Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and well developed, with a clear personal example. However, keep the verb tenses consistent: use “I especially enjoyed” and “they were creative and relaxing” because you are talking about the past. Also, avoid repeating “them” unclearly; specify that you are referring to the cards. A more natural phrase is “a favourite hobby of mine.”

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I used to draw cartoon characters and make homemade cards for my family. I especially enjoyed folding and decorating the cards because it was creative and relaxing. It became a favourite hobby of mine at the time.

제안: You provide several relevant activities, but there are frequent grammar and word-choice errors. Since the question asks about the past, change “do” to “did,” “letter” to “letters,” and “want” to “wanted.” Use clearer linking and phrasing, such as “In addition” and “I found this special because…”. Also, say “write letters to my friends” rather than “wrote letter to friend.”

예시: I used to make paper aeroplanes and fold origami animals for fun. In addition, I drew pictures and wrote letters to my friends to keep in touch. I found this special because we could reread each other’s letters, drawings, and stories.

제안: Your main idea is clear, but the second sentence contains several tense, article, and pronoun errors. Replace “I write used to write” with “I used to write,” “us close childhood friend” with “my close childhood friend,” and “physical letter” with “physical letters.” The phrase “every day” may sound exaggerated, so “regularly” would be more natural. Use a clearer contrast with “However, I used to…”

예시: Not really. With the advancement of technology, I now use email instead of posting letters. However, I used to write physical letters regularly to my close childhood friend, Rafl, because we lived far apart. Letters felt more personal than electronic messages.

제안: You express a relevant opinion and give a meaningful example, but the sentence is difficult to follow because of missing words and incorrect phrasing. Replace “they whether sentimental keepsakes” with “they are sentimental keepsakes,” and say “some people might treasure letters.” Add punctuation and linking words, such as “For example” and “because.” Make sure the pronoun agrees with the plural noun: “letters remind them,” not “letters reminds them.”

예시: Yes, I think many people still keep handwritten letters because they are sentimental keepsakes from friends or relatives. For example, some people may treasure letters written during a difficult time because those letters remind them of the support they received. They can also preserve important memories.

제안: Your answer directly addresses the question, but it needs clearer sentence structure and several vocabulary corrections. Say “a notebook and a pen,” “I often need them to jot down,” and “quick reminders.” Explain the final idea more clearly; “if someone comes up” does not fit the intended meaning. Use a linking phrase such as “For example” before listing phone numbers and addresses.

예시: Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and a pen when I go out. I often need them to jot down phone numbers, addresses, or quick reminders. For example, if I think of an important task while I am outside, I can write it down immediately.

× Yes, I did. When I was a child, I used to draw cartoon characters and make homemade paper cards for my family. I especially enjoy folding and decorating them because it was creative and relaxing and it became my favourite hobby back then.

✓ Yes, I have. When I was a child, I used to draw cartoon characters and make homemade paper cards for my family. I especially enjoyed folding and decorating them because it was creative and relaxing, and it became my favourite hobby back then.

The question uses the present perfect tense, Have you made any crafts?, so the short answer should be Yes, I have. Because the student is describing a past hobby, enjoy should be changed to enjoyed. Use the past tense consistently when talking about childhood activities.

× I also do lots of pictures.

✓ I also drew lots of pictures.

The question asks about what the student did as a child, so the past tense is required. The past form of draw is drew. Also, we normally say draw pictures rather than do pictures.

× I often wrote letter to friend when I want to keep in touch which felt specially because we could reread each other's drawings and stories

✓ I often wrote letters to friends when I wanted to keep in touch, which felt special because we could reread each other's drawings and stories.

The sentence describes a repeated activity, so letter and friend should be plural: letters and friends. Plural nouns are appropriate because the student wrote more than one letter to more than one friend.

× I often wrote letter to friend when I want to keep in touch which felt specially because we could reread each other's drawings and stories

✓ I often wrote letters to friends when I wanted to keep in touch, which felt special because we could reread each other's drawings and stories.

The sentence is about childhood, so want should be changed to the past-tense form wanted. Keep the verbs in the same past-time framework: wrote, wanted, felt, and could.

