Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 这个回答没有直接回答问题，而是询问了“crafts”的意思。即使不完全理解，也可以根据“paper”猜测并给出简单回答，例如说明自己是否做过纸艺。注意使用正确的疑问句： “What do you mean by ‘crafts’?”

예시: Yes, I have. I used to make paper flowers and simple greeting cards when I was at school.

제안: 回答抓住了“paper plane”这一主题，但语法和句子不完整。“like for the paper to make”应改为“liked making paper planes”。建议先直接回答，再补充一个具体细节或原因，并确保句子完整。

예시: When I was a child, I liked making paper planes. I often had competitions with my friends to see whose plane could fly the farthest.

제안: 回答没有明确使用“Yes”或“No”，而且存在重复和语法错误，如“send send”和“such as WeChat”。应先直接表明自己是否写实体信件，再说明现在通常使用微信或电子邮件联系。

예시: No, I rarely write physical letters nowadays. I usually use WeChat or email because they are faster and more convenient.

제안: 回答有明确观点，也提供了原因和例子，但内容有些绝对且最后一句未完成。可以说“some people still keep them”以避免过度概括，并使用更自然的表达，如“keep handwritten letters as memories”。建议控制在2至3个完整句子内。

예시: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters, especially when they have sentimental value. However, most people communicate online through WeChat or email, so handwritten letters are much less common than they used to be.

제안: 回答的核心意思是“不带”，但语法、词汇和表达非常不清楚。“adjust the god”和“take a form”不符合语境，可能想表达“take a phone”。应直接回答，再说明手机比纸笔更方便，并给出具体功能，例如记笔记、导航或拍照。

예시: No, I usually carry my phone instead of paper and pens. It is more convenient because I can take notes, check directions, and send messages with it.

× What's a mean of crafts?

✓ What does “crafts” mean?

询问某个词的意思时，应使用“What does + 名词 + mean?”的结构，而不能使用“What’s a mean...”。

× What's a mean of crafts?

✓ What does “crafts” mean?

mean在这里不是可数名词，不应使用冠词“a”。同时，询问词义时应使用固定结构“What does ... mean?”。

× I just like for the paper to make a paper plane or maybe

✓ I just liked making paper planes.

问题使用了过去时“What did you like...”，所以回答也应使用过去时liked，而不是现在时like。

× I just like for the paper to make a paper plane or maybe

✓ I just liked making paper planes.

like后面表示“喜欢做某事”时，通常使用动名词结构“like doing something”，因此应说“liked making”，而不是“like for the paper to make”。

× I just like for the paper to make a paper plane or maybe

✓ I just liked making paper planes.

这里是在泛指小时候喜欢制作的纸飞机，因此使用复数paper planes更自然。

× Noadays people usually use such as We chat or use email to send send a message to each other needs

✓ Nowadays, people usually use WeChat or email to send messages to each other.

原句中“use such as WeChat”结构不完整，send重复，句末的needs也没有合适的语法作用。可以使用“use A or B to do C”的完整结构。

× Noadays people usually use such as We chat or use email to send send a message to each other needs

✓ Nowadays, people usually use WeChat or email to send messages to each other.

people给很多人发送多条信息，因此message应使用复数messages。

× We always talk to each other online, such as we chat or sometimes send email to each other.

✓ We always talk to each other online; for example, we use WeChat or sometimes send emails to each other.

such as通常用于列举名词或名词短语，不能直接连接完整句子“we chat”。列举例子时，可以使用“for example”。

× We do not we have we have not used the

✓ We do not use handwritten letters anymore.

原句重复使用we和have，最后也没有完成句意。完整句子必须有清晰的主语、谓语和完整意思。这里可以改为“We do not use handwritten letters anymore.”

× No, not very it's not convenient for us we always adjust the god we always take a form to when we travel it's very convenient and it can it can do more things than paper and pens.

✓ No, not really. It is not convenient for us. We always take a phone with us when we travel. It is very convenient, and it can do more things than paper and pens can.

原句把多个完整句子连续连接在一起，形成连句错误；此外，部分词语重复，导致句子结构不清晰。应将不同意思分成几个完整句子。

× we always take a form to when we travel

✓ We always take a phone with us when we travel.

表示“随身携带某物”时，应使用“take something with us”，而不是“take ... to”。when we travel已经表示“旅行时”，不需要在前面添加多余的to。

× it can do more things than paper and pens.

✓ It can do more things than paper and pens can.

比较“能做的事情”时，比较对象应是“纸和笔能做的事情”。在paper and pens后加上can，可以使比较结构更完整、清楚。