Paper— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, correct vocabulary and grammar, avoid repetition, and limit to 2–4 concise sentences. Use linking words for clarity (for example, "when I was a child" and "so"). Replace incorrect words ("flop", "crime") with accurate verbs ("fold") and phrases.

예시: Yes. When I was a child I often folded pieces of paper to make paper planes. I enjoyed testing which shapes flew best, so I would try different wing designs to see which flew the farthest.

제안: Good direct response but reduce redundancy and tighten wording. Begin with a concise topic sentence ("No, I don't"). Use one or two supporting details and linking words like "because" or "so". Avoid filler words ("actually", "just").

예시: No, I don't. Because email and messaging apps are much more convenient and faster, I rarely write physical letters anymore.

제안: Answer directly and improve grammar and word choice. Use linking words ("for example", "therefore") correctly. Be specific about how common handwritten letters are and avoid unclear phrases like "freeing out"—use "disappearing" or "becoming rare."

예시: I don't think handwritten letters are common today. For example, my daughter mainly uses WhatsApp and Instagram to talk with friends, so handwritten letters have become quite rare.

제안: Good content but improve sentence structure and punctuation. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a brief reason with a linking phrase like "for example". Keep it within 2–3 sentences and correct grammar ("I keep a pen for emergencies").

예시: I rarely carry a notebook, but I usually have a pen in my bag. I keep it for emergencies, for example to write down phone numbers or quick notes.

제안: Be concise and use correct tense and vocabulary: say "I liked drawing" and "crayons". Provide one specific detail or memory and use a linking word if needed. Limit to 1–3 sentences.

예시: As a child I liked drawing on paper, usually with crayons. I often drew animals and colorful landscapes, which became one of my favorite hobbies.

× I remember when I was a kid I usually flop some pieces of paper to make a plane for as a toys.

✓ I remember when I was a kid I usually folded some pieces of paper to make a plane as a toy.

'Flop' is incorrect for folding paper; the correct verb is 'fold'. 'Usually' with past habit should be paired with 'folded'. 'A toys' is wrong: 'a' requires singular noun 'toy'. Use past simple 'folded' to match 'when I was a kid'. Suggestion: Use 'fold' for making paper planes and ensure verb tense and noun number agree.

× So I think this is my only memory for making a crime a crime as with paper.

✓ So I think this is my only memory of making something like that with paper.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and contains repeated words and inappropriate word 'crime'. Use the phrase 'memory of' instead of 'memory for', and 'making something like that with paper' conveys the intended meaning. Suggestion: keep sentences simple and check for accidental repeated or wrong words.

× Unfortunately, no, because actually advanced technology just like email is very convenient and ubiquitous in our in modern world.

✓ Unfortunately, no, because advanced technologies like email are very convenient and ubiquitous in our modern world.

Use plural 'technologies' or 'technology' consistently; 'just like' is unnecessary—'like' is sufficient. Remove extra 'in' before 'modern world'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'technologies... are'. Suggestion: simplify phrases and check extra words.

× So we seldom write physical letters in our daily life.

✓ So we seldom write physical letters in our daily lives.

Use the idiomatic plural 'daily lives' when referring to people's everyday routines. Tense is present simple which is correct; adjust noun form for natural expression.

× I don't think physical letter is common nowadays.

✓ I don't think physical letters are common nowadays.

'Physical letter' should be plural 'physical letters' and requires plural verb 'are'. Alternatively, use 'a physical letter is' for singular. Ensure noun-verb number agreement. Suggestion: match singular/plural forms between subject and verb.

× For example, my daughter usually use WhatsApp, TikTok, Instagram for communication with her friends and classmates.

✓ For example, my daughter usually uses WhatsApp, TikTok, and Instagram to communicate with her friends and classmates.

Subject-verb agreement: 'daughter' requires third-person singular verb 'uses'. Use 'to communicate' or 'for communicating' for purpose. Include 'and' in lists for clarity. Suggestion: remember third-person -s and use consistent infinitive or -ing structures.

× So I would say physical letter is freeing out from our daily life.

✓ So I would say physical letters are fading out of our daily life.

Phrase 'freeing out' is incorrect. Use 'fading out' or 'disappearing'. Also correct noun number and verb agreement: 'letters are'. Use 'out of' not 'from' in this context. Suggestion: choose correct collocations like 'fade out' or 'disappear'.

× I rarely carry a notebook but I usually have a pen with me in my bag I keep my pens for emergency for example to write down phone numbers and notes when needed

✓ I rarely carry a notebook, but I usually have a pen with me in my bag. I keep my pen for emergencies, for example to write down phone numbers and notes when needed.

Run-on sentence: split into two sentences. Use singular 'pen' consistently or plural 'pens' if more than one. 'for emergency' should be 'for emergencies'. Add commas for clarity. Ensure parallel structure. Suggestion: avoid run-ons, use punctuation, and pluralize 'emergency' when speaking generally.

× When I was a kid, I liked drawing paintings so I usually use crayon and then draw on the paper.

✓ When I was a kid, I liked drawing pictures, so I usually used crayons to draw on paper.

Mix of past and present tenses: 'liked' is past, so follow with past 'used' not 'use'. 'Drawing paintings' is awkward; 'drawing pictures' is natural. 'Crayon' should be plural 'crayons' when speaking generally, and 'on the paper' simplifies to 'on paper'. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense for childhood activities and use natural collocations.