Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear, concise and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect words (e.g., "crimes").

예시: Not often. I only do simple paper crafts very occasionally, maybe once or twice a year, because I usually find detailed art projects boring. However, I sometimes fold paper airplanes or make small origami shapes when I have free time.

제안: Give a direct answer first and then support it with a specific reason and an example. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar (singular/plural, articles).

예시: Not really. Nowadays people mostly use phones and messaging apps, so physical letters are rare. For example, I only write a handwritten letter on special occasions like birthdays or weddings.

제안: Answer directly and use clearer, more specific examples. Avoid vague or confusing phrases. Use linking words (for example, however) and correct tense and word choice.

예시: Some people do keep handwritten letters, especially when they are sentimental. For example, families often save letters from relatives who have passed away, but most people discard ordinary mail and use digital storage instead.

제안: Give a short direct answer, then explain briefly with a clear reason and a single specific example. Avoid unrelated or confusing details and correct vocabulary errors.

예시: Usually I don't carry paper and pens when I go out because my phone can take notes. Occasionally I keep a small notepad on my bedside table for emergencies, but I rarely need to use it during the day.

제안: Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give a clear specific example. Use correct verb forms and simple linking words to make the answer coherent.

예시: As a child I enjoyed making toys out of paper. For example, I often folded paper airplanes and flew them around the house when I felt bored.

× Oh once in the blue moon. I found art activity tedious so I avoid myself to involve any arts activities so I seldom make make crimes by using paper.

✓ Oh, once in a blue moon. I find art activities tedious, so I avoid getting involved in any art activities; therefore I seldom make crafts with paper.

Errors: 'found' (past) should be present 'find' because the speaker describes a general preference (present tense). 'art activity' should be plural 'art activities' for general reference (singular/plural). 'avoid myself to involve' is incorrect structure; use 'avoid getting involved' (verb + -ing form). 'make make crimes by using paper' is incorrect word choice and duplication; likely meant 'make crafts with paper'. Suggestion: use simple present for habits, pluralize countable nouns when speaking generally, use 'avoid' + gerund and choose correct vocabulary ('crafts').

× I think for now the electronic devices, mobile phone and then text app messaging app is very common. So I think people seldom write physical letter at all.

✓ I think nowadays electronic devices and mobile phones and messaging apps are very common, so people seldom write physical letters at all.

Errors: noun phrase agreement and countability: 'mobile phone' should be plural 'mobile phones' to match 'electronic devices'; 'messaging app' phrasing redundant; 'is' should be 'are' to agree with plural subject (subject-verb agreement). 'physical letter' should be plural 'physical letters' when speaking generally. Suggestion: use plural forms for general statements, ensure subject-verb agreement, and streamline redundant words.

× I think on purpose, maybe some very variable letters just like their parents live for them and their parents already pass away will keep some discount variable physical letter for them. Otherwise, I don't think people like keeping a physical letter for now.

✓ I think that some people intentionally keep certain important letters for their children, such as letters their parents wrote before they died. Otherwise, I don't think many people keep physical letters nowadays.

Errors: sentence is unclear and disordered; 'on purpose' misused; 'very variable letters' unclear; tense and relative clauses incorrect ('parents live for them' and 'already pass away' wrong order). Suggest splitting into clearer sentences, use 'before they died' for past reference, and 'nowadays' for current habit. Use plural 'letters' and 'many people' for generalization.

× I wouldn't carry papers when going out but I do keep a pant in my bed but I have no idea the reasons why I keep the pants in my bed but would be for emergency circumstances to record something, but actually mobile phone can do all this thing for now.

✓ I don't usually carry paper when I go out, but I do keep a pen by my bed. I'm not sure why I keep it there; it might be for emergencies when I need to write something, although a mobile phone can do that now.

Errors: modal and tense: 'wouldn't carry' is awkward for habitual behaviour; use 'don't usually carry'. 'pant' is wrong word—should be 'pen'. 'keep a pant in my bed' incorrect preposition; use 'by my bed'. 'would be for emergency circumstances' awkward; rephrase 'it might be for emergencies'. 'all this thing' wrong: use 'that' or 'those things'. Suggest using correct noun (pen), correct prepositions, modal verbs for probability (might), and simpler phrasing.

× I like use the paper to make some toys for myself to unwind for myself just like flop the paper into to make the arrow pane and then fly it all the way in the house when I feel boring.

✓ I liked using paper to make toys to relax, such as folding paper to make paper planes and then flying them around the house when I was bored.

Errors: tense and verb forms: 'I like use' should be 'I liked using' (past habit) or 'I liked to use'; context asks about childhood so past tense is appropriate. 'unwind for myself' redundant—use 'to relax'. 'flop the paper into' incorrect verb and preposition; correct is 'folding paper to make paper planes'. 'arrow pane' wrong vocabulary; should be 'paper plane' or 'paper airplane'. 'when I feel boring' incorrect adjective use; use 'when I was bored'. Suggest use past tense for childhood recollections, correct gerund after 'like', choose correct verbs (fold), and correct adjectives/adverbs.