Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and fluency: start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, reduce repetition, and add one specific detail. Link ideas with a short connector.

예시: Yes, I used to make paper crafts when I was a child. For example, I often folded paper planes and boats, and sometimes made simple cars out of cardboard. Those activities were fun and helped me be creative.

제안: Speak more naturally and correct grammar: state your opinion directly, use correct word forms (e.g., "is not convenient", "more popular"), avoid filler words and repetition, and provide a brief reason or example.

예시: Not really. Physical letters are not convenient for me now because email and messaging are much faster and more popular. I usually email or text friends and family instead.

제안: Clarify and organize: use one clear topic sentence, correct noun phrases ("handwritten letters"), and give a brief reason with linking words (e.g., "because"). Avoid vague words and fix grammar.

예시: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters because they find them more meaningful and personal. For example, people might keep letters from loved ones as mementos since handwriting can express emotion better than digital messages.

제안: Make a concise direct response and correct expressions: say "No, I don't" then explain briefly. Use clear phrases like "I'm used to relying on my phone" and avoid fragmented sentences and repetition.

예시: No, I don't usually carry paper and pens when I go out. I'm used to relying on my phone for notes and reminders, so I rarely bring a notebook or pen.

제안: Organize into a topic sentence and two supporting details: use past tense consistently, avoid repetition, and give a specific example of activities and reason for practicing writing.

예시: As a child, I often used paper for handicrafts and for practicing my handwriting. For instance, I made paper models and copied sentences to improve my writing because my teacher encouraged practice.

× Sure, I made handcraft when I was child, like plane, ship, car.

✓ Sure, I made handicrafts when I was a child, like planes, ships, and cars.

Errors: 'handcraft' should be plural 'handicrafts' (singular/plural) and spelled correctly; 'when I was child' needs article 'a child'; the listed nouns (plane, ship, car) should be plural to match 'made' many items; commas and conjunction 'and' improve clarity. Suggestion: use correct plural forms and include the article 'a' before 'child'.

× Use paper to make it I think.

✓ I used paper to make them, I think.

Error: tense mismatch and structure. The student likely refers to past action, so use past tense 'used'. 'It' should be 'them' to refer to multiple items. Also the clause order should be natural: 'I used paper to make them' followed by 'I think'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and match pronouns to number.

× I feel so interesting.

✓ I found it very interesting.

Error: 'interesting' describes the object, not the speaker's feeling; 'I feel so interesting' is incorrect. Use 'I found it very interesting' or 'I felt very interested'. Suggestion: choose correct adjective or say 'interested' for speaker's state.

× Actually note I think physical letters is is is not convenient for me nowadays.

✓ Actually, I think physical letters are not convenient for me nowadays.

Errors: extraneous 'note' and repeated 'is is is' removed; 'physical letters' is plural so verb should be 'are' (subject-verb agreement). Suggestion: remove filler words and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Nowadays e-mail is is more convenient and popularity.

✓ Nowadays e-mail is more convenient and popular.

Errors: repeated 'is', wrong form 'popularity' (noun) should be adjective 'popular'. Suggestion: use parallel adjectives 'convenient and popular'.

× I think some people still keep handwriting letters day because handwriting letter is have more value and more meaningful.

✓ I think some people still keep handwritten letters these days because handwriting has more value and is more meaningful.

Errors: 'handwriting letters day' should be 'handwritten letters these days'; 'handwriting letter is have' incorrect verb forms: use 'handwriting has' or 'handwritten letters have'. Also 'more meaningful' needs verb 'is' or 'are' to link. Suggestion: use correct adjective 'handwritten', add 'these' for time expression, and ensure correct verb forms.

× It can express someone's emotion.

✓ They can express someone's emotions.

Error: 'It' mismatches plural 'letters' so use 'They'; 'emotion' generally plural 'emotions' when speaking generally. Suggestion: match pronoun number to antecedent and pluralize general nouns.

× Actually no, I often go out, take my phone.

✓ Actually no, when I go out I usually take my phone.

Errors: sentence fragments and word order. Add 'when' to indicate condition and 'usually' for frequency. Suggestion: use full clause with subject and verb and correct adverb placement.

× If not I think paper and pen in nowadays is no fam is no familiar.

✓ If not, I think paper and pens nowadays are not familiar to me.

Errors: awkward phrase 'in nowadays' and repeated 'is no fam is no familiar'. Use 'nowadays' and plural 'pens', verb 'are', and 'not familiar to me'. Suggestion: simplify to 'paper and pens nowadays are not familiar to me'.

× When I was child I often use paper to did some handicraft and writing some words in there because I should practice my writing because I when I was try I I still need to write a good words.

✓ When I was a child I often used paper to make handicrafts and to write words because I needed to practice my writing.

Multiple errors: missing article 'a' before 'child'; tense consistency — use past tense 'used' and 'needed'; 'did some handicraft' → 'make handicrafts'; remove redundant and fragmented clauses. Suggestion: keep sentences concise, use correct past tense forms, and proper infinitive structures ('to make', 'to write').