Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then give one or two specific examples and a reason. Reduce repetition and grammatical errors. Use linking words like "but" or "however" only once and avoid filler words like "yeah."

예시: No, I haven't made paper crafts myself. However, I know many paper crafts can be made from recycled paper, such as notebooks, paper bags or simple storage boxes, which are useful for studying and keeping things organized.

제안: Provide a clear past-time statement and give specific examples and a brief reason or memory. Use past tense consistently and link ideas with words like "for example" or "so". Avoid unfinished sentences and unclear phrases.

예시: When I was a child, I enjoyed making paper airplanes and small toys. For example, I often folded paper planes with my brother and we competed to see which plane flew the farthest.

제안: Answer directly and use natural phrasing. Use one concise reason with an example. Avoid repeating words like "modern" and use correct collocations ("send messages" or "use phones").

예시: No, I rarely write physical letters now because people usually send messages or emails on their phones. For example, I message friends on social apps instead of writing letters.

제안: Give a clear opinion and support it with one or two specific reasons and an example. Finish your sentence and avoid vague or unclear phrases like "broken people." Use linking words such as "because" and "for example."

예시: Yes, I think some people still keep handwritten letters because they feel more personal and emotional. For example, people save letters from family members as keepsakes or reminders of important events.

제안: Respond clearly with a direct statement, then give a concise reason and an example. Use correct vocabulary ("carry" not "scurry", "paper and pens"), and avoid run-on sentences. Link ideas with "because" or "so."

예시: No, I don't usually carry paper and pens when I go out because it's easier to take notes on my phone. For example, if I need to record an idea, I use a note-taking app and can quickly share it with others.

× I have never made a craft with a paper but I heard a lot of crafts that can be can be recycled too can be recycled with a paper to something such as a tool a material for study a bag or something. Yeah.

✓ I have never made crafts with paper, but I have heard that many paper crafts can be recycled into things such as tools, study materials, or bags.

Errors: redundant words ('can be can be recycled'), incorrect article use ('a paper' should be 'paper' or 'a piece of paper'), and awkward phrasing. Suggestion: use plural 'crafts' to match 'many', remove unnecessary repetition, use 'paper' uncountable, and rephrase 'recycled into' to show transformation. Use commas and conjunctions to join clauses clearly.

× When I was a child, I like to use a prepared for trovings and also made it or create it to an airplanes or some toys to play with my brother and also I made it

✓ When I was a child, I liked to use prepared paper for folding and also made or created airplanes and other toys to play with my brother.

Errors: tense mismatch ('When I was a child' requires past tense 'liked'), wrong word forms ('prepared for trovings' unclear — likely 'prepared paper for folding'), redundant verbs, and article/number issues ('an airplanes' should be 'airplanes' or 'an airplane'). Suggestion: keep past tense throughout, use correct noun phrases ('prepared paper for folding'), and remove redundancy.

× Actually right now I don't still write a physical letter because today nowadays is modern modern things that we can chart or we can communicate it on the phones to everyone.

✓ Actually, right now I don't still write physical letters because nowadays we can chat and communicate with everyone on our phones.

Errors: awkward adverb placement ('still' used incorrectly), article error ('a physical letter' vs plural 'physical letters'), redundancy ('today nowadays' and 'modern modern'), incorrect verb choice ('chart' -> 'chat'), and extra pronoun ('communicate it'). Suggestion: use 'don't still write' -> 'don't write... anymore' or 'I no longer write physical letters', prefer plural 'letters' when speaking generally, and simplify to 'chat and communicate with everyone on our phones'.

× I think people nowadays still keep handwriting letters because they can show the feeling on paper and also they use it for writing a story or know well something and also the broken people use it to

✓ I think people nowadays still keep handwritten letters because they can show feelings on paper; people also use them to write stories or to preserve memories.

Errors: incorrect adjective form ('handwriting letters' -> 'handwritten letters'), vague phrasing ('know well something' unclear), and unfinished sentence ('the broken people use it to'). Suggestion: use 'handwritten' as adjective, replace vague parts with clear verbs like 'preserve memories', and complete thoughts. Use plural 'letters' and 'them' for reference.

× When I go out I don't scurry pepper or pens with me well it's hard I just bring my phone and draw or note something on my phone because it easy more than carry the paper foray and also I can share my opinions on that.

✓ When I go out I don't carry paper or pens with me; it's inconvenient, so I just bring my phone and draw or take notes on it because it's easier than carrying paper, and I can also share my ideas that way.

Errors: multiple misspellings ('scurry pepper' -> 'carry paper'), incorrect pronoun use ('with me' placement), missing auxiliary verbs ('it easy' -> 'it's easier'), and awkward connectors. Suggestion: correct spelling, use clear clause punctuation, use 'take notes' not 'note something', use comparative 'easier than', and replace 'opinions' with 'ideas' for clarity.