Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, avoid hedging words like 'probably' and 'if I can recall'. Use linking words to add one or two specific details (when, who, what exactly you made) and keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes. When I was in kindergarten I often made paper crafts with my classmates; for example, we folded and decorated paper crabs inspired by anime characters. I remember colouring them and sticking on little eyes to make them look cute.

제안: Fix grammar and vocabulary mistakes and be specific about frequency and purpose. Use a clear topic sentence, then add concise supporting details and a linking word (e.g., 'for example'). Avoid unclear phrases like 'judge down'.

예시: Yes, I still write things by hand quite often. For example, I regularly make shopping lists and jot down quick reminders for upcoming classes because writing helps me remember tasks better.

제안: Clarify your opinion and correct vocabulary and grammar. Start with a general statement about people today, then give your personal view with specific reason and one example. Avoid unrelated words like 'tattoos' and names that confuse meaning.

예시: Many people prefer digital messages now, but I personally keep some handwritten letters. For instance, I save notes that include friends' phone numbers and birthday messages because they feel sentimental and remind me of special moments.

제안: Resolve the contradiction and use accurate, simple sentences. Begin with a clear answer (yes or no), then explain why using one or two specific examples. Avoid typos and unclear phrases like 'drop down SH' and 'quit ideas.'

예시: No, I don't usually carry paper and pens because I use my phone for everything. For example, I keep shopping lists and ideas in a note-taking app and set alarms as reminders.

제안: Be concise and correct repetition. Give a clear topic sentence about what you liked, then add a specific detail or memory and a linking word. Avoid contradictory or unclear terms like 'sandpaper crabs'.

예시: As a child I loved making paper crafts, especially folding paper crabs. I also spent a lot of time drawing pictures and colouring them with my friends.

× Well I don't remember probably, but if I can recall I would say I've made some anime crabs using paper with my friends at kindergarten.

✓ Well, I don't remember exactly, but if I can recall I would say I made some paper anime crabs with my friends in kindergarten.

The sentence mixes present perfect ('I've made') with a past time reference ('kindergarten'), so simple past ('I made') is correct. Also 'probably' placement and word choice improved: 'exactly' fits better. Preposition 'at kindergarten' is usually 'in kindergarten.' Keep tense consistent when referring to a completed past period.

× Well, definitely, I still write physical letters and knows I often have to judge down in both things by hand, for example shopping lists or quick reminders for my upcoming classes.

✓ Well, definitely, I still write physical letters and sometimes I often have to jot down both things by hand, for example shopping lists or quick reminders for my upcoming classes.

The original uses 'knows' incorrectly; subject is 'I', so third person singular verb 'knows' is wrong. Also 'judge down' is wrong collocation; the correct phrasal verb is 'jot down.' Removed the incorrect verb and added 'sometimes' to smooth meaning. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct verb choice.

× Well, it's a fast but for me personally, I still keep some handwritten letters because they often contain important content tattoos like my friend's phone numbers, so they can be sentimental, Keith says. That actually remind me of a special moments.

✓ Well, it's fast, but personally I still keep some handwritten letters because they often contain important content, like my friend's phone numbers, so they can be sentimental. That actually reminds me of special moments.

Multiple issues: sentence structure is confused ('it's a fast' unclear) and extraneous words ('tattoos', 'Keith says') seem incorrect. 'Remind' must agree with singular subject 'That', so use 'reminds'. 'A special moments' is incorrect article-number agreement; use 'special moments' or 'a special moment.' Removed unclear words and fixed subject-verb agreement and article usage.

× Well, not really. I really carry paper and pens with me because I always use my phone to take notes or I set reminders. For example, I use digital notes to drop down SH shopping lists and quit ideas.

✓ Well, not really. I don't usually carry paper and pens with me because I always use my phone to take notes or set reminders. For example, I use digital notes to jot down shopping lists and quick ideas.

Original has tense/meaning contradiction: 'I really carry' conflicts with 'not really.' Changed to 'I don't usually carry.' 'Drop down' is incorrect collocation; correct is 'jot down.' 'Quit ideas' is a typo for 'quick ideas.' Maintain present habitual tense and correct verb phrases.

× Well, with paper I would say I used to make sandpaper crabs when I was younger I often made paper crabs or maybe draw a lot.

✓ Well, with paper I would say I used to make paper crabs when I was younger; I often made paper crabs or drew a lot.

Mixes tenses and forms: 'used to make' is fine, but 'draw a lot' should be past tense 'drew' to match. 'Sandpaper crabs' seems wrong—likely 'paper crabs.' Added punctuation and consistent past tense for completed past habits.