Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, correct grammar and add a brief detail using linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, fix tense and possessive errors, and add one specific detail (e.g., materials or how you made them).

예시: Yes. I used to make small paper flowers for my mother on Mother’s Day and her birthday. For example, I folded colored tissue paper and twisted the stems from green paper, which she kept on her dressing table.

제안: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Use a topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details and linking words. Correct vocabulary (e.g., "paper flowers", "paintings") and finish your thought. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I enjoyed making paper flowers and painting pictures as a child. For instance, I painted landscapes and drew family portraits, and I often combined them with folded paper flowers to decorate greeting cards.

제안: Be clear about tense and avoid confusing wording. State a direct topic sentence, then briefly explain when you last wrote one or why you stopped, using linking words such as "because" or "so".

예시: No, I don't write physical letters anymore because email and messaging are much faster. The last time I wrote a handwritten letter was several years ago when I sent a thank-you note after an interview.

제안: Give a clear opinion then support it with specific reasons and a contrasting point using linking words. Improve wording (e.g., "keep handwritten letters", "digital apps") and finish the sentence.

예시: I don't think many people keep handwritten letters today because most communication is digital, and messages are easier to store and search. However, some people still keep letters for sentimental reasons, such as love letters or family notes.

제안: This is a good direct answer. Improve cohesion by using a linking word and shortening the sentence. Add a specific example of when you might still use paper to show nuance.

예시: No, I don't usually carry paper and pens because I use the Notes app on my phone or iPad for quick notes. However, I sometimes bring a small notebook if I expect to sketch or jot down ideas during meetings.

× Yes, in my childhood I always made some little flowers with paper to my mother on mother's day or on her birthday.

✓ Yes, in my childhood I always made little paper flowers for my mother on Mother's Day or on her birthday.

Plural nouns and noun order: 'little flowers with paper' is awkward; use 'paper flowers'. Use 'for my mother' instead of 'to my mother' when giving something. Capitalize 'Mother's Day'. Remove 'some' as unnecessary.

× As I said on the previous question I used to make middle flowers to my mother and I always made some paintings on the paper. I didn't actually use the paper as a

✓ As I said in the previous question, I used to make small paper flowers for my mother and I always made drawings on paper. I didn't actually use the paper as a...

Preposition and word choice: use 'in the previous question' not 'on'. 'Middle flowers' is incorrect; likely 'small paper flowers'. 'Made some paintings on the paper' is awkward; use 'made drawings on paper'. 'To my mother' should be 'for my mother'. Maintain verb forms: 'used to make' and 'made' are correct for past habitual actions.

× No, I don't write physical letters and actually I haven't written any physical letters in my future. I mean the past

✓ No, I don't write physical letters and actually I haven't written any physical letters in the past.

Tense error: 'in my future' is incorrect when referring to prior actions; use 'in the past'. Present perfect 'haven't written' should be followed by 'in the past' or simply 'before' to indicate past time.

× In my opinion, I don't think that people still keep handwritten letters because nowadays there is no need to do letters, we can communicate with another digital apps or

✓ In my opinion, I don't think people still keep handwritten letters because nowadays there is no need to write letters; we can communicate using various digital apps.

Preposition and verb choice: 'do letters' is incorrect; use 'write letters'. 'Communicate with another digital apps' is ungrammatical: use 'communicate using digital apps' or 'via digital apps'. Also adjust 'people still keep' ordering and remove redundant 'that'.

× I don't carry paper and pens with me when I go out because I don't need any of them if I want to write down anything, I would open my Notes app on my phone or on my iPad.

✓ I don't carry paper and pens with me when I go out because I don't need them; if I want to write anything, I open the Notes app on my phone or iPad.

Pronoun and modal usage: 'any of them' is wordy; use 'them'. Conditional/modal mismatch: 'if I want to write down anything, I would open' mixes real present condition with conditional 'would'; use simple present 'I open' for habitual actions. 'on my phone or on my iPad' -> 'on my phone or iPad' for brevity.