Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答有直接肯定，但后半部分表达不清楚，听者无法确定你制作的是什么。应使用简单、准确的结构，例如“I made a paper airplane”或“I made a paper craft”。注意不要重复使用“paper which was...”，并补充制作过程或结果。

예시: Yes, when I was about 12, I made a paper airplane. I drew colorful patterns on it with pens and then flew it in the playground with my classmates. It was simple, but I really enjoyed making it.

제안: 回答提到了剪纸和父亲的反应，内容是相关的，但时态和搭配错误较多。“would like to”应改为过去习惯“used to”；“paper”通常不可数，不应使用“them”或“many rubbish”。可以使用“cut paper into different shapes”，并用“because”或“so”清楚连接原因和结果。

예시: When I was a child, I used to cut paper into different shapes. I often made animals or flowers because I found it relaxing. However, I created a lot of scraps, so my father was sometimes annoyed.

제안: 回答的主要观点明确，但有较多词性、单复数和表达问题。“important relationships”应改为“important people”或“close friends”，“birthday”前应使用“a birthday”，而“handwriter”不是自然表达，应使用“handwritten letter”。谈论习惯时可以使用一般现在时，并说明这样做的原因。

예시: Yes, I still write physical letters for my best friends on their birthdays or other special occasions. I usually write a short, handwritten message to show how much I care about them. I think a personal letter feels more meaningful than a text message.

제안: 回答有观点和原因，但“confident”应改为“convenient”，“keep handwriting”应改为“keep handwritten letters”，“a little cost of time”应改为“time-consuming”。还要注意主谓一致：应说“I think”。可以加入让步或对比，例如虽然不普遍，但有些人仍会保存有纪念意义的信件。

예시: I don’t think it is very common nowadays because sending messages online is much more convenient. Handwritten letters also take more time to write and keep. However, some people still save them because they have sentimental value.

제안: 回答结构清晰，直接回答了问题，并提供了具体例子。主要问题是“such a lot of things”不够自然，应改为“so many things”，“paper or pen”应改为“paper and a pen”或“paper and pens”。此外，“mobile phone”和“cell phone”重复，可以统一使用一个表达。

예시: No, I don’t usually carry paper and pens when I go out because they are not very convenient to carry. I prefer to bring my mobile phone, which can do many things. For example, I can use it to make notes, check my schedule, or send messages.

× Yes, when I was young, about 12 years old, I made a paper, Dr. Umm, which was colored by the paper which was made by the pen.

✓ Yes, when I was young, about 12 years old, I made a paper craft, which I colored with a pen.

表示“用某种工具”时，应使用介词 with，而不是 by。by 通常用于表示被动语态中的动作执行者，例如 “The picture was painted by Mary.”

× I would like to cut them when I was a child, which makes the many rubbish because I cut a lot of papers.

✓ I liked to cut paper when I was a child, which made a lot of rubbish because I cut a lot of paper.

句子描述的是童年时期的习惯，应该使用一般过去时。would like 表示“想要”，不适合表达过去经常做的事情；makes 也应改为过去式 made，以和 when I was a child 保持一致。

× I would like to cut them when I was a child, which makes the many rubbish because I cut a lot of papers.

✓ I liked cutting paper when I was a child, which made a lot of rubbish because I cut a lot of paper.

like 后面可以接动词-ing形式，表示喜欢做某事，因此 liked cutting 比 liked to cut 更自然。建议记忆常见结构：like/love/enjoy + doing something。

× I would like to cut them when I was a child, which makes the many rubbish because I cut a lot of papers.

✓ I liked cutting paper when I was a child, which made a lot of rubbish because I cut a lot of paper.

rubbish 和 paper 在这里都是不可数名词，不能使用 the many 或 papers。应使用 a lot of rubbish 和 a lot of paper。many 通常修饰可数名词复数，much 才通常修饰不可数名词。

× Yes, when my best friends or some important relationships have birthday or any important day, I will make a handwriter to write a physical letters to them which will shows my heart.

✓ Yes, when my best friends have birthdays or when there is another important day, I will handwrite a physical letter to them, which will show how I feel.

letter 是可数名词单数，前面需要使用 a，因此应为 a physical letter，而不能使用 a physical letters。复数 letters 前面不能直接使用不定冠词 a。

× Yes, when my best friends or some important relationships have birthday or any important day, I will make a handwriter to write a physical letters to them which will shows my heart.

✓ Yes, when my best friends have birthdays or when there is another important day, I will handwrite a physical letter to them, which will show how I feel.

情态动词 will 后面必须接动词原形，因此应使用 will show，而不是 will shows。情态动词后不能再加第三人称单数词尾 -s。

× I thinks it is not very usual because nowadays it is very confident to send a message online.

✓ I think it is not very common because nowadays it is very convenient to send messages online.

主语 I 后面的动词不需要加 -s，因此应为 I think，而不是 I thinks。只有一般现在时的第三人称单数主语，如 he、she、it，才通常要求动词加 -s。

× I thinks it is not very usual because nowadays it is very confident to send a message online.

✓ I think it is not very common because nowadays it is very convenient to send messages online.

confident 表示“自信的”，不能用来表示发送消息很方便。这里应该使用 convenient，表示“方便的”。另外，common 比 usual 更适合描述某种行为是否普遍。

× So people dislike to keep handwriting because it is a little cost of time.

✓ So people dislike keeping handwritten letters because it takes a little time.

dislike 后面通常接动词-ing形式，因此应为 dislike keeping。handwritten 是过去分词作形容词，表示“手写的”，所以应说 handwritten letters，而不是 keep handwriting。

× So people dislike to keep handwriting because it is a little cost of time.

✓ So people dislike keeping handwritten letters because it takes a little time.

time 在这里是不可数名词，应该直接说 a little time。cost 是“费用”或“成本”，不能放在 a little time 前面表达“花费一点时间”。表示花费时间时，可以使用 it takes + 时间。

× I think it is not very convenient for me to take such a lot of things like paper or pen.

✓ I think it is not very convenient for me to take so many things, such as paper and pens.

things 是可数名词复数，因此使用 so many things 更自然。such a lot of things 虽然有时可以使用，但在这里表达不够自然。列举多个例子时，such as 比 like 更正式清晰。