Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and use clearer sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples with linking words. Correct grammar (e.g. past tense and article use) and avoid vague phrases like 'the boxes to stretch it.'

예시: Yes, I have. In secondary school art lessons we often used newspapers to make paper flowers, and we also reused cardboard boxes to make models. These activities helped us practise cutting and folding skills.

제안: Answer directly, use correct subject-verb agreement and be specific. Limit to under five sentences and use linking words (e.g., 'for example', 'also'). Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases.

예시: I loved using paper for many things as a child. For example, I used it for drawing and painting, and I also folded it into balls to play games with friends. These simple projects kept me entertained for hours.

제안: Make the answer clearer and grammatically correct. Start with a direct statement (Yes/No), then explain briefly with reason using linking words. Avoid redundancy and incorrect comparative forms ('most easier').

예시: Yes, I do. I often write notes and to-do lists on paper because it is quick and easy to grab. Because I can see my notes, I remember tasks better and rarely forget important things.

제안: Provide a balanced, well-structured answer and use linking words (e.g., 'however', 'for example'). Avoid redundant pronouns ('some people they'). Be specific about contexts where letters are kept.

예시: I think some people still keep handwritten letters, but it depends on personality and occasion. For example, older generations or sentimental people often keep greeting cards and letters, whereas others prefer digital messages for everyday communication.

제안: Complete your answer and avoid trailing off. Use a clear topic sentence followed by a reason and an example. Use appropriate vocabulary ('scrap paper' instead of 'waste paper') and correct grammar.

예시: Yes, I do. I usually carry a small notebook and a pen because my smartphone is not always convenient to use. For instance, I jot down directions or quick reminders when I'm out.

× When I was in secondary school in the art lesson we used the newspaper to make it as a flower or the boxes to stretch it.

✓ When I was in secondary school, in art class we used newspapers to make flowers or to stuff boxes.

The original sentence has several issues: 'newspaper' should be plural 'newspapers' (singular/plural issue) because it refers to pieces of paper in general, and 'the art lesson' is better as 'art class' for naturalness. 'to make it as a flower' is ungrammatical; use 'to make flowers'. 'the boxes to stretch it' is unclear; context suggests 'to stuff boxes' (use 'to stuff boxes' or 'to fill boxes'). Also add commas and articles for clarity. Use simple past 'used' correctly; the main correction focuses on word choice and plurality which involves past participle semantics of 'used' but primarily plural and sentence structure (kept within allowed problem types).

× For me papers are so multi functional.

✓ For me, papers are so multifunctional.

'papers' can be plural here, but 'multi functional' should be one word 'multifunctional'. Also add a comma after introductory phrase 'For me'. This fixes adjective formation and punctuation for clarity.

× They can use it as a painting material or sometimes I use them make a ball for play like basketball or basketball

✓ They can be used as a painting material, or sometimes I use them to make a ball to play games like basketball.

The original mixes pronouns and subjects incorrectly: 'They can use it' is incorrect because papers (they) are passive in this meaning; better 'They can be used'. 'I use them make' needs infinitive 'to make'. Repetition 'like basketball or basketball' is redundant; replace with 'to play games like basketball'. This corrects pronoun reference and verb patterns.

× Yes, I do almost every day I write down everything on the paper because the paper is the most easier thing I can grab in my life.

✓ Yes, I do. Almost every day I write down everything on paper because paper is the easiest thing I can grab in my life.

Run-on sentence needs splitting. 'the most easier' is incorrect; use 'the easiest' (comparative/superlative error). Use 'on paper' rather than 'on the paper' when speaking generally. Keep present simple 'write' for habitual action.

× So when every time if I want to do something I want to remember it, I will just read it on.

✓ So whenever I want to remember something, I just read what I wrote.

Original uses redundant conjunctions 'when every time if' — choose one ('whenever'). 'I want to do something I want to remember it' is awkward; reorder to 'when I want to remember something'. 'I will just read it on' is ungrammatical; specify 'I just read what I wrote.' Use present simple for habitual action.

× I think so even it still depends on people's personalities.

✓ I think so, although it still depends on people's personalities.

'even it still depends' is not natural; use 'although' or 'it still depends on'. Add comma and correct conjunction for contrast.

× Some people they would enjoy handwriting to friends or family as a greeting card or some people they prefer to message

✓ Some people would enjoy handwriting messages or greeting cards to friends or family, while others prefer to send messages.

Avoid redundant subjects 'Some people they'. Use consistent phrasing: 'handwriting messages or greeting cards' and 'prefer to send messages'. Use contrast 'while others' for clarity.

× Yes, honestly, I do carry a piece of waste paper and pen with me all the time when I go out because my smartphone not always easy to reach, so I

✓ Yes, honestly, I carry a piece of scrap paper and a pen with me all the time when I go out because my smartphone is not always easy to reach.

Use 'scrap paper' rather than 'waste paper' for natural English. Include article 'a pen'. Add verb 'is' in 'my smartphone is not always easy to reach' to complete the clause. Remove extra 'do' for simple present habit. The original sentence was also unfinished; corrected to a complete sentence.