Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then describe one or two specific crafts. Correct the grammar and word forms: say “birthday cards,” “during my childhood,” “developed,” and “I started making.” Use a linking word such as “Later” to show the progression of your interest. Keep the answer to no more than four sentences and avoid repeating “birthday.”

예시: Yes, I made quite a few paper crafts as a child. I used to make birthday cards for my father, and he always encouraged me. Later, I developed an interest in making flower bouquets from recycled paper.

제안: State your favorite activity first and maintain the past tense throughout because the question asks about childhood. Remove the repeated and incorrect phrase “Most of the time I usually We make,” and replace “wiking boats” with “floating boats” or “racing boats.” Explain the activity more clearly and use linking words such as “because” and “After that.” Also say “during the rainy season” rather than “in summer season.”

예시: I particularly enjoyed making paper boats. We often had heavy rain during the summer, so my friends and I would float them in puddles and race them. It was simple, but we had a lot of fun watching whose boat travelled the farthest.

제안: Give a concise direct answer and then provide one clear reason. Correct the word choices and grammar: say “on WhatsApp,” “send an email,” “physical letters,” and “it is time-consuming to send a letter.” Avoid the unclear sentence beginning “Moreover, itself” and finish with a natural conclusion about using your phone. A comparison between digital messages and letters would make the answer more effective.

예시: No, not usually. It is much more convenient to send a message on WhatsApp or write an email than to send a physical letter. Letters can also be time-consuming because I have to visit a post office, so I normally use my phone instead.

제안: Your answer has a relevant opinion and a personal example, which makes it effective. However, clarify the first sentence by saying “I think some people still keep them,” and correct “until there” to “unless they are.” Use “on my graduation day” and explain why the letter is meaningful. This contrast between general habits and your personal experience would improve the structure and coherence.

예시: Yes, although I think people mainly keep handwritten letters when they are especially meaningful. For example, I still have a letter from my father that he wrote on my graduation day. It contained his heartfelt wishes, so I keep it as a special memory.

제안: You give a clear answer and a logical reason, but improve the natural phrasing: say “keep my belongings to a minimum,” “avoid carrying too many things,” “focus on my outing,” and “be more aware of my surroundings.” Add a specific exception, such as carrying a pen for work or travel, to make the response more developed. Use “because” or “so” to connect the ideas smoothly.

예시: Not usually. I prefer to keep my belongings to a minimum because carrying too many things makes me feel uncomfortable. I like to stay focused on my outing and be aware of my surroundings, although I might take a pen if I expect to need it.

× I used to make birthday card during my childhood for my father on his birthday.

✓ I used to make birthday cards during my childhood for my father on his birthday.

The noun card is used in a general sense, so the plural form cards is more appropriate when describing a repeated childhood activity. Use plural countable nouns when speaking about activities you did regularly.

× I used to make birthday card during my childhood for my father on his birthday.

✓ I used to make a birthday card during my childhood for my father on his birthday.

A singular countable noun needs an article. Use a before birthday card when referring to one unspecified card.

× He encouraged me a lot and I gradually develop an interest in it.

✓ He encouraged me a lot, and I gradually developed an interest in it.

The sentence describes events in the past, so develop must be changed to its past-tense form, developed. Keep the verbs in a past-time description consistently in the past tense.

× My started making flower bouquet out of discarded paper.

✓ I started making flower bouquets out of discarded paper.

My cannot function as the subject of this sentence because it is a possessive determiner. Use the subject pronoun I before started. The corrected sentence has a complete subject and verb structure.

× My started making flower bouquet out of discarded paper.

✓ I started making flower bouquets out of discarded paper.

The activity involved making more than one bouquet, so the plural form bouquets is more natural. Use the plural form when referring to repeated creations or activities.

× Most of the time I usually We make boats because it was one of my favourite activities.

✓ Most of the time, we made boats because it was one of my favourite activities.

The question asks about a childhood activity, so made is needed instead of make. Use the past tense when describing regular activities from the past.

× We all enjoy wiking boats and playing with that in the rainy water.

✓ We all enjoyed making boats and playing with them in the rainwater.

Since the student is describing childhood activities, enjoy must be changed to the past-tense form enjoyed. The verb phrase also needs a natural verb form after enjoyed: enjoyed making.

× We all enjoy wiking boats and playing with that in the rainy water.

✓ We all enjoyed making boats and playing with them in the rainwater.

Them refers to the plural noun boats, whereas that is a singular demonstrative pronoun. Use plural object pronouns such as them to refer to plural nouns.

× It is far more convenient to send a message for whatsapp or write a mail.

✓ It is far more convenient to send a message on WhatsApp or write an email.

The correct preposition for a messaging application is on, not for. Use on WhatsApp when referring to communication through the application.

× As compared to writing a physical letters.

✓ As compared to writing a physical letter.

The article a must be followed by a singular countable noun. Therefore, letters must be changed to the singular form letter.

× Moreover, itself to coveresome tasks to send a letter to somebody by going to the post office.

✓ Moreover, it is troublesome to send a letter to somebody because you have to go to the post office.

The original sentence does not have a clear grammatical structure. It needs a subject, a linking verb, and a complete adjective phrase. The pattern it is troublesome to do something clearly expresses the difficulty.

× So it is we have phone.

✓ That is why we have phones.

The original sentence incorrectly combines so, it is, and we have. Use the complete structure That is why plus a subject and verb to express the result or reason.

× I really do not think so until there the handwritten letters are very special or close to their heart.

✓ I really do not think so unless handwritten letters are very special or close to people's hearts.

Unless is the correct conjunction for expressing an exception or condition. Until refers to a time period, so it does not fit this meaning.

× The handwritten letters are very special or close to their heart.

✓ Handwritten letters are very special or close to people's hearts.

The plural noun people requires the plural possessive noun people's hearts. The phrase people's hearts agrees in number and meaning with the general group of people.

× I have kept a letter from my father when he wrote to me during my graduation day and that was so special to contain birthday wishes for me.

✓ I have kept a letter from my father that he wrote to me on my graduation day, and it was special because it contained birthday wishes for me.

The original sentence incorrectly uses when and the structure special to contain. Use that he wrote to introduce the relative clause and because it contained to explain why the letter was special.

× He wrote to me during my graduation day.

✓ He wrote to me on my graduation day.

Use on with a specific day or date. During refers to a period of time, whereas on my graduation day refers to one particular day.

× I love to keep my belongings to minimum.

✓ I love to keep my belongings to a minimum.

The fixed expression is keep something to a minimum. The singular countable noun minimum requires the indefinite article a in this expression.

× I can be more present and aware about surroundings.

✓ I can be more present and aware of my surroundings.

The adjective aware is followed by the preposition of, not about. Use aware of something to describe noticing or understanding something.

× I can be more present and aware about surroundings.

✓ I can be more present and aware of my surroundings.

Surroundings normally needs a possessive determiner or another determiner in this context. My surroundings clearly indicates whose surroundings are being discussed.