Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more natural: use correct verb forms, choose precise nouns, avoid repetition, and keep to 2–4 sentences. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific details using linking words. For example, correct grammar (I especially like making origami insects and weapons) and replace vague phrases like "image a war" with "arrange them to create battle scenes."

예시: Yes, I enjoy making origami. I especially like making insect and weapon models, and I often arrange lots of mecha and weapons on the table to create battle scenes.

제안: Improve tense consistency, word choice and fluency. Begin with a past-tense topic sentence, then add a specific reason and one example. Use linking words like "because" and "so" to connect ideas, and avoid repetition (e.g., "mature" likely meant "mecha").

예시: As a child, I enjoyed folding paper models, especially mecha and weapons, because it helped me relax and be creative. For example, I used to arrange dozens of paper robots on my desk to recreate imaginary battle scenes.

제안: Be concise and grammatically correct. Use a clear topic sentence in present tense, then give a brief reason and an example. Replace awkward phrases ("don't still keep") with natural expressions like "I no longer write handwritten letters."

예시: No, I no longer write handwritten letters because social media and messaging apps are much more convenient; for example, I usually text friends or use chat apps to stay in touch.

제안: Give a balanced answer and correct accuracy: many formal documents are printed or signed, not handwritten. Start with a direct opinion, then give specific examples and a contrasting point using linking words like "however."

예시: Some people still keep handwritten letters, especially for sentimental reasons like cards and notes; however, most official documents are printed or digitally sent, though signatures are still often required on paper.

제안: Good content and relevance; improve grammar and variety. Keep it within a few sentences: clear topic sentence, one linking phrase, and one specific example. Use correct verb forms ("I always sketch"), and vary verbs to avoid repetition of "always."

예시: Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and pens when I go out because I like to sketch while commuting. For example, I once sketched a passenger on the metro and several cars on the road when I saw an interesting scene.

× Yes, I have made some origami with paper.

✓ Yes, I have made some origami from paper.

Article/preposition choice: 'origami with paper' is awkward; use 'origami from paper' or 'paper origami' to indicate material (Incorrect use of prepositions - ID 11). Suggestion: say 'I have made some paper origami' or 'I have made some origami from paper.'

× I especially like to origami matcha insect and weapon.

✓ I especially like to make origami models of insects and weapons.

Verb + -ing form / incorrect verb use: 'like to origami' uses a noun as a verb. The correct verb is 'make' and plural nouns are needed for general reference (Verb + -ing form / singular-plural - IDs 8 and 1). Suggestion: use 'I especially like to make origami insects and weapons' or 'I especially like making origami insects and weapons.'

× I often made a large number of mecha and weapon and image a war on the table.

✓ I often made a large number of mecha and weapons and imagined a war on the table.

Past tense and verb form errors: 'made' is okay in past context but 'image' is incorrect; the past tense of 'imagine' is 'imagined'. Also 'weapon' should be plural to match 'a large number of' (Past tense issue and singular/plural - IDs 5 and 1). Suggestion: use 'I often made many mecha and weapons and imagined a war on the table.'

× I like to folding some mesh and weapons.

✓ I liked to fold some mecha and weapons.

Present vs past tense and verb form: Question asked 'What did you like to do with paper as a child?' so past tense is required. 'like to folding' mixes infinitive and -ing; correct is 'liked to fold' (Present tense issue / Verb + -ing form - IDs 6 and 8). Also 'mesh' is likely 'mecha' (robot models) so corrected to 'mecha.' Suggestion: 'As a child, I liked to fold some mecha and weapons.'

× As a child I often build a lot of mature and weapon and arrange them on the table to image a battle scene.

✓ As a child I often built a lot of mecha and weapons and arranged them on the table to imagine a battle scene.

Past tense and word choice errors: 'build' and 'arrange' should be past tense 'built' and 'arranged' to match 'As a child'. 'Mature' is incorrect word choice; likely 'mecha'. 'image' should be 'imagine' (Past tense issue and incorrect word - IDs 5 and 26). Suggestion: use consistent past tense and correct nouns: 'I often built many mecha and weapons and arranged them on the table to imagine a battle scene.'

× I find it relaxing and it let it let me be creative.

✓ I found it relaxing and it let me be creative.

Tense agreement and redundancy: 'find' should be past 'found' to match 'As a child'. 'it let it let' contains repeated phrase and should be 'it let me be creative' (Present tense issue and sentence structure - IDs 6 and 26). Suggestion: 'I found it relaxing and it let me be creative.'

× No, I don't still keep handwritten letters today.

✓ No, I don't still keep handwritten letters.

Tense and redundancy: 'today' with 'still' is redundant in this short answer; present simple is appropriate. Also word order 'I don't still keep' is acceptable but awkward; better 'I no longer keep' or 'I don't keep handwritten letters anymore' (Present tense issue - ID 6). Suggestion: 'No, I don't keep handwritten letters anymore.'

× Nowadays social media is convenient to send messages, thus I always send message replaced write letter.

✓ Nowadays social media is a convenient way to send messages, so I always send messages instead of writing letters.

Multiple errors: missing article 'a convenient way', incorrect infinitive 'to send' is okay but phrasing improved; 'always send message' needs plural 'messages', and 'replaced write letter' is ungrammatical — use 'instead of writing letters' (Incorrect use of prepositions/articles and verb forms - IDs 11, 22, 8). Suggestion: 'Social media is a convenient way to send messages, so I always send messages instead of writing letters.'

× People still keep handwritten letters today because some formal documents such as bills and certified letter must send with handwritten letter.

✓ People still keep handwritten letters today because some formal documents, such as bills and certified letters, must be sent with handwritten signatures or as handwritten letters.

Plural and passive/verb form and article errors: 'certified letter' should be plural 'certified letters' to match 'some', and passive construction 'must be sent' is needed. 'send with handwritten letter' is incorrect; clarify 'sent with a handwritten signature' or 'as handwritten letters' (Singular/plural, passive voice, article - IDs 1, 21, 22). Suggestion: '...because some formal documents, such as bills and certified letters, must be sent as handwritten letters or include a handwritten signature.'

× Yes, I always carry my notebook and pens with me when I go out.

✓ Yes, I always carry my notebook and my pens with me when I go out.

Article/possessive consistency and plural: original is mostly acceptable but better to keep parallel possession 'my notebook and my pens'. This is a minor style suggestion (Singular and plural issue - ID 1). Suggestion: 'I always carry my notebook and pens when I go out.'

× I always sketching when I'm commuting or I find something interesting.

✓ I always sketch when I'm commuting or when I find something interesting.

Verb + -ing form and conjunction use: 'always sketching' is incorrect in simple present habitual context; use base verb 'sketch'. Also need parallel 'when' before 'I find' (Verb + -ing form and conjunction - IDs 8 and 16). Suggestion: 'I always sketch when I'm commuting or when I find something interesting.'

× For example I have sketched a passenger of metro and some cars on road.

✓ For example, I have sketched a passenger on the metro and some cars on the road.

Preposition and article use: use 'on the metro' and 'on the road'. Also include commas for clarity and 'a passenger of metro' should be 'a passenger on the metro' (Incorrect use of prepositions and articles - IDs 11 and 22). Suggestion: 'For example, I have sketched a passenger on the metro and some cars on the road.'