Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is direct but very brief and lacks specific details. Expand with one or two supporting details (what kinds of crafts, how often, or why you enjoy it) and use a linking word to connect ideas. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I have made many crafts using paper. For example, I often fold origami cranes and make paper flowers for gifts, especially during festivals. I enjoy it because it relaxes me and lets me be creative, so I usually do it once a week.

제안: Good idea and personal reason, but the answer has small grammatical errors and repetition. Make the topic sentence clear, correct pronoun/article use, and tighten the example. Use a linking word to show sequence or reason.

예시: Yes, I still write physical letters because they help me express my feelings more sincerely. For example, if my friend’s birthday is tomorrow, I would start writing a heartfelt letter tonight so I can include personal memories and wishes.

제안: The idea is clear but there are grammar mistakes (subject-verb agreement, word choice) and awkward phrasing. Make the statement more natural, provide a specific reason and one clear personal example. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, many people still keep handwritten letters because they are sentimental and preserve memories. For example, I keep the letters my friends have given me in a box and reread them when I feel nostalgic.

제안: Content is useful but phrasing is informal and has pronoun errors and redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct pronouns, and give one concise reason with an example of when you use them. Avoid long repetitive clauses.

예시: Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and a pen when I go out because I often need to jot down important ideas or plans. For instance, if I remember a task for the next day, I quickly write it in my notebook so I won't forget it.

제안: Your answer is relevant but filled with hesitations and unclear words (e.g., 'crabs' likely meant 'crafts' or 'cards'). Reduce hesitations, use precise vocabulary, and give one specific example of a craft and who received it. Keep it to 2–3 clear sentences.

예시: As a child, I loved making paper crafts such as paper flowers and greeting cards. I often gave these handmade cards to my family and close friends on special occasions.

× Yes, I have made many crafts using paper.

✓ Yes, I have made many crafts using paper.

No change needed. The sentence correctly uses present perfect to indicate experience up to now and 'paper' as an uncountable material is acceptable here.

× Yes, I still write physical letters. It always helps me to put my feelings on a paper. For example, if tomorrow is my friend's birthday, I would like to I would start writing a heartfelt letter tonight.

✓ Yes, I still write physical letters. It always helps me to put my feelings on paper. For example, if tomorrow is my friend's birthday, I would start writing a heartfelt letter tonight.

Problem: incorrect article 'a' before uncountable 'paper' and redundant modal phrasing. Use 'on paper' without 'a'. In the conditional example, use 'would start' alone (conditional) or 'will start' (future); here 'would start' fits a hypothetical plan but remove the duplicated 'I would'. Remove the extra 'I would' to avoid redundancy.

× Yes, people who always respects their closed ones feelings will always store their handwritten letters.

✓ Yes, people who always respect their close ones' feelings will always store their handwritten letters.

Problems: verb agreement ('people...respect' not 'respects') and word choice/possessive. Use plural verb 'respect' to agree with plural subject 'people'. 'Closed ones' is incorrect phrase; use 'close ones' or better 'close ones' and make 'feelings' possessive: 'close ones' feelings' -> 'close ones' feelings' should be 'close ones' feelings' but cleaner: 'close ones' feelings' -> 'close ones' is plural possessive, so place apostrophe after ones: 'close ones' feelings'. Also word order: 'their close ones' feelings'.

× For example, I am the biggest example, I always stores the handwritten letters which are given by my friends to.

✓ For example, I am the best example: I always store the handwritten letters given to me by my friends.

Problems: awkward phrasing and subject-verb agreement. Use 'the best example' instead of 'the biggest example'. 'Stores' should be 'store' to match 'I'. 'Which are given by my friends to' is ungrammatical; use 'given to me by my friends'.

× Yes, I got it. A pen and a paper always with me when I go out, because if I want to write anything important or if I want to plan something important for next day or also for another half of the day, I will always write down on your paper. Then I will start journaling it.

✓ Yes, I have them. A pen and paper are always with me when I go out, because if I want to write anything important or plan something for the next day or for the second half of the day, I always write it down on my paper. Then I start journaling it.

Problems: tense and verb to be missing, article usage, pronoun mismatch. 'I got it' is informal; 'I have them' clarifies possession. 'A pen and a paper always with me' lacks verb; use 'are always with me'. 'Paper' as uncountable doesn't need 'a'. 'for next day' needs article 'the next day'. 'write down on your paper' uses wrong pronoun 'your'; should be 'my paper'. Use consistent simple present for habitual actions ('I always write', 'I start').

× I always used to make crafts using papers like, uh, paper boards, paper, uh, flowers like that, uh, I always used to give uh, those handmade crabs to the people whom I love the most.

✓ I used to make crafts using paper, such as cardboard and paper flowers. I used to give those handmade crafts to the people I loved most.

Problems: 'used to' is correct but repeated unnecessarily. 'Papers' should be 'paper' or specific materials like 'cardboard'. 'Paper boards' is better as 'cardboard'. 'Crabs' is a typo for 'crafts'. 'Whom I love the most' should be 'people I loved most' to match past habitual action; using 'whom' is awkward and unnecessary. Use clear parallel sentences and correct vocabulary.