Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答简洁但信息有限。应更直接回应问题并扩展细节以展示词汇和语法能力。例如说明你做过哪些纸艺、频率或最喜欢的一种。保持句子自然且不超过五句。可用连接词如“for example”或“often”。

예시: Yes, I have — I started learning origami when I was five. For example, I often fold cranes and flowers, and I still make simple models when I have free time. Making paper crafts helps me relax and improve my patience.

제안: 表达有语病且不够流畅。建议用一两句先直接回答，再用1–2句给出具体原因或频率。避免模糊短语如“We are used to”。使用衔接词如“because”或“so”。

예시: No, I don't write physical letters anymore because digital messaging is much faster. I usually text or email my friends almost every day, so there's little need to send handwritten letters.

제안: 回答较好但有重复与表达不自然之处（例如“on behalf of other people”）。可先概括一般情况，再给个人例子，使用连接词如“however”或“for example”。去掉重复句子以提高简洁性。

예시: I think fewer people keep handwritten letters nowadays, but some still do. For example, I keep a whole box of letters from my childhood because I cherish those friendships and enjoy rereading them.

제안: 回答有几处不自然或不相关的表达（如“outschooled, an international person”不清晰）。应先直接回答，再给1–2个简洁原因或例子，避免填充词“uh”。使用连词如“because”或“so”。

예시: Yes, I usually carry a notebook and a pen because I prefer jotting down ideas by hand. For instance, I write shopping lists and quick reminders to help me remember tasks.

제안: 回答含糊且语法和用词错误较多（例如“quote origami, a paper grain”不明确，“be a host to remind myself”不通）。应用清晰的句子描述具体活动并用连接词如“for example”或“also”。尽量在五句内把握结构：主题句+细节。

예시: As a child I enjoyed using paper for different activities. For example, I practiced my handwriting, folded origami animals like cranes, and made little notes to remind myself of chores.

× Unfortunately no. We are used to. I use cell phones, computers, so we are text messaging our friends almost every day.

✓ Unfortunately, no. We are used to it. I use cell phones and computers, so we text-message our friends almost every day.

这句话存在时态和表达不完整问题。“We are used to”后面需要接宾语（it / doing something）来说明习惯的内容，原句缺少宾语；另外“we are text messaging”用进行时不太合适，表述经常或习惯性的动作应使用一般现在时，所以改为“we text-message”。同时并列名词之间用“and”。建议：用一般现在时描述习惯，并补全需要的宾语（例如 it 或动名词短语）。

× Well, I can't say it's on behalf of other people, but in case of myself, I do keep some handwritten letters from my childhood because I cherish the friendship with my friends.

✓ Well, I can't speak for other people, but as for myself, I do keep some handwritten letters from my childhood because I cherish my friendships.

“on behalf of other people”用法不当，常用表达是“speak for other people”。“in case of myself”不自然，应改为“as for myself”或“as far as I'm concerned”。“cherish the friendship with my friends”重复且冗长，改为“cherish my friendships”。建议学习固定搭配（speak for, as for）并避免冗余表达。

× But I still have a whole box with handwritten letters.

✓ But I still have a whole box of handwritten letters.

介词短语用法问题：英语中常用“a box of letters”而不是“a box with letters”。“with”会改变含义或显得不自然。建议记住常见数量结构如“a box of...”、“a pile of...”。（此处错误归类为单复数/名词搭配问题）

× Yes I do, I am kind of outschooled, an international person. Uh, I'm still keeping the habit of writing something down with my hand because that may improve my memory.

✓ Yes I do. I'm kind of homeschooled / schooled abroad, an international person. Uh, I still keep the habit of writing things down by hand because that may improve my memory.

原句“outschooled”不是常用词，可能想表达“homeschooled”或“schooled abroad”。“keeping the habit of”搭配不自然，常用“keep the habit of”或“have a habit of”。“writing something down with my hand”介词搭配错误，应为“write something down by hand”。建议使用正确固定搭配：by hand, keep the habit of, homeschooled / schooled abroad。

× For example, I practice my handwriting on the paper. Sometimes I use it to quote origami, a paper grain or some animals. And also I use it to be a host to remind myself.

✓ For example, I practiced my handwriting on paper. Sometimes I used it to fold origami figures, paper cranes, or some animals. I also used it as a notepad to remind myself.

句中有多处动词和词汇搭配问题：1) “practice my handwriting on the paper”更自然为“practice my handwriting on paper”或“practiced my handwriting on paper”；2) “use it to quote origami, a paper grain or some animals”表达混乱，应为“use it to fold origami figures, such as paper cranes or animals”；3) “use it to be a host to remind myself”不通顺，意图应为“use it as a notepad/to remind myself”。根据上下文为过去儿童时期，时态应使用过去时。建议：注意动词搭配（fold origami, use as a notepad）并根据语境使用正确时态和动名词形式。