Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer concise, grammatically correct and coherent. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use past tense consistently for past activities and avoid filler words and repetition.

예시: Yes. In junior high I made many paper crafts using plain printer paper. For example, I folded paper into toy rifles and small models, and classmates often asked me to make one for them.

제안: Answer directly and use correct tense. Explain briefly why with a clear reason and one supporting detail. Avoid unfinished sentences and vague phrases like “physical data” or trailing thoughts.

예시: No, I rarely write physical letters anymore because email and messaging apps are much more convenient. For instance, I usually send emails for work and use messaging apps to keep in touch with friends.

제안: State your opinion clearly and support it with a specific reason and example. Use linking words (however, because, for example) and correct vocabulary (handwritten, typed, inconvenient). Avoid unclear phrases and incomplete sentences.

예시: I think fewer people keep handwritten letters today because most communication is typed on phones or computers. For example, people prefer emails or messages since they are faster and easier to store.

제안: Give a short direct answer and one clear reason. Use correct verb forms and complete the thought. If mentioning forgetting words, explain briefly how that relates to not using pens.

예시: No, I don't usually carry paper or pens because I rarely need them. For example, I haven't bought a pen in years since I use my phone for notes and writing by hand feels awkward now.

제안: Answer in past tense and provide one or two specific examples of crafts you made. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Keep to a maximum of five sentences.

예시: As a child I enjoyed making paper crafts, especially models like little rifles and toy vehicles. Many of my friends admired my skill, so I often made models for them as gifts.

× Yes, during my junior high school I do a lot of craft by just the white a a Forbes paper was used to print documents.

✓ Yes, during junior high school I did a lot of crafts using plain white office paper that was used to print documents.

The student mixes present and past tense; the activity refers to a past period so past tense 'did' is required (Present tense issue). Also plural 'crafts' is correct for multiple items (Singular and plural issue) and word order and article use are adjusted for clarity. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past experiences and pluralize countable nouns when appropriate.

× I do the model of rifle or play it and many of my.

✓ I made model rifles and sometimes played with them, and many of my friends did too.

Original is incomplete and lacks proper verbs and objects (Sentence structure errors). It also needs past tense 'made' to match past time. Suggestion: make sentences complete with subject, verb, and object; use plural for multiple models and clarify 'many of my friends'.

× No, now it is uh, e-mail become more and more popular and it can be so convenient, so I didn't use physical data anymore.

✓ No, now email has become more and more popular and it is very convenient, so I don't use physical mail anymore.

Mixes tenses: 'become' should be present perfect 'has become' to describe a change up to now (Present tense issue). 'didn't use' is past and should be present 'don't use' to match current habit. 'physical data' is incorrect word choice; 'physical mail' or 'paper mail' is appropriate. Suggestion: use present perfect to describe changes and simple present for current habits.

× What's more important is that the stamp can be just a style instead of.

✓ What's more important is that stamps can be just decorative rather than necessary.

Sentence is unfinished and article/use of 'the stamp' is awkward (Article errors). 'stamp' should be plural 'stamps' when speaking generally. Replace vague 'style' with 'decorative' and complete the comparison. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements and finish comparative structures.

× Many people began to write letters by computers or mobile phones and less people use real pen because it can be not so convenient and they're and the worthy ride can be ugly.

✓ Many people now write letters on computers or mobile phones, and fewer people use real pens because handwriting can be inconvenient and messy.

Mixes past 'began' with present situation; use present simple 'now write' to describe current habits (Present tense issue). 'less people' should be 'fewer people' (Incorrect use of quantifiers). 'real pen' should be 'real pens' (Singular and plural issue). 'worthy ride' is nonsensical; intended 'handwriting' and 'ugly' replaced with 'messy'. Suggestion: use present tense for current trends, 'fewer' for countable nouns, and correct noun forms.

× It is.

✓ It is messy or illegible.

Fragmentary sentence; 'It is.' lacks information (Sentence structure errors). Complete the thought by specifying what 'it' refers to. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments; ensure sentences express a full idea.

× No, I hadn't buy a new pen for a long time because I didn't use it even once a year and nowadays I even forget some words when I tend to use.

✓ No, I haven't bought a new pen for a long time because I don't use it even once a year, and nowadays I even forget some words when I try to write.

Uses past perfect 'hadn't buy' incorrectly; present perfect 'haven't bought' fits for an action continuing to the present (Past tense issue). 'didn't use' should be present 'don't use' for current habit (Present tense issue). 'when I tend to use' is incorrect and incomplete; change to 'when I try to write'. Suggestion: use present perfect for actions continuing to present, and use clear verbs for intention/attempts.

× I like to do some handcraft like the model of clear or rifle and even pestle and many of my friends, many of my friends admire my capability to do the VV models.

✓ I liked doing crafts such as models of cars or rifles and even small tools, and many of my friends admired my ability to make these models.

Talking about childhood requires past tense 'liked' (Present tense issue). 'handcraft' should be 'crafts'; 'model of clear' unclear, likely 'models of cars'; 'pestle' unclear so use 'small tools' or similar. Repetition 'many of my friends' removed and 'admire' changed to past 'admired'. Suggestion: use past tense for childhood activities, choose correct vocabulary, avoid repetition, and use 'ability' for capability.