× I often wrote letter to friend when I want to keep in touch which felt specially because we could reread each other's drawings and stories

✓ I often wrote letters to friends when I wanted to keep in touch, which felt special because we could reread each other's drawings and stories.

Specially usually means for a particular purpose, while special describes something that has emotional or unusual value. Because felt is followed by a description, use the adjective special, not the adverb specially.

× However I write used to write physical letter every day to us close childhood friend Rafl because we lived far apart and it felt more personal than electronic message.

✓ However, I used to write a physical letter every day to our close childhood friend, Rafl, because we lived far apart, and it felt more personal than an electronic message.

The phrase write used to write contains an unnecessary present-tense verb. Use used to write to describe a regular action in the past. The past-time context is also supported by lived and felt.

× However I write used to write physical letter every day to us close childhood friend Rafl because we lived far apart and it felt more personal than electronic message.

✓ However, I used to write a physical letter every day to our close childhood friend, Rafl, because we lived far apart, and it felt more personal than an electronic message.

Us is an object pronoun, but the sentence needs a possessive determiner before the noun friend. Use our to show that the friend belonged to both the speaker and another person or group.

× However I write used to write physical letter every day to us close childhood friend Rafl because we lived far apart and it felt more personal than electronic message.

✓ However, I used to write a physical letter every day to our close childhood friend, Rafl, because we lived far apart, and it felt more personal than an electronic message.

Singular countable nouns need an article or another determiner. Use a before physical letter and an before electronic message. The name Rafl should be set off with commas because it identifies the friend being mentioned.

× I think many people still keep handwritten letters because they whether sentimental keepsakes from friends or relatives for example some might treasure or letters written during a difficult time because it reminds them of the support they received.

✓ I think many people still keep handwritten letters because they are sentimental keepsakes from friends or relatives. For example, some might treasure letters written during a difficult time because they remind them of the support they received.

The sentence expresses a general present-time idea, so the present-tense verb are is needed after they. The word whether cannot function as the verb here; it should be replaced with are.

× I think many people still keep handwritten letters because they whether sentimental keepsakes from friends or relatives for example some might treasure or letters written during a difficult time because it reminds them of the support they received.

✓ I think many people still keep handwritten letters because they are sentimental keepsakes from friends or relatives. For example, some might treasure letters written during a difficult time because they remind them of the support they received.

The noun letters is plural, so the pronoun referring to it should be they, and the verb should be remind rather than reminds. Plural subjects take the base form remind in the present tense.

× I think many people still keep handwritten letters because they whether sentimental keepsakes from friends or relatives for example some might treasure or letters written during a difficult time because it reminds them of the support they received.

✓ I think many people still keep handwritten letters because they are sentimental keepsakes from friends or relatives. For example, some might treasure letters written during a difficult time because they remind them of the support they received.

The original sentence contains several clauses joined without the necessary verb, punctuation, or complete structure. Use are sentimental keepsakes, remove the unnecessary or before letters, and separate the example into a new sentence. Clear clause boundaries make the explanation easier to follow.

× Yes I usually carry a small notebook at a pen when I go out often need them to join down phone numbers addresses or quick reminder if someone comes up

✓ Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and a pen when I go out. I often need them to jot down phone numbers, addresses, or quick reminders if something comes up.

Use and, not at, to connect the two things being carried: a notebook and a pen. The preposition at cannot connect these nouns. Also, jot down is the correct expression for writing something quickly.

× Yes I usually carry a small notebook at a pen when I go out often need them to join down phone numbers addresses or quick reminder if someone comes up

✓ Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and a pen when I go out. I often need them to jot down phone numbers, addresses, or quick reminders if something comes up.

The list refers to several possible notes, so reminder should be plural: reminders. The other list items, phone numbers and addresses, are also plural.

× Yes I usually carry a small notebook at a pen when I go out often need them to join down phone numbers addresses or quick reminder if someone comes up

✓ Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and a pen when I go out. I often need them to jot down phone numbers, addresses, or quick reminders if something comes up.

The original sentence joins two independent ideas without suitable punctuation or a subject for the second clause. Add a full stop and begin the second sentence with I. Also use jot down, the correct verb phrase for recording information quickly.