my handwriting and express my creativity.

제안: The answer is relevant and includes a personal example, but “but however” is redundant. Use the present tense consistently: “when she is asleep” describes a current habit. Also, “I hope she appreciates...” sounds more natural than “I hope that she would appreciate...”; explain briefly why you leave the notes.

예시: I do not really write physical letters these days. However, I still leave handwritten notes for my mother when she is asleep because I want to surprise her in the morning. I hope she appreciates my handwriting and calligraphy.

제안: Give a clearer reason for keeping handwritten letters, such as their sentimental or personal value, rather than focusing mainly on artistic purposes. Do not use “although” and “but” together. The natural noun is “calligraphy,” not “calligraphing,” and the answer would be stronger with a specific example or contrast with digital messages.

예시: Yes, I think some people still keep handwritten letters because they have sentimental value. Although smartphones are extremely common, a handwritten letter feels more personal and can preserve an important memory. Some people also appreciate the beauty of calligraphy.

제안: The answer contains several unclear expressions, including “pur my lemmy paints,” “exercise books,” and “press handwriting.” Use simple, precise vocabulary such as “a pen,” “a notebook,” and “write by hand.” Use the correct word order—“I always carry...” rather than “I always can...” —and separate the reason into a second sentence.

예시: Yes, I usually carry a pen and a small notebook with me when I go out. I often write down ideas, reminders, or new vocabulary because I prefer writing by hand to typing on my phone. They are also useful when I need to make a quick note.

× Yes, I made money class with paper since I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I have made many crafts with paper since I was a kid.

The phrase since I was a kid describes an action that began in the past and continues to the present, so the present perfect have made is needed. Many crafts is also the grammatically appropriate plural noun phrase.

× I turned paper into rose royal cars. Leopard tanks and money more.

✓ I turned paper into roses, royal cars, leopard tanks, and many more crafts.

The second part is a sentence fragment because it does not contain a complete verb structure. The items should be included in one complete sentence and separated with commas.

× I turned paper into rose royal cars. Leopard tanks and money more.

✓ I turned paper into roses, royal cars, leopard tanks, and many more crafts.

Money is not the correct quantifier in this context. Many more is used to refer to additional plural crafts.

× I loved to practice handwriting on paper when I was a child. More than I like to turn them into origami.

✓ I loved practicing handwriting on paper when I was a child more than turning paper into origami.

After the comparative structure more than, the two activities should have parallel forms. Practicing and turning are both gerunds, which makes the comparison grammatically balanced.

× I loved to practice handwriting on paper when I was a child. More than I like to turn them into origami.

✓ I loved practicing handwriting on paper when I was a child more than turning it into origami.

Paper is an uncountable singular noun, so it should be replaced by the singular pronoun it, not the plural pronoun them.

× I loved to practice handwriting on paper when I was a child. More than I like to turn them into origami.

✓ I loved practicing handwriting on paper when I was a child more than turning it into origami.

More than I like to turn them into origami is an incomplete sentence because it does not have an independent subject and verb structure. It should be connected to the preceding clause.

× I don't really write physical letters these days, but however I still leave handwritten notes to my mother when she was asleep, I hope that she would appreciate my handwriting and calligraphic skills.

✓ I do not really write physical letters these days, but I still leave handwritten notes for my mother when she is asleep. I hope that she appreciates my handwriting and calligraphic skills.

But and however both express contrast, so using them together is redundant. Use one contrast marker only. The original sentence also joins two complete ideas with a comma, so they should be separated into two sentences.

× I don't really write physical letters these days, but however I still leave handwritten notes to my mother when she was asleep, I hope that she would appreciate my handwriting and calligraphic skills.

✓ I do not really write physical letters these days, but I still leave handwritten notes for my mother when she is asleep. I hope that she appreciates my handwriting and calligraphic skills.

The sentence describes a current routine, so the present tense is needed: is asleep. After I hope, the present tense appreciates is appropriate for a present expectation.

× Although smartphones are so common these days But people still appreciate the traditional skills such as calligraphing.

✓ Although smartphones are so common these days, people still appreciate traditional skills such as calligraphy.

Although already introduces a contrast clause, so But must not be added. A comma is placed after the introductory although clause.

× Although smartphones are so common these days But people still appreciate the traditional skills such as calligraphing.

✓ Although smartphones are so common these days, people still appreciate traditional skills such as calligraphy.

The original sentence contains two competing conjunctions and incorrect punctuation. The corrected version has one subordinate clause followed by one independent clause.

× Yes, I always can pur my lemmy paints made from Germany as well as exercise books with me when I go out because I still love press handwriting this will never change.

✓ Yes, I can always carry my Lamy pens made in Germany, as well as exercise books, with me when I go out because I still love practicing handwriting. This will never change.

The adverb always normally comes after the modal verb can, so the correct order is can always carry. The sentence is also divided before This will never change because the original contains two independent clauses.

× Yes, I always can pur my lemmy paints made from Germany as well as exercise books with me when I go out because I still love press handwriting this will never change.

✓ Yes, I can always carry my Lamy pens made in Germany, as well as exercise books, with me when I go out because I still love practicing handwriting. This will never change.

Use made in Germany when referring to the country where something was manufactured. Made from is normally used for the material that something consists of.

× Yes, I always can pur my lemmy paints made from Germany as well as exercise books with me when I go out because I still love press handwriting this will never change.

✓ Yes, I can always carry my Lamy pens made in Germany, as well as exercise books, with me when I go out because I still love practicing handwriting. This will never change.

The verb love can be followed by a gerund. Practicing handwriting is the correct verb form, not press handwriting.

× Yes, I always can pur my lemmy paints made from Germany as well as exercise books with me when I go out because I still love press handwriting this will never change.

✓ Yes, I can always carry my Lamy pens made in Germany, as well as exercise books, with me when I go out because I still love practicing handwriting. This will never change.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence because the clause ending in handwriting is directly followed by another independent clause. A full stop is needed before This will never change.