Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сократите и упростите ответ, сделав его более естественным и грамматически корректным. Начните с прямого утверждения, затем дайте одну-две конкретные детали: что именно вы сделали, с какой целью и когда. Избегайте повторов и неверных слов (например, «graft» → «craft»).

예시: Yes, I make paper crafts. Last New Year I made small paper ornaments decorated with tiny peppers to give as gifts; I usually make these to personalise presents.

제안: Ответ должен быть ясным и логичным: начните с темы, затем конкретизируйте (например, какие животные, как делали). Уберите неуместные слова («proper construction», «chapter») и исправьте грамматику. Добавьте связующее слово для плавности.

예시: As a child I enjoyed making paper models, especially animals. For example, I often folded and coloured paper to make birds and dogs, and I liked creating their bodies and faces in detail.

제안: Сделайте предложение завершённым и логичным. Начните с прямого ответа, затем объясните причину ясно и конкретно: что вы чувствуете от письма от руки и как это влияет на получателя. Старайтесь использовать не больше пяти предложений и избежите обрывов.

예시: Yes, I still write physical letters. I find handwriting more personal and meaningful, and recipients often appreciate the effort; it feels more sincere than a quick text message.

제안: Сформулируйте мысль ясно: начните с общего суждения, затем поясните причину и добавьте контраст, если нужно. Исправьте неверные фразы («see it line», «type alert») на понятные выражения («use online messaging», «type messages»).

예시: I think fewer people keep writing handwritten letters today because most prefer online messaging. However, some people still save letters for sentimental reasons.

제안: Сделайте причину конкретной и понятной: скажите, когда и зачем вы их используете. Исправьте фразу «point in your head» на более подходящую («clarify your thoughts», «remember ideas»). Ограничьте ответ до 2–3 предложений.

예시: Yes, I often carry a notebook and a pen so I can jot down ideas or reminders. Writing things down helps me clarify my thoughts and remember tasks better.

× Yes, I made Tiny Graft With Pepper when I prepare for prepare gift for someone and that's things I do usually at New Year.

✓ Yes, I made a tiny craft with pepper when I was preparing a gift for someone, and that's something I usually do at New Year.

The student used incorrect verb forms and word choices: 'prepare for prepare' repeats and misuses present tense instead of past continuous 'was preparing' to match 'made'. 'Tiny Graft' is a misspelling and should be 'tiny craft'. 'that's things I do usually' has noun and word order errors: use 'that's something I usually do'. Suggestion: use past continuous for background actions (was preparing), correct nouns and word order.

× When I was a child I liked to make proper construction which have have had form Animals and my favorite chapter.

✓ When I was a child I liked to make proper constructions that were in the form of animals, and my favorite part.

Errors: 'proper construction' should be plural 'constructions' if speaking generally. 'which have have had form Animals' is ungrammatical: use past simple 'were in the form of animals'. 'chapter' is incorrect word choice; 'part' fits. Suggestion: match number (plural), use 'that/were' for past description, choose correct noun 'part'.

× Yes, I continue to write physical letters because I think it's so important part when you write your hand it's a great result and I think it's

✓ Yes, I continue to write physical letters because I think it's such an important part of writing by hand; it produces a better result, I think.

Problems: missing article 'an' before 'important part'; 'write your hand' is incorrect collocation — should be 'writing by hand'. 'it's a great result' is vague; 'produces a better result' is clearer. Tense 'continue' is acceptable; improve collocations and articles.

× I think not all people keep on writing letters today because a lot of people see it line and type alert.

✓ I don't think all people keep writing letters today because many people use online messaging and type on devices.

Errors: 'I think not all people' is awkward — use 'I don't think all people'. 'keep on writing' can be 'keep writing'. 'see it line and type alert' is ungrammatical: intended 'use online messaging and type on devices'. Suggestion: use natural negation, common verbs 'use online messaging'.

× Yes I always take paper pens because I suggest that when you write something on paper you immediately point in your head.

✓ Yes, I always take paper and pens because I believe that when you write something on paper it immediately becomes clearer in your head.

Problems: missing conjunction 'and' between 'paper' and 'pens'; 'take' is acceptable but 'carry' may be better. 'I suggest that' is unnatural here — use 'I believe that'. 'you immediately point in your head' is incorrect phrase; intended meaning 'it becomes clearer in your head'. Suggestion: use correct conjunctions and natural collocations 'write on paper', 'clear in your head'.