Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答有主题句，但语法和用词不准确、重复较多且逻辑不够流畅。建议：1) 简化句子结构，避免过多填充词（如 uh, umm）。2) 使用正确的时态和动词形式（learned origami / I forgot how to do it）。3) 提供一到两条具体细节作为支持（例如哪种折纸、何时折、与朋友做什么比赛）。4) 控制在最多5句内并用连接词（for example, when, so）使表达更连贯。

예시: Yes, I used to make paper crafts as a child. For example, I learned origami and often folded paper boats and small boxes. I don’t remember all the steps now because I haven’t practiced for years. My friends and I used to spend afternoons competing to make the most creative shapes. It was a fun and social hobby.

제안: 回答含义明确但表达混乱且含糊。建议：1) 用主题句直接回答（I liked drawing with...）。2) 提供具体素材和例子（oil pastels, colored pencils, subjects drawn）。3) 修正词汇错误（'I'm not professional' 而非 'I'm in dried creative'），避免语气词。4) 使用连接词（for example, because）提高连贯性。

예시: I liked drawing on paper when I was a child. I often used oil pastels and colored pencils to sketch animals and landscapes. For example, I remember drawing a big tree in my school notebook. I wasn't a professional, but I enjoyed experimenting with different colours and styles.

제안: 回答直接但语法错误多且句子不完整。建议：1) 使用正确时态和结构（I stopped writing letters after I graduated）。2) 用一两句解释原因并给出例子（convenience of phone, social media）。3) 避免未完成句子，结尾要完整（e.g., only a few people still do it）。4) 保持句子简短清晰并用连接词（because, so）。

예시: No, I stopped writing physical letters after I graduated from high school. I find it much easier to contact people by phone or messaging apps because they are faster. Nowadays, only a few close friends or older relatives still send handwritten letters.

제안: 回答有感情色彩但表达重复和词汇使用不准。建议：1) 直接给出观点并解释（Yes, some people keep them because...）。2) 用准确短语（handwritten letters matter / act as a time capsule）。3) 提供具体例子或情境（family archives, love letters）。4) 避免重复 'matters' 并控制句子数。

예시: Yes, I think some people still keep handwritten letters because they act like a time capsule. For example, families often save letters from grandparents to remember their personal stories. I personally value these letters because they show real emotions that digital messages often lack.

제안: 回答态度明确但语法和用词不准确、结构松散。建议：1) 用清晰的主题句（Yes, I usually carry a notebook and pens）。2) 说明原因并给出具体场景（to jot down ideas, notes during study or travel）。3) 修正语法（I read a lot and write a lot，random thoughts），避免多余填充词。4) 使用连接词（so, therefore, because）提高流畅度。

예시: Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and a pen when I go out. I read and write a lot, so I use them to jot down random ideas or note interesting things I see. For example, I often write down ideas for essays or sketch quick plans while commuting.

× I've learned, uh, doing origami when I was a child, like using a piece of paper to make it a bottle, the plan, although I've forgotten how to, uh, doing that.

✓ I learned how to do origami when I was a child, like using a piece of paper to make a bottle or a plane, although I've forgotten how to do that.

这里应使用不带 -ing 的动词不定式或过去式结构：'learned how to do'（学会如何做），而不是 'learned doing'。此外 'doing that' 也应为 'do that'。建议用 'learned how to do' 或直接用过去式 'I did origami' 来表达过去的习得行为。

× But since I was a child, I remember that all my friends, it was really into it and we are really obsessed with it.

✓ But since I was a child, I remember that all my friends were really into it and we were really obsessed with it.

句子中主语与谓语不一致：'all my friends' 是复数，应使用复数动词 'were' 而不是 'was'；同时时态应保持一致，改为过去时 'were' 与 'were'。建议注意主语是单数还是复数并使动词一致。

× What did you like to do with paper as a child? Student: Nothing special, just the key things, uh, such as writing on those papers using, uh, oils, pastels or just those colored pencils.

✓ Nothing special, just the basic things, such as writing on paper using oils, pastels or colored pencils.

用词和介词搭配不当：通常说 'writing on paper' 而不是 'writing on those papers'（除非特指某些纸）。'the key things' 不自然，改为 'the basic things' 更合适；'those colored pencils' 改为 'colored pencils' 更通顺。建议简化并使用常见搭配 'writing on paper'。

× And I really like to look, trying different kinds of drawing.

✓ And I really liked trying different kinds of drawing.

这里原句混合了不定式和现在分词，且时态应与童年经历一致。应使用过去时 'liked'，并接动名词 'trying' 表示喜欢做某事：'liked trying'。建议保持时态一致并用动名词作为动词宾语。

× Uh, just, uh, I'm not professional, but I'm in dried creative, uh, when I was a child.

✓ I'm not professional, but I was creatively inclined when I was a child.

原句 'I'm in dried creative' 没有语法意义，应改为合乎语法的表达，如 'creatively inclined'（有创造性倾向）。同时时态应为过去 'was'。建议使用常见形容词短语来表达性格或倾向。

× No, I'm stop writing physical letters after graduated from high school.

✓ No, I stopped writing physical letters after I graduated from high school.

时态和结构错误：'I'm stop' 不正确，应为过去时 'I stopped'；'after graduated' 应为带主语的从句 'after I graduated'。建议在表示过去完成的动作时使用正确的过去时并包含主语。

× it's really convenient to using your phone to contact everyone you want to talk with.

✓ it's really convenient to use your phone to contact everyone you want to talk to.

'to using' 语法错误，动词不定式 'to' 后应接动词原形 'use'。此外 'talk with' 虽可接受，但更自然是 'talk to'。建议记住 'to' + 动词原形的结构。

× And also, uh, I think people that still to doing this is.

✓ And also, I think there are still people who do this.

原句结构混乱，缺少正确主谓结构。改为 'there are still people who do this'，使用 'there are' 引出存在，并用关系代词 'who' + 动词 'do'。建议使用完整句子结构以表达存在意义。

× Yeah, I think definitely, yes, because handwriting letters is matters.

✓ Yeah, I definitely think so, because handwriting letters matter.

'is matters' 是错误搭配。'matter' 在此为动词可用 'handwriting letters matter' 表示重要；若用名词 'is a matter' 则另有含义。建议使用 'matter' 表示“有意义/重要”。

× It's like a kind of time machine that can, uh, make people travel back to decades ago and seeing how people talk with each other at that time.

✓ It's like a kind of time machine that can make people travel back to decades ago and see how people talked to each other at that time.

动词形式不一致：在 'that can make... and see...' 中应保持并列动词不带 -ing。并且描述过去应使用过去时 'talked'，通常搭配 'talked to each other'。建议并列动词使用相同形式并注意时态一致。

× And I think it's really matters to me.

✓ And I think it really matters to me.

'it's really matters' 中同时有系动词 'is' 和动词 'matters'，重复且错误。应使用 'it really matters' 或 'it's really important to me'。建议避免重复动词。

× So I always keep a paper and pens with me when I'm going out and uh, uh, it can totally beneficial for me because I need this to write down some randomly thoughts.

✓ So I always keep paper and pens with me when I go out, and they can be totally beneficial for me because I need them to write down random thoughts.

多处错误：'keep a paper' 不用不定冠词，改为 'keep paper and pens'；'when I'm going out' 一般用一般现在时 'when I go out'；'it can totally beneficial' 缺少系动词，改为 'they can be totally beneficial'；'some randomly thoughts' 词序和词形错误，应为 'random thoughts'，并且代词要一致 'them'。建议注意冠词、时态、主谓一致和名词形容词搭配。